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Review of chapter "'Of Courtyards and Lyrical Reinterpretations'" from LunasMeow
It's times like these when I want to strangle you. Then I remember that if I did that, you couldn't write. But seriously, no update since 2011? And you have even *more* new fics? Damn you!!!!!!!!!!!


Now that the anger is out of the way, can we please have an update? Please?
Comments from author:
Well, thanks for the non-strangulation; I obviously feel you made the right decision there.

I do have new(er) fics posted, but still not as many as I'd like. I'm still struggling with with the same issues that have always gotten in my way on these things, it's just that the barriers are --slightly-- more permeable to newer stories than to older ones, so even though I very much do want to continue nearly all my in-progress stuff, it's just incredibly difficult to make that happen.
I still hope to change that; I'm trying a couple of different things now, to try and condition myself to view writing as a more casual thing, something I can do every day, instead of some tension-filled, anxiety-fraught, life and death struggle that can only happen when absolutely everything in my life is going well (because that obviously basically never happens).
If I get to a point where I'm writing consistently, then Harm's story will be picked up pretty early; I know where it goes, and I want to be able to read more of her story too, just like you guys.
In the meantime, I'm working on something now that you might like? Not sure, it might just irritate you more. We should know very soon.
Review By [LunasMeow] • Date [29 Nov 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "'Of Courtyards and Lyrical Reinterpretations'" from deathgeonous
Ah, I miss this. And I missed rereading this on All Hallows Eve like I planned. I HATE last minute problems. Oh well, I still look forward to your continuing this, and seeing just what's up with this mysterious mistress, and seeing just how you got from chapter 9 to the events in ten, what the heck happened to Xander, and what will happen when Harmony finds out Buffy's secret, and Buffy finds out Harmony's. Should be fun. And I'm also looking forward to seeing another dozen other little things in the future of this fic. Well, thanks for writing what you have of this, and goodbye for now.
Review By [deathgeonous] • Date [9 Nov 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "'Of Courtyards and Lyrical Reinterpretations'" from (Recent Donor)nerfherder
Went looking thru your older works and came across this. Normally I only find Harm to be an annoyance or comedic bon mot. This is some great material! You really followed thru on her and kept it consistent thru out the entire story! Wish there was more, but I read of your busy schedule. Good luck! I'm pulling for you!
Comments from author:
Thank you.
Currently I have plans to get back to this later this year; if events don't conspire against me.
Review By [(Recent Donor)nerfherder] • Date [26 May 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "'Of Courtyards and Lyrical Reinterpretations'" from spidermounky
did I miss a chapter somewhere also great story
Review By [spidermounky] • Date [26 Jul 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "'Of Courtyards and Lyrical Reinterpretations'" from Spica
Great story, hope you can continue it soon, because the world could use some more of the novelty of this story. ;)
Review By [Spica] • Date [18 Jul 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "'Of Courtyards and Lyrical Reinterpretations'" from PiedraLumbre
I just thought of this story and logged back in after several months off the site to see if you'd updated yet. Upon reading a couple of your more recent review replies, it occurred to me that perhaps it would be better for you to not think about guilt, but about the joy you could bring. I'll probably reread again soon, but I wanted to wish you luck with your muse (and life in general), I hope both bring you great things (and sooner rather than later).
Review By [PiedraLumbre] • Date [12 Jun 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "'Of Courtyards and Lyrical Reinterpretations'" from LunasMeow
Your constant thorn in your side that pushes you to update here again!

You do realize that this fic hasn't been update since 2011? And that the current year is 2013? Yeah, we went past the so called "Aztec Armageddon" and we still didn't get another chapter. *I've* even started writing again, (although in another fandom completely) and am actually managing to do fairly decent on my update schedule for once. My chapters are nowhere near as long as yours of course, but I'm working on it. And honestly, if it meant more regular updates, I'd take shorter chapters. Because in the end it'd be more over all, than waiting forever for one chapter at a time. At this rate, this story won't be done until my kids graduate college, and I haven't even gotten anyone pregnant yet! You've gotta give us something!
Comments from author:

