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Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty-One—Truth and Lies" from evilredknight
Review:
Good chapter.
Nice thing with Kennedy.

One like quibble.

SERE training? I thought she had signed up for Soaring/Glider training?
Wasn't she concerned about the ground school/theory in a previous talk with Jack?
Comments from author:
Things change. Plus I found out that that typically, cadets do their glider training during the academic year and SERE during one of their 3 3-week summer terms.
Review By [evilredknight] • Date [13 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty-One—Truth and Lies" from Twoboots
Review:
I must say, I am rather curious as to how you are planning to introduce Dawn, when you get to that part of the story.
Review By [Twoboots] • Date [12 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty-One—Truth and Lies" from ecbookworm
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It's back! Glad to see this hasn't been abandoned. Wonderful chapters and looking forward to seeing Buffy back at training.
Review By [ecbookworm] • Date [12 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty-One—Truth and Lies" from DieselDriver
Review:
Just finished re-reading this chapter and I have a few thoughts. First, this statement by Col. Jack "they will have a brevet rank of 2nd lieutenant while working in my command." reminds me so much of the part of Robert A. Heinlein's "Starship Troopers" that I wanted to mention it. If, by some quirk of fate or events, you haven't read the book (the movie sucked worse than anything I've ever seen done to a book by the Hollywood crowd) then you really should. I believe this so firmly that if you do buy it, and don't think so, I will pay for the book and you can do whatever you like with it as long as you don't destroy it. The only difference was that in ST the trainees were brevetted to 3rd Lieutenant to place them in the chain of command instead of 2nd. This would serve the purpose of automatically putting any recently graduated and commissioned 2nd looie as ranking officer should they be the only ones alive to run things. Other than that there was no difference. Any ranking officer would still be smart to ask advice of the person experienced in the field. Jack tries to make sure his officers are the best of the best. OMGosh. Just had a thought. You should consider doing a buffy ST crossover. You can put her in a platoon right next to Rico's Roughneks. Call them "Cali's Crusaders" or something else alliterative. "Summer's Slammers" would be pretty good;-)
Comments from author:
I didn't get until I went back and reviewed the book. It's been nearly 25 years since I read it.

That is an interesting idea. I quite like it.

A Starship Troopers/BtVS Xover would be great.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [10 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty-One—Truth and Lies" from Senko
Review:
Something occured to me on re-reading this chapter hasn't Doyle mentioned several times that he works for the powers that be?

Seeing Notty's reaction to Kennedy's information about Buffy should be interesting and Andrews if.he ever finds out she's not only alive but being sent to battle aliens.

I wonder if Kennedy knows Buffy also helped kill Kakistos and the love she sent to help was Angelis?
Comments from author:
Brain damaged. Chapter fixed.

Kennedy will have heard various things about Buffy through the 'grapevine' as it were. And through her dreams as well.
Review By [Senko] • Date [9 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty-One—Truth and Lies" from dragondawn
Review:
Awesome story, very well put together!
Review By [dragondawn] • Date [8 Mar 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty-One—Truth and Lies" from DieselDriver
Review:
Darn! I sure wish someone would publish and point me toward a list of acronyms you authors use. As for this latest chapter, while it was a long time coming I pretty much wish you'd have taken even more time to better proofread and fix the errors. Here's an example of what I saw in this and at least one other spot

"but afterward, no one would ever she'd been hurt." Looks like you left out the word "know" and it should be:
"but afterward, no one would ever know she'd been hurt."

There are quite a few other minor errors in punctuation or spelling, stuff like that.

It took me awhile to get back into the scheme of things here due to the time since the previous chapter but one of my best bosses told me "if there's time to do it over, there's time to do it right the FIRST time."

Once I got my head around where we are in the story it was a good as ever. I am really enjoying your portrayal of the characters and their interactions. Really well done and very entertaining.

