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Review of chapter "'The long walk from Point A to Point B'" from (Current Donor)Shieldage
Review:
I'm happy her new body didn't take Oz's mind off Willow :D
Hey, I don't mind her trying to crash the old lady's car... Would she have been able to heal her though, if the second wreck hurt the old lady?

Hmm,
1. She makes others think that she looks the same as ever. That is, people who think about her as she used to look get a fuzzy image and decide to stop thinking about it.
2. She changes their memories to reflect her new body. That is, when people think back they'll only get a clear image of how she looks now.
3. She uses illusion to make herself look like her old self.
3a. She uses illusion to make herself look like her old self. Only better :)
4. 'Reasonable' explanation for the change. You know, like the lead guy in that 'Cryptozoic' book - "Yeah, I look great and I'm suddenly wealthy because I took a vacation to California. They've got alchemists out there who've figured out how to liposuction fat and turn it into gold." -- Paraphrased, but that was the gist of it ;)

Let's see...
Names for that spell...

OOH! http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/List_of_comic_book_superpowers
That's a fun and useful link when you're trying to inspire/catalog/organize stuff :)

How about:
1. Suckerpunch 2. Thwack 3. Kapow! 4. Buster 5. Flying Fist of Will 6. Harmony's Special 7. The Look
Comments from author:
Ack!
Sorry, didn't catch this before.
Belated reply:
Oz must have a pretty one-track mind, huh? If that encounter had happened later on, when she's more comfortable with her Amora self, she might have gotten extremely angry about the implied insult.
If she'd hurt the old lady then....
Hm. Not sure. It didn't happen, so we don't know. She was mightily pissed, though.

As you can see now, she went with option 3a: old self with an attractiveness boost.

The wikipedia link: interesting! I'll hang on to that, though my old Marvel Superheroes RPG sourcebooks come in handy there, especially the Realms of Magic book.

Spellnames: Thanks for the suggestions! I've already got one I like, but I'm also kind of partial to 'Thwack' and 'the Look'.
Those might show up somewhere.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [(Current Donor)Shieldage] • Date [6 Nov 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "'The long walk from Point A to Point B'" from Mackon
Review:
Very Very Very!Good.

Brilliant in fact. The concept, ideas and character (Harmony Rules!) are all interesting and the writing itself is is ..... Quality.

Thank you very much for sharing!!!!!!!!
Can not wait for the next chapter.
Review By [Mackon] • Date [6 Nov 07] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "'The long walk from Point A to Point B'" from (Current Donor)Ironbear
Review:
Nice work. I'm going to add this one to my tracking list. I've always kind of liked Harmony as a character, even if a part of it was the "Incompetent even at being really Evil" charm she had as a vampire. ;)

Hope you plan to finish this?
Comments from author:
Heya.
Yep, the biggest change she's undergoing here isn't suddenly being strong, or magical... it's being competent. I'm working hard to keep her charm intact, despite that.
^_^

(And thanks for the Rec on this!)

ETA: Oops, forgot to also say: I finish *Everything*. It just... sometimes takes a length of time measured in decades, is all.
o_O
Review By [(Current Donor)Ironbear] • Date [6 Nov 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "'The long walk from Point A to Point B'" from JoeDineen
Review:
Interesting chapter, you have thought through most of the angles and it is still mostly Harmony even if she has had an upgrade.

As for your startlement on my comments on the last chapter and the response you made that your other stories are grim than you though. I once tried Virtue of a Warrior many years ago and gave up. I found it much to grim for my taste and stopped reading it and I avoided all your other stories for that reason so I was pleasantly surprised by the tone of this story.
Review By [JoeDineen] • Date [6 Nov 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "'The long walk from Point A to Point B'" from Valkyrie
Review:
Nice. I like this look at Harmony; it gives her a strange, sad depth.
Comments from author:
Thank you.
I guess everyone has some depths, even people of whom you'd never expect it.

(and hey! 'Valkyrie' commented on the story with the Norse God involvement--go figure!)
Review By [Valkyrie] • Date [6 Nov 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "'The long walk from Point A to Point B'" from Strangyr
Review:
Harmony usually isn't one of my favorite characters........but I'm lovin the way this story is going (its damn original).
Oh ...and by the way ....I like the baseball bat spell.....why not just call it the "BBS" ?
Comments from author:
She never registered as anything but an annoyance to me, either, until I started writing this.
--its damn original--

Well, I feel obligated to keep pointing out that the seed for this was Joe's story 'Purrfection'. I WAS going to try to keep it within the parameters of that one, but by now this has gained a life of its own.

The spell name--I like it!
Review By [Strangyr] • Date [6 Nov 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "'The long walk from Point A to Point B'" from ArthurHansen
Review:
A little expositiony, but a neat idea and story. Can't wait until I see more! :)
Comments from author:
--A little expositiony--

Yep, that's me; I do that sometimes.
This time around I felt like I really had to make it clear that her spellcasting isn't just saying a random word and then watching things happen. She's doing work, and expending energy, and performing some intense mental gymnastics in order to accomplish this stuff. It was the spell explanation stuff that *felt* expositiony to me, though you might have somewhere (or several somewheres) else in mind.
I'm glad you liked it despite that.
Review By [ArthurHansen] • Date [6 Nov 07] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "'The Origin Story'" from (Recent Donor)DaveTurner
Review:
Enjoying this tremendously. I shall be tracking from now on so I don't miss anything.