ETA: Okay, no, seriously--I hear ya. Believe me, I exist in a constant, low-level thrum of guilt, because of all these unfinished stories, and this one in particular.
That said, I did LOL at your projected life timeline; I send greetings to your unborn (and as yet unconceived) children!
Review By [LunasMeow] • Date [28 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "'So, this Goddess walks into a Bar....'" from Stratagemini
I really enjoyed this story, the way you portray the issues with beauty and how Harmony is developing as a character are both fantastic, but you left it on a pretty major cliffhanger with spike and those minions that want harmony as a "sacrifice". I hope (despite it being almost a year and a half since last update) that you write more of harmony's adventures soon.
Review By [Stratagemini] • Date [14 Apr 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "'Her usual morning routine... not.'" from Balder
Excellent story so far!
I'm still not sure how you got the idea but you are writing itvery well.
Review By [Balder] • Date [23 Nov 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "'Of Courtyards and Lyrical Reinterpretations'" from deathgeonous
I had really thought that you'd update this Halloween. I mean, according to one of your review replies, you said you would. Ah well, while I was looking forward to it, and while I do hope for an update soonish, I guess something came up or the new chapter wasn't quite ready. Hopefully you don't live in an area that was hit bye the Super Storm Sally. That would just suck. Well, thanks for writing this, bye for now.
Comments from author:
I really really meant to have a chapter or two up for Halloween, but I've been basically crushed under a really nasty cold the last couple of weeks, and felt like utter crap.
Apologies to everyone who'd been waiting for an update.
The bright side is that Hey! It's NaNoWriMo time again! 50,000 words in thirty days? SURE, I can do that!!!
So, starting today... in just an hour or so actually, I'll be parking myself in front of the old laptop and powering through some Harmony story. To be honest, this is probably the ONLY way I can get through this section that's had me so frustrated; three times now I've tried to do the middle and end of this clubbing part, and every time I've ended up throwing it all out. Time to just write it, and turn a deaf ear to the voice that keeps saying it's not good enough. I'll have to trust that it either IS good enough... or trust that you'll forgive me if it's only so-so, just so we can move on to the next part of the story.

Again, sorry about the added delay.
Wish me luck with this month's writing!!!
Review By [deathgeonous] • Date [1 Nov 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "'Of Courtyards and Lyrical Reinterpretations'" from (Recent Donor)tchizek
This is a very cool story, I would be interested to know how Harmony got out of the trap that someone set for her in Revels. Since it is obvious from the last chapter that she did get out, and may not have even noticed the trap based on the fact that it didn't register.

It would be nice if you could continue this!
Review By [(Recent Donor)tchizek] • Date [1 Aug 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "'Of Courtyards and Lyrical Reinterpretations'" from LunasMeow
Now that I've got more computer time, temporarily at least...

Do you realize that your fics are what I come to this site for? I literally come here hoping for an update from you. The only reason I've ever read ANY fics here besides your own is because your fics drew me here. In fact, of my recomendations, your fics take up almost half my list. Honestly, the only reason it's that few is bacause I didn't want to put every singe fic you have up when they aren't complete yet. Every time I come I try to aviod it, but I end up reading this fic again from start to (the current) finish, and sometimes the other one with Buffy and Faith as mutants too. Still, of all your fics this seems to me to be the one with the most potential. Maybe it's because it uses a character so under used that it's almost a new character, only not, and so it's fresh rather than just another Fuffy fic. With the way people have been abandoning this fandom for Glee and everything else recently, it could use the publicity to inject some new life into it again. And that's what you've been doing. You've taken an old friend and made it as enjoyable as a new aquaintence.

About Harmony. She's so insufferably FULL of herself!!! And yet... It's adorable. I can't stand that I can't hate her for her arrogance. Especially like with that bartender scene. It pisses me off that I can't stop smiling at how sure of herself she is about her belief that she can turn him straight for her. I hate and love her all at once. *I* am like her freaking willing slave/protector, just from her character! No looks, no spell, and I sould want to watch over her if she were real. It's insanity.

About chapter 10, I'd forgotten that this update even happened. But I'm interested in seeing how that conversation between Angela and Harmony went, and if she knows about the spells Harmony is casting on her, as well as how Harmony really looks. Plus, you can't forget about Harmony making her own holy symbol for her father, and while she's at it, her friends/followers to protect them from Vampires and other creatures/demons. Perhaps something that shows her dual nature? Something that symbolizes harmony, her own name, with Amora's name written on it in the Norse runes since that was Amora's own symbol? It would make it more powerful than something with just Amora's name on it since she is technically a joining of the two and I assume the protective power of these symbols (amulets of a type I'm assuming?) are going to come from Harmony herself.

