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Review of chapter "Chapter Eleven—Thanksgiving" from (Past Donor)zephyrRS
Review:
Another great chapter with links to other new (to me) stuff thrown in. Enjoyable!

I may have asked this and forgotten. Is Connie an OC or based on a cross-over?

Keep writing!

;-)
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review. Connie is an OC, someone I put together as a foil for Cadet Buffy. 8)
Review By [(Past Donor)zephyrRS] • Date [12 May 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Eleven—Thanksgiving" from NaiveGhost
Review:
I like this story. Can't wait for more SG(1).

Keep writing!

;-)
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review. I'm glad you like it. 8)
Review By [NaiveGhost] • Date [12 May 08] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Eleven—Thanksgiving" from (Past Donor)lucidity
Review:
:) excellent
Comments from author:
Thanks. 8)
Review By [(Past Donor)lucidity] • Date [11 May 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eleven—Thanksgiving" from spring
Review:
I love this chapter. PLEASE please please update this wonderful fic again soon!
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review. More coming soonish... 8)
Review By [spring] • Date [11 May 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Eleven—Thanksgiving" from Bobboky
Review:
very very good
Comments from author:
Thank you. 8)
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [11 May 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eleven—Thanksgiving" from Lotusja
Review:
Great chapter. I love this story!
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review. I'm glad you love it!
Review By [Lotusja] • Date [10 May 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Eleven—Thanksgiving" from jennzabelle
Review:
Awesome!
"Hello, Connie, and welcome to the Happy House of Conversational Land Mines. Please watch your step."
I really liked seeing the remnants of L.A. Buffy and let-me-run-across-town-in-heels-to-rescue-Kendra-etal Buffy in AF Buffy. And it was nice to get some of Connie's background, too. I can see how Girly!Buffy and Mama!Joyce would be totally foreign to her experience, and I really feel for B having to keep her hair up and be secret identity gal once again. But Connie's bright, caring and curious. I'm not sure telling her would be the best thing ever, but she's definitely gonna keep noticing the oddities that are Buffy. It just remains to be seen how she'll react and how long it will take to make Buffy come clean if she ever does. I had totally forgotten Amy and it was weird but nice to see that Buffy is taking care of her in Willow's absence. I wonder if the Nox could cure her?
Well, I'm really glad I got to read and review this story so far. I eagerly await more!
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review. You called it with that one.

I wanted to flesh out Connie a bit, make her more three dimensional. I also wanted to contrast Buffy and Connie's lives pre-BCT. Still, though, they have more in common than not...

Connie will find out about Buffy one day, but who knows when?

Amy. I couldn't let anything happen to her, so I had Buffy 'rescue' her from Willow's parents...

Maybe the Nox could. After all, what they do? Magic...
Review By [jennzabelle] • Date [10 May 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten—First Year: The Assignment" from jennzabelle
Review:
Ah, the plot thickens!
I liked Connie's reaction to Jack's offer and Buffy's demand that Connie Not Tell Her the number of papers Buffy now had to do. I loved Joyce's mini-perspective and baking binge. The pecan pie story was a nice touch. I also liked how Buffy got awkward and quiet with Connie in the car and afterwards. Joyce probably called B's reaction to telling new people about her secret identity correctly - Giles, Xander, Willow and the rest of the peripheral Scoobies are a loss she's still learning to deal with in unexpected ways. Will Connie end up knowing B's secret and if so will it be before or after Jack figures out there's something fishy going on?
I can't wait to see how well Operation: Preemptive Strike goes down. And I hope we get the team's reaction to Buffy at some point.
I'm glad there's more to read, but I'm almost caught up! Help!
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review. I tried to flesh the characters out by having them do normal things...

Will Connie learn Buffy's secret? Maybe. As trust builds, Buffy will feel increasingly like telling her...

You'll find out about that soonish... 8)
Review By [jennzabelle] • Date [10 May 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Nine—First Year: Multiple Threats" from jennzabelle
Review:
Excellent! I really liked what you did with Connie here, giving us another perspective on Buffy and the Zoo and how the Slayer comes across to normal people. Her insights helped flesh out Buffy's character and adjustment in a way that even Capt. Billings and Jack haven't. That was very well done of you. I also liked the way you gave B a new archenemy and a plan to deal with him. I can see Buffy both knowing and not caring what men thought of her as long as they left her alone. Not that she has anything to fear physically, but there are always other ways for people with a grudge to do you down. I liked the medieval knight analogy - I tend to think of Buffy as a knight errant in this story, going off on her own quest with the support of her one remaining loved one for the greater truth and justice of, well, everyone. I also liked the non-meeting of SG-1 and Buffy here. I was excited to see you bring them close together, and I'd really love to know what the team thought of her or continues to think of her as Jack stays involved in her career. What happens when Jack disappears for a while - end of S2, S3, The Light, etc. - does Buffy notice and get some clue about how demanding the Stargate program can be? How does he pass those absences off?
Well, if you can't tell, I really liked this chapter and I'm looking forward to more.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review. I'm glad you liked Connie and her perspective of Buffy.

