Review of chapter "Chapter 6: Ending and Beginning of the Journey" from Netchka
Cool story. More please. I hope that you will be writing more chapters soonish. Thank you.
Review By [Netchka
] • Date [14 Aug 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 6: Ending and Beginning of the Journey" from CageFire
OK, really nice story. Although the one chapter, 10 grand being too expensive for a 5 bedroom house???? Where do you live that the housing market is that cheap? I mean 10 grand for a car maybe, but for a house? Then again this is sunnydale, they have to be ridiculously cheap for people to keep moving in.
Review By [CageFire
] • Date [26 Dec 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 6: Ending and Beginning of the Journey" from Mechconstrictor
Nice story. There are a few mistakes but nothing major. Any chance of seeing more of this story?
Review By [Mechconstrictor
] • Date [17 Aug 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 6: Ending and Beginning of the Journey" from Hawk
Good story. Can't wait for more
Review By [Hawk
] • Date [28 Dec 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 6: Ending and Beginning of the Journey" from deitarionSSokolow
I like this so far, but never specify exact technologies. It makes your story age poorly and, even if it didn't, Java is a crappy language to write an A.I. in. It's like executable paperwork (you have to write 10 lines of code to get the effect of one line in any sane language... and trust me, I know enough to say that) and it runs slowly too.
If you must specify an exact language (you don't need to), pick something that is either easy to code in (like Python or Ruby) or, especially for complex AIs, something that runs quickly like C, C++, or compiled LISP. Java is a pain to code in AND it runs slowly. (It's inferior to at least one other language in every single niche is can occupy)
Review By [deitarionSSokolow
] • Date [25 Oct 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 6: Ending and Beginning of the Journey" from Traveler
Having read both Lantern stories, I am entertained by both. You have headed off in a different direction so I see no problem. Thank you for sharing with us and will be tracking this story and watching for updates.
Review By [Traveler
] • Date [31 Jul 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 6: Ending and Beginning of the Journey" from Obsidian
Yes I would love to be your beta reader. already spotted some errors that need fixing.
And So far I love the story. Keep going.
Review By [Obsidian
] • Date [17 Jul 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 6: Ending and Beginning of the Journey" from Camreck
Interesting start to a story. I can't wait to see more. I love the Lantern and I wish I could read more of the comics.
Review By [Camreck
] • Date [10 Jun 08] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 6: Ending and Beginning of the Journey" from Dragonelf
...flight to Metrolopolis and...
Isn't the name of that city supposed to be spelled Metropolis?
Anyway I am looking forward to read any future chapters you might get inspired to add to this story.
Review By [Dragonelf
] • Date [25 Mar 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 6: Ending and Beginning of the Journey" from SAK
Good update, please update again soon.
Review By [SAK
] • Date [19 Mar 08] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 6: Ending and Beginning of the Journey" from Bobboky
Review By [Bobboky
] • Date [18 Mar 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 5: A house and onto Smallville!" from APS
keep up the good work.
Comments from author:
Review By [APS
] • Date [2 Mar 08] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 5: A house and onto Smallville!" from Ame
Oro... I really enjoyed this and hope its not been dropped.
Will this be a StarGate universe considering all the life Xander said he found out there?
Or a different universe?
How will the crazies in smallville take Xander wanting to buy all the 'Meteor Rocks'?
Heck, How will the Kents perceive it?
What's Lex going to do considering his rescue by Xander & Cordelia?
all random questions popped into my head and are requesting answers..
I really would hope to see more of this soon...
Comments from author:
I am planning a Stargate crossover on my 2nd story arc, but that's provided I can even finish the 1st arc of the story which is the current story.
Thanks for the reviews! I'll try my best to answer to questions =D
Review By [Ame
] • Date [26 Feb 08] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 1: The Ring" from eternalfox
I like it, however, having Xander dress as Sasuke is way overdone and if he knew the type of character he was...he would not have chosen him. Too bad, you didn't have him dress as Naruto himself...the unlimited powers of the nine-tails controlled by the power of the ring, a entity of unlimited power. Also, He and Naruto are very similar; ignored, ridiculed, abused...yet loyal, dedicated and full of potential.
Comments from author:
Yup, I really regret dressing Xander as a Naruto character, he got too many abilities now that it's hard to keep track of them. Oh... whatever was I thinking that time... Somemore he dressed as Sasuke... and according to the current manga... Sasuke's turning to be a bad guy. *grimace*
Review By [eternalfox
] • Date [6 Feb 08] • Rating [5 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 5: A house and onto Smallville!" from dogbertcarroll
Seems forced and lacking in details. Willow gained Sakura's memories and skills and didn't ask out Xander? Cordelia forcing herself to join them on their trip? Seems like you changed things around to force the relationships to follow canon. I've always hated that. It's a pet peeve of mine. If you change events then everything following them changes as well.
As trained ninja they could have dealt with the hijackers without resorting to the ring and Sakura shouldn't be having that great a problem with minor illusions on untrained humans.
Added: Even if Sakura got over Sasuke that shouldn't mean Willow suddenly doesn't feel anything for Xander. Sakura's courage in chasing her crush should have given Willow the courage to ask him out. Unless you are ditching the original characters and replacing them with the costumed ones and having them behave that way.
Human hijackers are easy to dispose of when you are used to dealing with demons and vamps. If you are hitting them from behind, it's a cakewalk and adding a touch of mojo makes it even easier. These guys are easier to deal with then Naruto style bandits.
Comments from author:
thanks for the feedback. I must admit that the later chapters are a bit of a rush job as I was distracted with some stuff at my workplace.
There's some reasons for things happening the way they are which I'm afraid now that I look back I didn't explain clearly. So just to run through them ;)
Willow didn't go after Xander because during their halloween possession, I state that Sakura and Sasuke's personalities were 18 years old. sakura's infautation with sasuke only lasted when she was 12 + yrs old in the anime. Through the later parts of the ongoing anime series, she gradually grew out of it though she still had an urgent drive to bring him back to konoha.
About their ninja abilities and why Willow has so much trouble, it's because she had only been practising for over a month plus, an incrediblely short time for her to have full mastery. And Xander didn't practice his ninja skills very much over that month. He didn't use his green lantern powers in public because with the amount of people present on the plane, there will be trouble if he's caught.
Thanks for pointing out these points ^^ I'll try to edit the previous chapters to add in the explanations when I have time.
Added: Hmm... you're right in that part, I guess I just wanted to go with conventional pairings so I overlooked that. maybe I can add in some xander/willow stuff in future. But nothing serious, I like Wills Oz together. ;)
Review By [dogbertcarroll
] • Date [10 Jan 08] • Not Rated