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Review of chapter "Chapter Eighteen" from Idmonscat
There I was thinking; Yay MJs gone I won't have to suffer my least favorite line in Marvel history, and what happens, you have Gwen say it. I know its tradition and all but I cringe every time I read or hear that line.
Anyway besides that another great update.
Comments from author:
I had to do it man. Sorry. ^_^
Review By [Idmonscat] • Date [23 Jan 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eighteen" from (Current Donor)DreamSmith
Okay, this was a darn nifty chapter. Interesting character stuff in this one; good work.

--Peter nodded, keeping his eyes on Gwen. "I go to school with her. Political science major. Not the brightest bulb in the chandelier, but she's smart enough. Then again, we're looking for a team that can take down violent mutants, not beat them on Jeopardy."
That was true, even if it was a bit mean.--

Ouch! No KIDDING it's a bit mean!
Gee, and here I thought Peter saved the nasty barbs for when he's fighting a bad guy.

"Courtney, I can't help it if Peter finds Gwen attractive. I'm his new boss, not god." Courtney's eyes lit up and Marie realized she should have chosen her words better. "No, that doesn’t mean you can ask Illyria."

So basically, if Illyria sends Rogue or one of the others on an errand, and someone asks what they're doing, they can honestly say "I'm on a mission from God."

I'm glad to see Peter actually noticing that incredibly sexy costume of Gwen's.
I'd be careful if I were her, though. It would be SO easy for Jealous!Courtney to create a bit of poison-ivy itchy oil inside that outfit... or a little Radium dust, if she were feeling *really* pissed.

Gwen's codename (Banshee)--Um, isn't an angry Irishman going to show up and sue her for copyright infringement? Siren is the cooler name, but again, taken.
Which... I guess is the problem. By now, ALL the cool names are taken.
Oh well.

So basically, this chapter is all about the Gwen.
Sexy, spider-seducing Gwen, heh heh heh.
(Um, how does the guy walk around all these hot women in his skintight outfit and not suffer a bit of embarassment? He must have zen-master control over certain bodily... reactions.)
Comments from author:
Well, Siryn exists in the X-Men movies as a kid younger than even the New X-Men (Bobby, Piotr, Kitty, Rogue) and so her codename isn't really in use, and Banshee never appeared to the best of my knowledge, so it's free in this universe.
Review By [(Current Donor)DreamSmith] • Date [23 Jan 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eighteen" from Valkyrie
Good. Mary Jane was a bitch. Hope you're not giving Courtney the shaft though; I kinda like her in a weird sorta way.
Comments from author:
Not necessarily; we're opening up a new plot arc soon that has three possible endings and so I need to line up the pieces so all three would be viable.
Review By [Valkyrie] • Date [23 Jan 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eighteen" from TheatricalBarrister
Aw, Courtney's all alone now (not that I begrudge Peter for being interested in Gwen, her being hot and … sane and all). Great update, and I'm looking forward to Illyria's party.
Comments from author:
It was more of an idle mention; I'm focusing more on the superhero side of Fred/Illyria than the producer side, but we might get to see her interacting with the Hollywood crowd.
Review By [TheatricalBarrister] • Date [23 Jan 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Eighteen" from Jess
Poor lucky Peter Parker... I really don't know if I should be in awe of his clueless game or watching his back to make sure Courtney doesn't freak out on him. LOL!
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Review By [Jess] • Date [23 Jan 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Eighteen" from Orion
Still following this, and still enjoying it. Great work.
Comments from author:
Whoot. ^_^
Review By [Orion] • Date [23 Jan 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eighteen" from Ignotus
Wow. Peter has other options besides MJ. I'm actually very happy about that. MJ's great and all, but I never thought they'd work together. I can easily see him with Courtney or Gwen. Or... both? It's hard to tell with you. ;)

Another great chapter and I can't wait to read more.
Comments from author:
Re: Courtney or Gwen?

Who knows. ;)
Review By [Ignotus] • Date [22 Jan 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Eighteen" from (Recent Donor)MissingAuthor
Ok I take it back... Peter is freaky lucky. Really enjoying the character interaction. You are keeping things very interesting! Can't wait for more.


PS... ever wonder if Peter can shoot webbing from other places? ;)
Comments from author:
He swings more webs than you'd ever believe, and he gets more ass than a toilet seat...
Review By [(Recent Donor)MissingAuthor] • Date [22 Jan 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Seventeen" from Idmonscat
Beeping Brilliant, I don't think I have the words to state how funny that interview was.
Comments from author:
I wanted to just put [bleep] but I think it came out better this way...
Review By [Idmonscat] • Date [22 Jan 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Seventeen" from prehensileclaw
excellent crack fic =)
Comments from author:
Thanks, I think.
Review By [prehensileclaw] • Date [22 Jan 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Seventeen" from (Current Donor)DreamSmith
Okay, I really, really, reallyreallyreally (REALLY) liked the bits that I suggested.
A lot.

Hated that Rogue got her hair cut off.
(Boo! Hiss! BAD LexLuthorRogueGirl! Bad!)

Liked the ::Bleep::in' profanity, that was ::Bleep::in' cool!

MJ is a beotch, and will be the first one put against the wall when the revolution comes.
Mm. Logan seemed a bit stiff, and a little more high-handed than I would have expected from Logan. Of course, me being a diehard Rogue/Wolverine shipper, I can explain it away as him being devastated that she's seemingly left him for some blue demon chick. No doubt he'll be crying himself to sleep until she takes pity on him and brings him in as SHART's offical mascot, and gives him the occasional pity sex.
(Sure, it nearly kills him every time, but he's tough, and he luuuuuves her!)

I'm hoping Gwen is secretly a mutant, and gets on the team. That would create an interesting dynamic with daddy; especially if she gets publicly, romantically involved with someone(s) on the team.

Yay for the increased closeness between Marie and Illyria. The Blue One seems to be giving in a bit too easily, but I suppose one tends to spoil a favored pet with lots of attention and affection.
Comments from author:
Well, I try to keep the hairstyles on the team diverse just to make them look a bit less similar. Skotti's is short, Elle's is long, Gwen's is sorta middle, Illyria's is long, Courtney's short, and Kate's is long. Marie's bangs make it difficult to style well and anything in the mid range for her didn't look too great, so we went short.
Review By [(Current Donor)DreamSmith] • Date [21 Jan 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Seventeen" from TheatricalBarrister
Great update! (Don't you get tired of everyone saying that? ;-)) LOL at Marie's profanity on TV, at Courtney's offer of a nice relaxing buttocks massage, and at Logan's tasty claws.
Comments from author:
Mmm. Claws.
Review By [TheatricalBarrister] • Date [21 Jan 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Seventeen" from (Recent Donor)MissingAuthor
Turning his claws into root beer hard candy... bloody funny!

***"Marie!" Peter, Gwen, and the commissioner all looked at her and Marie grinned. "Oh, sorry. Just felt like doing something a little different there. Okay… Gwen?!"***

ROTFL... that was a hell of a good chapter ending.

Comments from author:
I had to. RealCourtney's done that before too.
Review By [(Recent Donor)MissingAuthor] • Date [21 Jan 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Seventeen" from Jess
Rootbeer! *almost falls out of the chair laughing* Rootbeer!
Comments from author:
Mmm. Root beer.
Review By [Jess] • Date [20 Jan 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Seventeen" from DigiEmissary
I found it! *throws you an Oreo*

Yay for possible Blink appearances. Purple girls = hot.
Comments from author:
I might throw in Megan Morse with John as a twofer. :)
Review By [DigiEmissary] • Date [20 Jan 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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