All the best,
DaveT.
Comments from author:
Dude, I'm enjoying writing it tremendously, but it's hugely important to hear from you guys, so that I know someone out there is actually reading it and liking it, and not just clicking on the link, glancing at the first few lines, and then going off to read something else.
So thanks, man, for letting me know.

Alan
Review By [(Recent Donor)DaveTurner] • Date [6 Nov 07] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "'The long walk from Point A to Point B'" from ghostwhowalks
Review:
This is very well written.

Thank you.
Bob
Comments from author:
Thank YOU, sir.
^_^
Review By [ghostwhowalks] • Date [6 Nov 07] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "'The long walk from Point A to Point B'" from CPTSkip
Review:
Wow! Harmony with brains. The world is doomed! But I find I like this new and improved Harmony. She helps little old ladies and beats up on vamps. What's not to love? I can't wait to see what happens when she meets Queen C and the other Cordettes at school. Love this story and can't wait for more.
Comments from author:
--She helps little old ladies--

Hm.
So far no one has commented on how she tried to KILL the old lady at the end there, by bashing her grey head in with her baseball bat spell (GOT to think of a better name for that. Any suggestions?)

Harmony was mostly harmless before, but didn't exactly have a strong moral center.
Amora wasn't utterly evil, but she WAS utterly selfish, and often not such a nice person.

So... we'll see how she turns out here.
Glad you're liking the story!
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [6 Nov 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "'The long walk from Point A to Point B'" from CJNyfalt
Review:
And she did never even once think about summoning her purse?!
Comments from author:
Good point!
But... no.
Firstly, because like she says, there's so much stuffed into her head now that she's having trouble sorting it out. Secondly, some spells she can't currently cast, for various reasons that she'll be dealing with... and beyond-line-of-sight conjuring is one of them. (and believe me, the notes and research and laboriously written-out internal rules for this story are piling up fast!)
And thirdly, the same turbulence effect from the hellmouth that gave her trouble with her teleport would affect a conjuration too, so she'd probably get nothing but a mangled, empty purse.

Even so, it's probably something she'll smack herself for not thinking of.
Review By [CJNyfalt] • Date [6 Nov 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "'The long walk from Point A to Point B'" from (Recent Donor)Kiwikatipo
Review:
Another great chapter, I loved the realistic details how Harmony didn't have a purse and how goddesses obviously had super strong ankles.

I liked how Harmony couldn't fight for shit at first until she worked out how to do her spells.

I liked how she helped the little old lady.

This is a really good story, feel good factor nine.

Ugh that first picture however - deformed Barbie land. the second picture I shall imagine Harmony as, thanks for including them.
Comments from author:
Thanks!
It's all about the details. Yep, yep, yep.
Harmony STILL can't fight for shit... but she can smack people around magically, if given a little room to work with.
If she'd been able to catch the little old lady at the end there, she would have gladly drop-kicked her over a building (though she was very tired and cranky at the time, and so we shouldn't judge her too harshly).

Glad you're liking the story. I'm having a LOT of fun writing this one.

Images--well, quality varies from artist to artist, and from pic to pic. I like that one because it shows her attitude (and HAIR! Yum!), but there are others that are nicer. I added a few to chapter one also, and I plan to drop one or two into each chapter.
And darn! You'd mentioned that you didn't know who Amora was, and I'd meant to put in a link to a short Bio on her. I'll go back and put it in the chapter at some point, but here it is: http://www.marvel.com/universe/Enchantress
Review By [(Recent Donor)Kiwikatipo] • Date [6 Nov 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "'The long walk from Point A to Point B'" from Dmitri
Review:
Sigh. Poor Harmony. Life is tough when you're a SuperBlonde. A nicely set tone of the story as well. Cordelia, though, will have issues, and so will every other girl in school, including Buffy. I really hope that Harm can sort it all out before the Mayor gets into act.
Comments from author:
'You're not wrong'.

(^_^)
Review By [Dmitri] • Date [5 Nov 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "'The Origin Story'" from ghostwhowalks
Review:
This was a lot of fun. This is the second Harmony Halloween story so you are not alone in writing about her.

Very well done.

Thank you.

Bob

EDIT
Despite really enjoying the story when I read it I didn't remember the name or the Author right ... but found it anyway here you go
http://www.tthfanfic.org/Story-7914/Silentbobfoley+Balance-+Light+and+Darkness.htm
Comments from author:
Thanks for the kind review!

Now, though, I'm going nuts trying to track down that other Harmony story.
Where is it?!
Review By [ghostwhowalks] • Date [2 Nov 07] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "'The Origin Story'" from LordCorwin
Review:
I normally never read anything other than the Xander / Willow fanfics, but this one intrigued me. Nicely done. Can't wait to see what else you do with this story.



addendum (to answer author)

Yep, long history behind why I took it ... but neither here nor there in relation to here or there... :)
Comments from author:
Thank you.
(Nice screen name, by the way, assuming it's from the 'Amber' series)
Review By [LordCorwin] • Date [1 Nov 07] • Not Rated
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