Buffy's archenemy is a bit pathetic, but does have the potential to destroy her career and prevent her from fulfilling her destiny. So he must be stopped! 8)

Expect the other members of SG-1 to quiz Jack as time goes on and he continues to be Buffy's mentor. As far as what happens to Jack, there will interruptions if he's missing. Also, expect Buffy to notice if he gets hurt...
Review By [jennzabelle] • Date [10 May 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Eight—First Year: The Aftermath" from jennzabelle
Review:
Another great chapter. I liked Jack checking up on Buffy and her discomfiture at showing off bruises that will soon disappear with her Slayer healing. His 'adoption' of her should be an interesting circumstance when she joins the SGC - (I notice that he has begun mother henning her already!) and I like Joyce's questions about him. I also like that Buffy explains him as her military Giles, in a way. Oh, and I knew McNamara was destined to be a weasel of some kind, but I forgot he was involved in the Initiative - nice crossover even though B has left the Hellmouth. Joyce's establishment in the Springs also gives you some nice possibilities for linking her to the mountain indirectly - does Daniel come to browse? How does Joyce already knowing about the Stargate effect changes in her attitude about the people she meets from the mountain and vice versa, even if they don't know that she knows? Do she and Jack bond or otherwise hook up? What about Sam or Teal'c - I can totally see a stiff Teal'c enjoying hot chocolate at her kitchen island a la Spike! And, as usual, Joyce is the perfect mom. Bikes and pie. < sigh >

One question: who was Captain Miller? The ref? A medic? Did I miss his introduction before? Ooo - is it Graham? The only reason this gets a 9 out of 10 is that the transitions and time cuts between were a little choppy. Other than that, it was perfect.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review. Buffy was definitely self-conscious, but had to show him. Having another strong male figure in her life take an interest in her will go a long way towards dispelling that problem Buffy has with men.

You'll have to wait and find out how Joyce and SG-1 interact...

Captain Miller was Buffy's Unarmed Combat trainer. Not Graham, who was a Marine...
Review By [jennzabelle] • Date [10 May 08] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Eleven—Thanksgiving" from merkaba
Review:
I just found this story and read it all the way through in one sitting. I really enjoyed it. The characters were very in character. I can see Buffy doing really well in the Air Force if good people took an interest and encouraged her. I like how you had SG1 there at the dinner, but having them sort of be in the background for now. You surprised me. When they were there I sort of groaned and was scared you might go for the cliche Teal'c/Buffy 'you know he's a demon' meeting that is in so many of the Buffy/SG1 crossovers, but you didn't. You kept everything really well paced and the story realistic. Jack watching Buffy put away all that food was hilarious! Great Job! I really like you story and your writing. I am looking to seeing where you take this.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review. I'm glad you like the story.

I wanted Buffy to have an opportunity to receive an education and with Jack O'Neill interested, she won't be bored.

There's no way that Buffy would have noticed Teal'c. Not in that situation, with Jack there. Her attention was completely focused on him...

Jack thinks the Zoo must be starving the smacks... 8)
Review By [merkaba] • Date [10 May 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Seven—First Year: The Fight!" from jennzabelle
Review:
And Buffy fights the mini-Maybourne! (Nice use of Jack's favorite curse-name for the NID guy there!)

That was great. I loved Buffy's disgruntlement at having to be secret identity girl and her matter of fact knowledge of what makes her a superior fighter - mostly the ease of learning but don't forget the daily fights to the death - beyond her supernatural skills. Plus, Gator and Cali? Lemme guess, he's from Florida? I also liked that she may be the better fighter, but that Joe Wilson (btw, that's my Congressman's name) knew about wet spots from his greater experience. More unmaking of the Buffy Sue-ness possible here. I liked that Buffy had to consciously and consistently remind herself to slow down and be normal and that she was so wrapped up in taking her prey down that she totally blocked out the audience. The 'hesitant' raising of her arms was fabulous - I could just see it and it was the perfect thing to disarm anyone who thought she was too supernaturally good. Another lovely chapter.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review. I'm glad you liked the chapter. I agree with you that when you fight several times a night to the death, it tends to make one a hellavu fighter, more than any other training could possibly do (That's why I always thought Buffy could take even someone like Max from Dark Angel)...