It will also be interesting to see what happens when one of these amulets is acutally USED. Say, a vamp corners Fawn somewhere, only to be repelled by it's power? (That would be one way to open the topic of monsters and magic up for discussion between the group...) The more interesting parts will come later when you show how it drains Harmony, to what extent she is drained by it, and whatever other effects such a thing would have. Would it cause her illusion to come off if it drained enough power from her? Say if Spike captured one of them and was constantly trying to harm them causing a steady drain on her power? It'd probably take something far more powerful to drain her to that extent, but you get the point.

Still, the most interesting thing will probably be her finding this universe's version of Asgard. The gods there wouldn't recognise her, since Amora didn't exist in real mythology although they could obviously tell that she was Asgardian. In fact, since Heimdall sees all, they might even send someone to talk to her, or summon her to speak to her, make some rules, or find out what her plans are or something. How would they treat her? An Asgardian, yet at the same time, not. Would they refuse her entrance to Asgard? Threaten her? Or simply ban her from creating a kingdom of sorts on Midgard? That is, of course, if you make them as real as the other gods that were shown in the show. I don't recall them ever using Norse gods, though with all the others they used (Greek, Egyptian, etc) it stands to reason that you can.

And once again there was more to comment on, but I don't have time right now. Hopefully I remember when I get a chance to get on the computer later today. Between that and reading your new fic, I'll be pretty busy. UPDATE!!!
Comments from author:
Hey there.
As I've often said before, long delays in answering comments doesn't mean I haven't read them.
The problem is that with convoluted comments like this one, it isn't easy to know how to answer!

So, the easy stuff--You really are a DreamSmith superfan, sir! (or a Goddess!Harmony superfan) Holy Crap; how many times HAVE you read this thing? Wow. If I knew you in real life, and met that degree of enthusiasm in person, as opposed to just as (many!) words on a screen, I'm sure I would be working on this a lot more often.
So anyway, and obviously, it's high praise that you're so invested in the story and the character. It bothers me that I've left you and the other fans of this one hanging for so long--I have an odd knack/problem with compartmentalizing things, and it really is difficult for me to really grasp that a fair-sized group of people are legitimately interested in seeing what comes next. From what I've read, lots of authors suffer from that kind of self-doubt, even award-winning professionals, so at least I'm in good company with that.

Okay, about Harmony herself, and your willing devotion to her fictional self: That seriously made me smile. You're not alone in being smitten with her. I suppose it reflects a weakness in my writer mojo, but it's basically impossible for me to write anything but short snippets about a character I don't love to some degree, and brother, a hundred thousand words on this one so far is NOT a snippet!
Harm's blend of innocence, Arrogance, and Smug Self-Adoration is odd, I suppose, but I freely admit I find Harmony to be just as adorable as she knows herself to be. There's a fine line there, between being sweet and being insufferable: I think Harm mostly lands on the 'Sweet' side of it, and the SG:1 version of Dawn unfortunately lands mostly on the 'insufferable' side.
If Harm were an actual goddess? Well... yeah, that would certainly lead me to revisit my views on religion.

Your thoughts on Holy Symbols are interesting, and I WILL bear them in mind as I move forward.
As for the Asgardians and the realm of Asgard in this universe, however.... I'll go ahead and say that no, there are no such things here. Part of why Harmony's magicks are so tangled and minimized here is that they're all Asgardian in design and nature, and with none of that existing here, they simply don't 'fit' properly in their current form.
I say this so that you don't spend too much time wrestling with that particular scenario.
That being the case, I obviously need to provide you some fresh material to wrestle with, in the very near future.
Unfortunately, real life commitments have basically been crushing my available writing time, but I did see your other comments, and I'll try to get something published before your trip. No promises on that, though.
What I CAN say for sure is that October is Harmony month--I've set the Dawn thing aside for now, so that I can write and publish a good chunk of this one by month's end.
There are so many things I want to do with this--by the time Halloween gets here, we should be seeing a few of them coming into view.
Review By [LunasMeow] • Date [31 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "'Of Courtyards and Lyrical Reinterpretations'" from LunasMeow
First and foremost, you need to update! I've gone and joined the military, been through basic training, and am almost done my job specific training and heading to my first duty station, all before you've managed to put up another chapter. That's a long time. There isn't much Buffy fanfiction being done anymore, and if you're going to move on to other things, you have to at least finish what you've started. You're too good of a writer to be allowed to just leave these fics of yours unfinished.

