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Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from Jess
Review:
Awesome! Bringing Elle in is a stroke of genius I think she is sexy in a cracked kinda way. *laughs* Good job! *HUGS*
Comments from author:
Crazy chicks are more fun.
Review By [Jess] • Date [23 Dec 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from Noclaf
Review:
"...demons can do almost anything humans do for money. Vampires are, of course, limited by the sun, and some demons are limited by their looks. I suppose I was fortunate to be incarnated in such a form in a world that humans now rule."

Now I know where telemarketers come from. I can just see a call center full of plogaras.
Comments from author:
Nah, vampires. They just hide out inside all day and harass you.
Review By [Noclaf] • Date [22 Dec 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from Harry
Review:
I have to admit, this was a interesting little tidbit. I almost thought at first, from the title, that it was going to involve Pinky and the Brain! I wouldn't mind seeing more of this story though.
Comments from author:
No, there is a Pinky and the Brain reference later in the story, which gave rise to the summary. :)
Review By [Harry] • Date [22 Dec 07] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from (Past Donor)DreamSmith
Review:
I'd wondered about the personalities.
If she'd killed/absorbed nothing but psychotic, out of control nutcases (with powers), then it seems like sooner or later she'd be a completely psychotic, out of control nutcase (with LOTS of powers!).
I'd thought about suggesting that it would make more sense (from Illyria's point of view) to 'feed' Rogue only nice, well-adjusted sorts (with powers!), to help her stay balanced. Instead, something else.... Is she doing something in Marie's brain? Maybe walling off the personality fragments and echoes? Or is she literally sucking that stuff out of her mind?
Hm.
If it were something Illyria is actively doing, and that she perhaps has to maintain from time to time, then that would serve to bind her creation more tightly to her, since if she ever left, Marie would end up going slowly insane from the re-emerging victims inside her.
...Or not; guess I'll have to wait and see what you actually do.
Looking forward to seeing what the 'home life' will be (especially with ol' whatsername in there too ^_^)
(That scene sparked an idea for a story featuring the crazy blonde girl and Gwen Raiden, but I don't want you to think I'm only here to steal story concepts from you, so I've shelved it.)
Comments from author:
Oh, do She-Who-Shall-Not-Be-Named and Gwen. It'd be funny to read.

As for Illyria, it'll be revealed in detail later... but basically she's undoing the effects of the Mutara Generator.
Review By [(Past Donor)DreamSmith] • Date [22 Dec 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from Infinix
Review:
Oh I really hope that something in the same general ballpark is what you have planned for The Specialist. Rogue executing... well rogue mutants and taking their powers? Now I am forced to go sift through the trash that is most of ff.net to look for more in that vein.
Comments from author:
No, Specialist had the exact opposite intention: Marie 'corrupting' Illyria into being a nicer, more pleasant person.
Review By [Infinix] • Date [22 Dec 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from MarcusRowland
Review:
Logical, except that the end point is probably Marie draining everyone to feed Illyria.

I trust that you will support Illyria's bid for the presidency?
Comments from author:
Not quite; Illyria can eat a multitude of power sources, this is just convenient to her scheming at the moment.

As for presidency... it's ironic you say that. Wait till next chapter.
Review By [MarcusRowland] • Date [22 Dec 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from Arekanderu
Review:
Nice. I see you found the solution to Rogue's problem with absorbing personalities. Great chapter can't wait for the next one
Comments from author:
It'll be soon-ish.
Review By [Arekanderu] • Date [22 Dec 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from Grindhall
Review:
Not much I can say that wouldn't be redundant, I mean you've got to know how awesome this is.

But I can say how much I'm enjoying this fic and looking forward to the next chap.

Thanks for Sharing.
Comments from author:
I've got more, I'm just sitting on it while I double-check the later chapters to make sure nothing contradicts itself.
Review By [Grindhall] • Date [22 Dec 07] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from TheMaskedLurker
Review:
--,'{@

Huh. Interesting.
Though I have to ask, Rogue don't
Hang out with black girls?