Joe had a great deal of experience in the ring, but wasn't the better fighter. Still, he gave Buffy a run for her money (and some cracked ribs).

Buffy was shocked to be cheered by all of those officers. But who doesn't like to see the underdog win... 8)
Review By [jennzabelle] • Date [10 May 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Six—First Year: Buffy The Trainer" from jennzabelle
Review:
JACK! Yay! Woot!

Sorry, got a bit carried away. Another intriguing chapter showing B's gradual integration into the AF - I liked the complimentariness idea and Buffy's patient tutelage of older cadets as well as her initial panic. And how very Buffy to take the idea of teamwork and run with it for her training schedule, but to pick her tutor on the basis of a very nice tush. ;-) And I liked the Williams' guy's stubborness, it kept her from being a Buffy Sue.
And Jack! Always stirrin' shit up, just cuz he can! I like that he was willing to use her to pique the Marines, but not enough to get her hurt. He's got to have seen ballsy kids get themselves into trouble from following their egos to their logical ends, so of course he'd like to get her out of this. And I like that Capt. Billings stood up for B and that she was at least a tiny bit visually nervous when confronted with a superiorly superior officer. But Jack using his "I'm the colonel, that's why" voice on Buffy and then wandering off to make bets on her was the best. I'm really looking forward to the next chapter.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review. I'm glad you liked this one. 8)

Buffy is getting through to her fellow cadets just by being herself. They are responding to what I have always thought was tremendous personal charisma, whether they realize it or not. Buffy is slowly building the seeds of a power base...

I like Jack. I was hoping I got him right, the mix of smart aleck and caring officer. It sounds like I did good. 8)
Review By [jennzabelle] • Date [10 May 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Five—First Year: The Beginning" from jennzabelle
Review:
Really excellent chapter!
I liked the way you showed Buffy's anxiety about fitting in - she's very much not about rules and strict obedience, and I can see that being one of the harder adjustments for her - and the obvious physical differences between her and most of the other cadets (nice Mutt and Jeff reference). But you also did a very good job of slowly setting out the reasons Buffy might more than belong in the military - leadership she has in spades, also self-reliance, and teamwork is her Slayer specialty as a Scooby and member of 2 different "Chosen Two" pairings. Buffy has an inbuilt need to save the world, so why not start closer to home by serving her country? I also thought Buffy's lightening up internally was realistic. She has been bearing the weight of the world for 4 years, and it drags on her. Now she just bears the weight of her world, knowing that she has a respite from global responsibility while she trains to bear it in a different way. That probably feels a lot easier to her even if she has to worry about restraining her physical prowess and dealing with more observant people than Sunnydalers.
I liked the unarmed combat team plot twist, but I had one nitpick (who, me?): Whistler said the gate *would be* opened, implying it was before the movie. Daniel was on Abydos for about a year, so there wouldn't be any memos about strange stuff yet. Or I could be being too picky. Is this parallel to year one of SG-1? And the seven years Whistler implied before the destruction of Earth works out to Anubis' house call? I guess it will become clear later. Ignore me.
Again, a very satisfying installment. Keep up the good work.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review. Buffy is going through the same pains that all cadets go through. But she'll be okay. She's strong and will come out of this a better leader, more able to make decisions.

Buffy is starting to see the possibility of happiness. No constant fighting. Opportunity to learn, to be challenged intellectually for the first time in her life.

Good catch on the Whistler comment about the gate. You are right. Season 4 Buffy is running concurrently with Season 3 SG-1, so there is no way he would have said what he said.
Review By [jennzabelle] • Date [10 May 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Eleven—Thanksgiving" from (Past Donor)Ponder
Review:
Hmm. Without Willow, will Amy ever get de-ratted? I hope Amy the Rat isn't currently aging at a normal rat's pace... But going by canon that didn't appear to happen.

It looks like Buffy had at least a couple short opportunities to discuss her dream from chapter 10 with Joyce. (Before Connie awoke, and while Connie was in the shower). I wonder how soon TPTB will decide they need to drop more cluebricks on Buffy so she pays attention. :)

*** Ponder
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review. Will Amy be a rat forever? No. Will she become human soon? No. But someday... 8

Buffy will have spoken with Joyce before Connie woke up. It was only after that discussion that Buffy woke Connie. Expect a slow but steady bombardment of Buffy by the Powers as they prepare her for what is to come...
Review By [(Past Donor)Ponder] • Date [10 May 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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