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Review of chapter "Prologue" from abyss
Review:
Bring the Scoobies' on!! I can't wait seeing Buffster enter the GateZone.

Will you pair her with someone from SGC? Or back to Captain Cardboard?

Buffy's seriously in needs of something to burn off her super extra energy.

Talking about H&H, that's really something worth looking forward.

Good luck. :D
Comments from author:
Let's just say that while I like Riley as a character, he really isn't right for Buffy. Only one author I've ever read wrote a believable Buffy/Riley story. That was Alexandra Huxley in her stories Celestial Light and Butterfly Ops.

The good news is that Buffy will have some help with that whole H&H issue.

Thanks for your review.
Review By [abyss] • Date [23 Oct 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Five" from (Current Donor)Shieldage
Review:
Chapter Three:--They had immediately shut down the gate, not wanting hundreds of armed Jaffa flooding the gate room.

Hey, please delete that. Stargate's a one-way-at-a-time portal, as Riley indicates later in the paragraph. Don't need to change anything else, just one sentence too many.

Whoa. High-energy Buffy Chapter :)

Cool
Comments from author:
Thanks for your comment. Definitely working on refining the technology writing. Too long since I watched the show. Maybe I should do a refresher course.
Review By [(Current Donor)Shieldage] • Date [23 Oct 07] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Five" from TonyTheJew
Review:
Great chapter up-date soon
Review By [TonyTheJew] • Date [23 Oct 07] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from (Current Donor)MaxGSandeman
Review:
Excitement for Riley and boredom for Buffy. Interesting mix.
Was Faith affected by the activation spell?
Review By [(Current Donor)MaxGSandeman] • Date [11 Oct 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from link
Review:
I love how you write Buffy. She's so Buffy. Did I make sense? I seriously love your fic.
Review By [link] • Date [11 Oct 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from RevDorothyL
Review:
Adored the way Jack's mind was blown by Riley's four-man SG team capturing 70 Jaffa (and his grief over never being able to give Riley s**t for taking along way too much firepower again) in the previous chapter.

And this latest chapter kept me in nearly perpetual silent giggles. Loved Buffy's way of mentally mis-spelling Jean-Luc Picard's name, even while cursing Andrew's bad influence on her, and I totally got a kick out of lines like the following: "They just seemed to disappear like rats deserting a sinking ship whenever Buffy fun time rolled around . . ."

Keep up the good work!
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review.
Review By [RevDorothyL] • Date [10 Oct 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from JoeHundredaire
Review:
Err, you do know that the Stargate only works one way, right? They wouldn't need to fear Jaffa coming back through an open wormhole, because it's impossible for someone to pass the wrong way. They'd just be disintegrated.
Comments from author:
Sigh. I screwed the pooch on this one, folks. I'm going to have to go back on rewrite the chapter. So much for watching 9 seasons of Stargate. Maybe I need to go back and watch them again.

Thanks very much for the constructive criticism.
Review By [JoeHundredaire] • Date [10 Oct 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from Amaya
Review:
"Pulled out of her thoughts for a moment by an especially loud BLAH, she briefly looked up, assessed the excitement levels as not"

*lol*
And from that point on the laughs get coming
Comments from author:
I am glad you enjoyed it.
Review By [Amaya] • Date [10 Oct 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from TonyTheJew
Review:
You have to make Riley say a comment about job security when Buffy or who ever comes in.
up-date soon
Review By [TonyTheJew] • Date [10 Oct 07] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from war
Review:
good story looking forward to your next chapter.
Review By [war] • Date [10 Oct 07] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from Clee
Review:
So many rookie mistakes. These guys wouldn't last five minutes in the jungles of Bolivia against K'luntre or N'katul demons. They would have shattered like glass the first night, when things from their worst nightmares flowed from the shadows to kill. Riley and his squads had survived that and worse.
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I think you're having Riley been a little too hard on the Jaffa here.

Quite frankly, from what Ive seen of the SG Teams, they wouldn't have lasted 60 seconds at best against the same demons Riley is musing about.

Hell, just how long would SG1 would've lasted against the aliens from the movie "Aliens"?


30 seconds?
Comments from author:
I agree with you. However, the point I made was that the Jaffa Riley faced were rookies fresh out of training. Experienced troops with solid leadership would have never been caught out like that in the ambush Riley and his team set. Like American troops in Vietnam, they would have known to use a point man, and spread out. Instead they pursued him as a group.

I also agree with you about the SG Teams in dealing with demons. That is one reason Riley and Graham are excelling in the SG hierarchy. Because what they are dealing with just isn't that bad compared to the what they've dealt with in the past.

Thanks for the review and constructive criticism.
Review By [Clee] • Date [10 Oct 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from manic
Review:
Yeah for extra ordinance!
Comments from author:
You can never have too many guns! Never!
Review By [manic] • Date [2 Oct 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from link
Review:
Argh! A cliffie! I agree with Riley. Better be prepared even if it seems overkill. Please update soon okay. Want to know what happens next to Riley.
Comments from author:
Thanks!
Review By [link] • Date [29 Sep 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from (Current Donor)Shieldage
Review:
Huh, cliffhanger in a cliffhanger :D

Good action.
Review By [(Current Donor)Shieldage] • Date [28 Sep 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from RevDorothyL
Review:
Losing one point for a cliffhanger ending, which I consider dirty pool when you've got me actually ROOTING for Riley and his guys.

Seriously, though, I'm looking forward to the continuation of this story.
Review By [RevDorothyL] • Date [28 Sep 07] • Rating [9 out of 10]
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