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Review of chapter "Chapter 2: Halloween Night" from rothos
Review:
Not bad. A few questions though.
1 I thought that each new Green Lantern crafted their own oath either that or used the universal oath. "In brightest day in darkest night no evil shall escape my sight. All those who worship Evil's power fear my might. Green Lantern's Light!"
2 I thought that the First Evil was sort of like the tarrasque, slumbering in every reality, waking every hundred or so years for a period of a couple weeks and then going into torpor again.
3 Is this going to turn into a West Coast Avengers subplot?
I could see Giles as one of two things, Dr. Fate or the Specter. Willow does make an interesting kunoichi. And I wonder if Andromeda Ascendant will eventually become real in Buffy's case a la Xander the Mercenary.
Comments from author:
Hi rothos, thanks for leaving a comment.

1.Well to clarify, when Xander got Rewana's memories, the oath that Xander recited is Rewana's oath. (She's telepathic so her oath reflects her abilities of the mind.) It's just Xander's way of honoring her memories.

2. About the First Evil, she's gonna be greatly AU to fit into the story, so don't expect canon references to pop up about her.

3. Erm what is a west coast avengers subplot? Sorry I read comics, but I am not exactly an avid reader. If you mean whether they are building up a hit squad in California, well, I guess you'll get the answer in chapter three.

Currently no plans for the Halloween characters to make a guest appearance, I don't want to overload the story with too much crossovers. =D
Review By [rothos] • Date [25 Oct 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2: Halloween Night" from Infinix
Review:
The odd amalgam of ideas you have here could turn into something interesting but you do have a problem with grammar especially with the dialogue. A lot of this feels like you ran it through a spell checker and then a grammar checker with out any human beta'ing. The spell check made sure there were no misspelled words but a few of them are only words that are close to what they are supposed to be and the grammar check made the dialogue feel awkward and just very wrong. Like so many stories nothing a good beta or two and some red ink couldn't fix.
Comments from author:
Yeah I know that I have problems with grammar, but currently don't have a beta reader cause I am afraid that I may not write consistently so as to keep up a schedule.

But thanks for the comment! Appreciate =)
Review By [Infinix] • Date [25 Oct 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 1: The Ring" from TimeTwist
Review:
Good story so far. Incidently since you asked a male Mary Sue is called either Marty Stu, Larry Stu or Gary Stu.

Ok, when are we going to get to see Clark Kent show up? That's the only reason I can see you using the green meteors, i.e kryptonite, although please don't make him like he is portrayed in Smallville. That version of Clark Kent makes Angel look chearful.
Comments from author:
thank you for the answer about Marty Stu (weird name) I'll write a smallville crossover chapters soon
Review By [TimeTwist] • Date [24 Oct 07] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2: Halloween Night" from ThunderGod
Review:
please please do not follow canon too much...events happening yes, exact canon NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOo

besides that It looks great and has great potential to change canon and the timeline....

canon retelling is boring and turns me off

ThunderGod
Comments from author:
haha I'll try not to disappoint you. =D
Review By [ThunderGod] • Date [23 Oct 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2: Halloween Night" from Kirallie
Review:
Not bad.
Comments from author:
thanks!
Review By [Kirallie] • Date [23 Oct 07] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2: Halloween Night" from Bobboky
Review:
sweet
Comments from author:
thanks Bobboky, nice seeing you again!
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [22 Oct 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2: Halloween Night" from Dragonhulk
Review:
Well this is turning out to be interesting indeed. My only fear is that you will have so many crossovers as time goes on that they will begin to trip over each other.
Review By [Dragonhulk] • Date [22 Oct 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2: Halloween Night" from Caliadragon
Review:
This is a very interesting story and I look forward to seeing what will happen next and how the new powers will affect the three of them.


Thanks
Calia
Comments from author:
thanks for the review Calia
Review By [Caliadragon] • Date [22 Oct 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2: Halloween Night" from mithrilandtj
Review:
Cool!

Not familiar with Naruto though.
Comments from author:
yup, I'll try not to lay the Naruto references on too thick. thanks!
Review By [mithrilandtj] • Date [22 Oct 07] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2: Halloween Night" from kaleecat
Review:
Giles said to Xander at the end of the discussion about the ring -- "and perhaps you can be an asset alongside Buffy." Oh yes Giles, because Xander has done nothing at all to help Buffy in the past. Sheesh.

Interesting concept. The talk in the library was a bit fast, and it isn't really made clear why Xander has such difficulty concentrating to use the ring.

I do hope the naruto cross stays exceedingly mild as I don't find that cross to be interesting or easily conveyed. Too bad Xander didn't think of trying to find an outfit he could adjust to make a green lantern uniform.
Comments from author:
I'm glad you caught that. =p Well to me, during Btvs whole 7 seasons, Xander was not exactly super human or garnering a lot of respect from Giles, so I am trying to phrase it in such a way as to follow my overall all impression of how the Giles treat would treat Xander.

But... this is not a Giles hate fic. I am all for peace and harmony =D

yup, naruto crossover is just used for a halloween gain powers plot. dun worry, no naruto characters will pop up in my story and leave sweatdrops or nosebleeds as is prominent in the anime.
Review By [kaleecat] • Date [22 Oct 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2: Halloween Night" from LordCorwin
Review:
A good beginning....
Comments from author:
I'll try not to disappoint =)
Review By [LordCorwin] • Date [22 Oct 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 1: The Ring" from Bobboky
Review:
wow, a mix of DC, Marvel, and Buffy

nice work so far
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [22 Oct 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 1: The Ring" from IAMZIPPY
Review:
definitely a good beginning
Comments from author:
thank you! I'll try my best.
Review By [IAMZIPPY] • Date [22 Oct 07] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 1: The Ring" from Schiavona
Review:
Interesting start, I hope that you do continue this story. It has some real potential for development.

Thanks,
Chris
Review By [Schiavona] • Date [21 Oct 07] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 1: The Ring" from Tjin
Review:
...

interesting... i hope to see more... *Power Ring, Begin Tracking Fic 'Green Lantern's Journey' now*
Comments from author:
haha, thanks!
Review By [Tjin] • Date [21 Oct 07] • Not Rated
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