One of my other favorite authors finishes her stories or is very close to finishing, and only has to do a final re-edit/proofread just before publishing. She usually publishes updates to one of her ongoing stories at least twice a week and one at least once a week. The third is usually about half as long between updates as you have had here.

You're getting right up there with any of my favorite authors, fan fiction or paid and published fiction. Really Good!

I'm really looking forward to reading this all over again start to finish. That will be so great!

Thanks for publishing your work here. I really wish I had time to volunteer to proofread but it is so time consuming I don't get upset of it's not perfect.
Comments from author:
Sorry about the typos, but I could probably read this thing a million times and never catch them all. I did check it one more time.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [8 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty-One—Truth and Lies" from clarityfades
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I absolutely LOVED the meeting of the Slayers. Kennedy was cracking me up! I liked that Buffy saw through her bravado & that they managed to bond a bit. Will we see Buffy meet with Notty as well before she leaves? I think it could be good for all three of them if Kennedy's Watcher can form his own opinions of Buffy as well as hearing Kennedy's report. Especially since he was "capital I impressed" (lol) with the damage Buffy inflicted upon the demons trapped in the Initiative. & I really loved Jack's reactions to seeing Buffy relatively hale & hearty. I'm definitely looking forward to more of their interactions. & I know Buffy is keeping the Slayer secret from him for now, but I hope she tells him before she joins him at the Mountain. Absolutely fantastic chapter! More soon, please! & maybe more on "Things To Do in Colorado Springs When You're Bored"? Either way, I'm a super happy camper. This story grows on me more & more every update (& I loved it from start). :D
Comments from author:
Unfortunately, Notty won't see Buffy. Jack's not letting her out of his sight again before he delivers her to her mother's house.
Review By [clarityfades] • Date [8 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty-One—Truth and Lies" from LostDragon
Review:
Another great chapter. I want to thank you for the amount of updates you've given us lately. I'm assuming you have had these "in the can" for awhile and decided to post them enmass as the quality is as great as the rest of the story.
REALLY looking forward to the next term.
Comments from author:
ROFLMAO!

Ahh, no. Just the first one which I had about 2/3 written until about a week before I posted it. The rest I just wrote after rereading the story twice to make sure I didn't forget anything important. It was all I could do not to rwwrite a lot of it. Last couple of days, I have refreshing myself on my airborne research.
Review By [LostDragon] • Date [8 Mar 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty-One—Truth and Lies" from raxadian
Review:
Well Kennedy is a brat, but at least she has a real support team and friends.
Comments from author:
She sure does. I took all of the dregs of the Buffyverse and used them for her team.
Review By [raxadian] • Date [8 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty-One—Truth and Lies" from dreameralways
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This is still an absolutely amazing story. 31 chapters and I am still in love. You amaze me. I can't wait for more.
Review By [dreameralways] • Date [8 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty-One—Truth and Lies" from PiedraLumbre
Review:
It is extremely cool to find you've updated this. I think this story is something special with a wonderfully detailed examination of your premise and the ways it changes things. You have a few missing letters here and there, but overall it's very well written and I'm very much looking forward to your next update.
Comments from author:
Thanks. Yeah, I know about the typos. I still find them. Sadly I have betaless for some time. I just try to do the best I can.
Review By [PiedraLumbre] • Date [8 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty-One—Truth and Lies" from serenityselena
Review:
awesome chapter....
eagerly awaiting to read more ^_^
Review By [serenityselena] • Date [7 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty-One—Truth and Lies" from immortalsilence
Review:
WICKED LOVE IT THANKS MORE PRETTY PLEASE
Review By [immortalsilence] • Date [7 Mar 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty-One—Truth and Lies" from LordSchmodder
Review:
Yay - another update. Thankfully, you're on a roll, it seems.
I like this chapter, especially Kennedy and Buffy interacting.

Thanks for writing!
Comments from author:
Thanks. I wanted to bring them together to contrast how Buffy has grown.
Review By [LordSchmodder] • Date [7 Mar 14] • Not Rated
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