-[ Growin up in the state in question during my adolescence, I'm guessing poor Rogue didn't hang with the black girls or go to school with a lot of African-Americans. Otherwise, she would have seen that the bump-and-grind was practically the only dance those black chicks do. Guess she's from one of the areas where it's practically all-white. ]-
Comments from author:
Ah. Well up here, there's been such a problem with self-segregation among blacks and Hispanics that we're actually forced to pass numerous laws to try and get black and white kids into the same school. The minorities congregate into self-created ghettos, most of them have issues with properly attending to their children's education (I'm not being racist; my mom works as part of a company-sponsored elementary school program and it's scary to see how many fourth and fifth grade black children stumble with simple addition and subtraction), and then try to turn around and insist that the wealthier parts of the city A.) pay to improve the schools and B.) give additional funding on top of equality to help compensate for the fact that many of them don't have the inclination to sit down with their kids and help them study so they succeed in school.

I assumed that the tendency would be even stronger down south; Meridian, Mississippi (Rogue's hometown) is roughly 50/50 for blacks and whites, but I pictured them living a lot like the people in Connecticut do.
Review By [TheMaskedLurker] • Date [22 Dec 07] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from MistofRainbows
Review:
I liked the twist about beating the guard to death with his own limbs.
Comments from author:
My Illyria has a fondness for that.
Review By [MistofRainbows] • Date [21 Dec 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Jess
Review:
Wow another great Rogue/God-King combo! *HUGS*
Comments from author:
Kinda sorta.
Review By [Jess] • Date [21 Dec 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Past Donor)DreamSmith
Review:
Outstanding.
Only one chapter and I'm already in love with this Rogue; so sweet, and lonely, and not completely unwilling to become a world-class badass.
^_^

One edit: You refer to the pryokinetic as 'him' at the first mention, and again at the end, but in the middle there's this:

--Cocking her head to the side, Illyria just stared back impassively. "Why do you think I brought you along? I could quite easily have killed her without your help. But… you would benefit from killing her in a way that I would not."--

Can't wait for more of this one, dude.

ETA: Two instances of 'her' in that snippet, Joe. You missed one.
(Can you tell I miss being a beta reader? ^_^)
Comments from author:
*looks shiftly* You should read more closely. You're seeing things.
Review By [(Past Donor)DreamSmith] • Date [21 Dec 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Noclaf
Review:
Joe, this fic is bloody awesome! Your brain is a sea of awesomeness.
Comments from author:
And bizarreness. ^_^
Review By [Noclaf] • Date [21 Dec 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Locathah
Review:
I quite enjoyed the chapter :) I particularly enjoy seeing the potential for a stronger Rogue... she has so much potential but, in film, it was largely wasted after the first movie. However while the X-Men may not ADVOCATE killing... they DO kill when necessity calls for it. In the first movie alone Wolverine impales Mystique and leaves her for dead... and Storm pretty much cooks Toad (never to be seen again.) As far as we the viewers could tell there was no fallout for these actions.

Then there's the veritable blood bath that follows Wolverine through the end of the second movie and the majority of the third.

Anyway, very much hoping you continue this... not to mention I'm curious to see just what Illyria's motives are. Given that (providing she survived the demon massacre at the end of angle) she'd be at loose ends she's pretty much open for any motivation you might choose... from following the path Wesley lead her on (i.e. being a white hat if only because she didn't have anything better to do) to attempting to reclaim her god-hood.

I can certainly see why she'd find Rogue appealing... given her limitless potential to almost BECOME a god... with only the small price of killing a large number of mutants to get there. That said, again, what she intends to do with Rogue is still unformed and I'm curious.
Comments from author:
Logan is a law unto himself, and as will become known later in the story, the correctional system has yet to catch up with the idea of mutants in this story.
Review By [Locathah] • Date [21 Dec 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from MarcusRowland
Review:
BAD decision, Marie. It all starts with one homicidal maniac, after a while you're killing people instead of giving them parking tickets...
Comments from author:
Nah, she'll just absorb the right mutant and have the power to pick cars up and throw them when you leave them in a no parking zone...
Review By [MarcusRowland] • Date [21 Dec 07] • Not Rated
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