Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from
VillageOrchidReview:
Well, Joyce's last line sounded like Rupert's dialect, and Willow was sounding a little too British about having a go at Buffy... but otherwise some fine storytelling and what-ifness.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the feedback, it's appreciated.
I sometimes forget to Americanise my dialogue, and for that I apologise.
Vlad.
Review By [
VillageOrchid] • Date [14 Oct 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from
VillageOrchidReview:
Okay this is a surprise. A deamon race that is nearly identical to humanity, and the power being there from the start of the story... and the secret identity stakes established very well. Good establish. Looking forward to more about how Xander "recalls" his family history over time... and how that informs his take on what is going on in the present.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the feedback, it's appreciated.
This kind of story, where Xander suddenly gets all powerful, can easily go down the crapper if there isn't a lot of thought gone into the how and why. I thought that this would be a good way to do it without drastically changing who Xander is.
Vlad.
Review By [
VillageOrchid] • Date [14 Oct 07] • Rating [8 out of 10]
