Excellent story so far. I'd love to read more of it sometime Kinda would like to see a fic like this where they manage to drag X back and Cheery, Carrot, and a few others "convince" Stibbons to use Hex and go after him.
I know it has been a while for this to be updated, but since it isn't listed as complete. (although it does come to a nice stopping point for a short story) I would like to come across an update for it sometime.
On the latest chapter interaction between Buffy, Willow and Xander seems somewhat forced. It would have helped if you had added some questioning about how long they took and why it took this long. Or when exactly this happens in the Buffy time line.
And there are some setting errors, like calling Cheery Littlebottom, yes that is the name, "Cherry".
Or the seamstresses, they are an officially recognized guild, influental, powerfull and respected for that. The name is even so prevalent, that if you ask for a seamstress, people in Ankh-Morpork will direct you to Rosie Palm's girls. You need to ask explicitly about mending clothes to get directions to an actual seamstress. And then the reaction is mostly, "oh, you mean the other kind." It goes so far that an actual seamstress has taken up residence with Rosie Palm for those misdirected cases. (There are some hints she may work as Rosie's personal bodyguard/hit man, too, but she doesn't entertain.)
Review By [greenSkull] • Date [26 Nov 09] • Not Rated
Very nifty story so far, always pleased to see an update... Even if I can't ever remember the name, the first chapter always brings it all back. Your writing doesn't quite match the style of the original loonyverse, but it WORKS.
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Oh, nice job, keep it up.
Review By [Gonadius] • Date [26 Nov 09] • Rating [8 out of 10]
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