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Review of chapter "Roundabout" from zapoteca
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I love this. You have Veronica's voice down perfectly. Her outsider's point of view on the scoobies is really interesting as well. Also, Willow raising her hand to interrupt Tara was just so in character that I had to give it special mention.
Review By [zapoteca] • Date [14 Feb 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Roundabout" from AllenPitt
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though I do have to wonder why they're so ok with bringing someone 'new' into the group....do they need special help of the detective-y kind? Or is Veronica actually the Key? ---
Comments from author:
Again with the guessing. And, correctly, ish. This is becoming a bad habit. ;)

Uh...and no, she's not the Key. That would just hurt people's heads. Including mine.
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [14 Feb 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Roundabout" from martelcris
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Blue or red pill ?
Comments from author:
Door on the right, or Door on the Left? :)
Review By [martelcris] • Date [14 Feb 08] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Roundabout" from spygrrl
Review:
Great first meeting with the Scooby Gang and Veronica. Again, I love getting it from Veronica's analytical POV.
Review By [spygrrl] • Date [14 Feb 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Present" from TheatricalBarrister
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You have a good start here. I like the reason for the Marses moving to SunnyD. I was a bit confused by your spoiler alert, expecting this to be taking place in S5 (post "Fool for Love"), by which point, Willow/Tara are fully out and living together. Just realized I missed the last warning about timelines. If this is S5, but everyone's a freshman, then what happened to S4, the Initiative, and Adam? If that never happened, then why not make it S4? Are they going to have to face Adam and Glory at the same time? :shudders:
Comments from author:
Adam & the Initiative & all of S4 have happened. I hate doing this, but I really need them all to just be freshmen, because I don't want Veronica to have attended Hearst. That's the only change. I'll be alluding to past events to make things clearer.
Review By [TheatricalBarrister] • Date [14 Feb 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Present" from war
Review:
good story looking forward to your next chapter.
Review By [war] • Date [14 Feb 08] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Present" from AllenPitt
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Great idea, having her getting Tara as a friend.... and now being shown 'proof'. If VM seems actual proof, she'll be very intrigued, and want to study it herself to see if she can use it in her PI work, I bet... (and I bet Willow would be very insecure to find tara has another friend)---
One intersection point---murder of the magic shoppe person--if VM goes there (after proof) to scope it out, and sees them find the body or some such, that would get her investigating....
* Wouldn't VM be somewhat famous at this point? well, rather, if Willow googles her she'd find out the stuff about Lily Kane's murder & how her dad cracked the case --
Meanwhile --- imagine the shock. Willow looks just like Trina! (How about: Willow is adopted too, and is T's twin sister) ?
Comments from author:
Good guess...

I won't tell you which, but you'll see soon enough.
Except for the twin thing--there's going to be too much excitement as it is, I don't want to bring in the Trina angle, at least not quite yet. lol.
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [14 Feb 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Present" from (Current Donor)Tempi
Review:
Nice story so far. I like your approach with Veronica meeting the supernatural through Tara. I'm looking forward to reading more.
Review By [(Current Donor)Tempi] • Date [14 Feb 08] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Present" from CPTSkip
Review:
Oooo! Nice. And now Veronica gets sucked into the shadow war. Great job.
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [14 Feb 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Present" from thecrystalkey
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Interesting beginning. Can't wait til she meets the 'other de facto crime solving unit'. :)
Review By [thecrystalkey] • Date [14 Feb 08] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "History" from spygrrl
Review:
Intriguing start. Well done on the VMVO - you definitely captured the tone of her thoughts/voice incredibly well. I also like that you gave us a believable reason for Veronica and Keith to move out of Neptune and to Sunnydale. Looking forward to the two worlds truly colliding. Oh, and great description of the Initiative boys. lol I can totally see Veronica having caught on to that fact.
Comments from author:
Thanks! Getting in Veronica's head is a ton of fun.
Review By [spygrrl] • Date [13 Feb 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "History" from CPTSkip
Review:
Nice job with V's voice. I like it that V is going to meet Tara before the Scoobies do. Please keep writing as I want to see where you are going with your story.
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [13 Feb 08] • Not Rated
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