Now, to the actual review:

"Slipped in through a door that shouldn't have been open, didn't she? The shadows know, they know all about her... and they are not pleased...."

~Quoted from Drusila

I've been thinking for a while about how you can explain Harmony... There are any fictional stories about other worlds. Worlds that don't even really exist except in relation to the real world. Like for instance a world of purely one element. Fire, water, darkness, light, etc. (The elemental "realms" if you will.) What if, as an imaginary god, Enchantress is like that? A shadow world that exists, but only as an extension of this world, real, but not real. What if the spell Ethan cast did in fact reach into that not quite real reality and copied Enchantress from it onto Harmony. Making her a TRUE Asgardian, which would be real in the Sunnydale world (seeing as most of the Gods and Godesess of the various religions of the world are real there) which then rendered her immune to further changes due to chaos magic, which would explain why she was left completely unchanged once the spell ended. Harmony had no such immunity, enabling her to be changed, but to take power FROM a Godess is another thing entirely. Certainly beyond Ethan's ability. It would even make sense, if Enchantress KNEW that she wasn't "real" and created a spell in her world that would allow her to come over if the door between worlds was ever actually opened. But she wasn't expecting it to be interacted with by the chaos magic of Ethan's spell which only wanted to copy her rather than opening the door entirely to send or bring something through in its entirety.

There was more I wanted to say but I don't have time, hopefully I'll remember later.
Review By [LunasMeow] • Date [31 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "'Of Courtyards and Lyrical Reinterpretations'" from dialNforNinja
Honestly, if a single scene is giving you that much trouble? Screw it. Move on, and cover whatever you wanted to accomplish with it in a flashback or from a different angle that lets you sneak up and put a boot in the nadgers instead of fighting past the horns. As a desperately slow writer myself, I've learned to take the ideas as they come rather than trying to force it beyond a certain point.
Comments from author:
I'm going to give this chapter another shot very soon now, and either I manage to push through it or I'll throw it out and jump to the next day.
It's almost inconceivable to me that I'll jump past something I've already written so much on (counting the leadup chapter), so expect SOME version of the encounter/conflict scene, even if it's not my perfect vision of said scene.
On or before Halloween of this year--I swear it!!!!!
Review By [dialNforNinja] • Date [21 Jul 12] • Rating [6 out of 10]
Review of chapter "'Her usual morning routine... not.'" from adamjb
Enjoying your story, although sometimes your characters seem to forget about easy alternatives. Why didn't Harmony try to teleport earlier when she was thinking about ways to get home (even if it wouldn't have worked)? Why does Harmony's father want to replace all of the locks instead of just making another copy of his own key? Why does Harmony keep forgetting about her strength, such as when she was thinking about how to magically move the old woman's car? She did eventually use her strength, but she seems to keep forgetting about it.

In response to the author's comments: your explanations make sense. Looking forward to more of this story!
Comments from author:
Harmony doesn't instantly go 'Ah, teleport!' as a first response because (A) it takes a while before full awareness of everything she can do filters into her awareness, as is mentioned several times--it's a lifetime of information she's trying to process, and isn't organized in order of immediate usefulness and (B) she's bright enough to be a little hesitant about using her brand new and not terribly well-understood powers to transform her body into magical energy when she isn't sure she can rematerialize correctly.
Her father is bemoaning the need to rekey all the locks because if you have a nice house, and an attractive, vulnerable wife and daughter, and keys go mysteriously missing, then that doesn't simply mean you can't get in, it means SOMEBODY ELSE HAS A KEY TO YOUR HOUSE. Think about that.
Harmony doesn't immediately go to 'Strength=Solution to problem' because she's very much in the mindset of both a normal, non-athletic girl (Harmony), and more importantly, the mindset of a very feminine, ladylike sorceress (Amora), neither of which would ever resort to brute force unless given no other choice. Harmony because she's not strong enough to do so, and Amora because that simply isn't something she will stoop to doing (especially when she always has one or more big, strong men handy, all of them eager to please her by doing anything and everything she asks of them). When given no other choice, she does get her hands dirty 'literally' and use her physical strength, but it's never, ever going to be her first or second option if she can help it.

She does indeed face challenges, but none of the above is a case of her being mentally handicapped. Instead, I think it's a pretty fair rendering of her actions given the situations involved.
So, were her thoughts, actions, and choices intentional, given all that?
Why yes.
Yes they were.
Review By [adamjb] • Date [22 Apr 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
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