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Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from (Moderator)JoeHundredaire
Review:
Err, you do know that the Stargate only works one way, right? They wouldn't need to fear Jaffa coming back through an open wormhole, because it's impossible for someone to pass the wrong way. They'd just be disintegrated.
Comments from author:
Sigh. I screwed the pooch on this one, folks. I'm going to have to go back on rewrite the chapter. So much for watching 9 seasons of Stargate. Maybe I need to go back and watch them again.

Thanks very much for the constructive criticism.
Review By [(Moderator)JoeHundredaire] • Date [10 Oct 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from Amaya
Review:
"Pulled out of her thoughts for a moment by an especially loud BLAH, she briefly looked up, assessed the excitement levels as not"

*lol*
And from that point on the laughs get coming
Comments from author:
I am glad you enjoyed it.
Review By [Amaya] • Date [10 Oct 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from TonyTheJew
Review:
You have to make Riley say a comment about job security when Buffy or who ever comes in.
up-date soon
Review By [TonyTheJew] • Date [10 Oct 07] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from war
Review:
good story looking forward to your next chapter.
Review By [war] • Date [10 Oct 07] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from Clee
Review:
So many rookie mistakes. These guys wouldn't last five minutes in the jungles of Bolivia against K'luntre or N'katul demons. They would have shattered like glass the first night, when things from their worst nightmares flowed from the shadows to kill. Riley and his squads had survived that and worse.
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I think you're having Riley been a little too hard on the Jaffa here.

Quite frankly, from what Ive seen of the SG Teams, they wouldn't have lasted 60 seconds at best against the same demons Riley is musing about.

Hell, just how long would SG1 would've lasted against the aliens from the movie "Aliens"?


30 seconds?
Comments from author:
I agree with you. However, the point I made was that the Jaffa Riley faced were rookies fresh out of training. Experienced troops with solid leadership would have never been caught out like that in the ambush Riley and his team set. Like American troops in Vietnam, they would have known to use a point man, and spread out. Instead they pursued him as a group.

I also agree with you about the SG Teams in dealing with demons. That is one reason Riley and Graham are excelling in the SG hierarchy. Because what they are dealing with just isn't that bad compared to the what they've dealt with in the past.

Thanks for the review and constructive criticism.
Review By [Clee] • Date [10 Oct 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from manic
Review:
Yeah for extra ordinance!
Comments from author:
You can never have too many guns! Never!
Review By [manic] • Date [2 Oct 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from link
Review:
Argh! A cliffie! I agree with Riley. Better be prepared even if it seems overkill. Please update soon okay. Want to know what happens next to Riley.
Comments from author:
Thanks!
Review By [link] • Date [29 Sep 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from (Current Donor)Shieldage
Review:
Huh, cliffhanger in a cliffhanger :D

Good action.
Review By [(Current Donor)Shieldage] • Date [28 Sep 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from RevDorothyL
Review:
Losing one point for a cliffhanger ending, which I consider dirty pool when you've got me actually ROOTING for Riley and his guys.

Seriously, though, I'm looking forward to the continuation of this story.
Review By [RevDorothyL] • Date [28 Sep 07] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from Marcel
Review:
Thank you. Yes, the Stargate tactics are incredibly stupid. Thanks for pointing that out :)

Of course, I do hate you for not presenting the plan :P
Comments from author:
Soon *he cackles evilly*
Review By [Marcel] • Date [28 Sep 07] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from war
Review:
good story looking forward to your next chapter.
Review By [war] • Date [28 Sep 07] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from dugleikoo
Review:
Riley is as crazy as his exgirlfriend. And that's sating alot.
Review By [dugleikoo] • Date [28 Sep 07] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from manic
Review:
LOL! I enjoyed everyone's perspective of Riley, and that they're now going to be let in on his secret. Oh, and I was sorry to read that his marriage had failed.
Review By [manic] • Date [12 Sep 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Prologue" from manic
Review:
Poor Riley. His usefulness eroded by teenage girls. At least when it happened with Buffy, she was in her 20's ;) I had never considered what might happen to Riley's mission after the Potentials were called. Thanks for sharing.
Review By [manic] • Date [12 Sep 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from abyss
Review:
I not-oh-so-secretly *wish* you would bring a certain slayer into the mix sometime, well , sooner or later would be great. The slayer in question by now should be as bored as Riley. Could use some excitement, eh? I'm also not one of Riley-bashing club, so I'm quite open to the idea of seeing them together again -- friends perhaps?
Review By [abyss] • Date [11 Sep 07] • Not Rated
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