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The Chronicles of the Red Witch and Her Slayer

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Review of chapter "Chapter One" from TheatricalBarrister
Review:
This is an interesting start, and I'm looking forward to reading more.

I noticed a few spelling errors, such as "We c do this", or using "here" (meaning place) instead of "hear" (meaning detecting noise).

BTW, I know this is AU, but I wanted to point out that in the novels, the sire of JCs line is named "Belle Morte" (no 'a'). Her name is French for Beautiful Death.
Comments from author:
Thank you. I really need to correct her name now. Frowns.
Review By [TheatricalBarrister] • Date [19 Feb 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Chaoskitten
Review:
LOL

*g*

Did she do something to Dawnie? Or Xan-man? can't wait for an update.
Comments from author:
It'll be up soon, I hope. Got the first scene down already.
Review By [Chaoskitten] • Date [19 Feb 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Chan
Review:
Well somehow I'm thinking a lot of trouble will simply follow them about while B/W happen to be in the same area code mucho bad news for the vamps.
Comments from author:
True, so true.
Review By [Chan] • Date [19 Feb 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from rabbitfoot
Review:
please change your spelling of Bella Morte! It's NOT Bella MortIE! That sounds ridiculous. And why are the Slayer and the Red Witch a duo? Why didn't you write Xander in? They are supposed to be a TRIO!! I don't like any fic without Xander, but I especially don't like it when Buffy and Willow don't even care or need him. Bad author! BAD!
Comments from author:
As to Bella, blame my spell checker. As to Xander, well I could come up with a way for Willow and Buffy to live that long, but Xander? No way. And while I do respect your love of the Xan-Man, treating me like a naughty puppy is not the way to show it, ok?
Review By [rabbitfoot] • Date [19 Feb 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from arkeus
Review:
uh...some sentence lacks a lot of letters. Weird. Otherwise fun. Sniff, wanted truly uber WB..
Comments from author:
Thanks. And yeah, gotta change some stuff. Trully uber WB? Where's the fun in that? Let's just stay with semi-uber, ok?
Review By [arkeus] • Date [19 Feb 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Dawnlady
Review:
While I do think a showdown beween the Slayer and the Vampire Council could be fun ..
Research your facts and names it's Jean-Claude, Vampire Council, BellE MortE
Not as important, but I also don't think it can be 2010 in St.Louis - the descriptions in the books make it hard to imagine it being in real time anyway
Comments from author:
Ok, I missed a - in his name, screwed up a word horibly, and I really messed up on her name. Um, I'll corect it later. Thanks for pointing that out. As to the date thing, well, it is supposed to be set in an alternet universe flowing at about the same time ours is, although if I trouly think about it, at's still probaly the late 1990's in the Anitaverse, but, hey, I wanted this fic to be put in the slight future of the Anitaverse, and 2010 seemed to be plenty far ahead for me.

Thanks for pointing these things out,and I will hopefully corect them later. I really need a beta I guess. Just so hard for me to keep them though.
Review By [Dawnlady] • Date [19 Feb 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from CPTSkip
Review:
Interesting beginning to your story. It would be nice if you had a beta reader as I spotted several spelling errors. One is "Vampire Consul" when you meant Vampire Council. Even with the imperfections, I look forward to more of your story.
Comments from author:
I would love a beta, know where I can get one? Seriously though, I have a hard time finding them, let alone keeping them. Must work them too hard or something.

Great to know that you liked this fic though, and thanks for the review. Makes me happy and work harder.
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [19 Feb 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Current Donor)Tempi
Review:
Interesting start. I hope you will post more chapters soon and explain more of the background story. Especially how Buffy and Willow appears to be 1300+ years.

You might want to get a beta reader to help clean up the story. I noticed a bunch of small spelling errors. Other than that you're off to a great start. Please keep up the good work.
Comments from author:
I can never keep a beta for some god unkown reason, but if any want to beta this, you included, that's fine with me.

As to their age, that will be explaned soon, but not too soon. There will be flash backs in this fic, and a few of them will touch on that, as well as other things, like what they did for Jean Claude.

And thanks for the positive review, it warms me up, unlike a flame which burns me up, heh.
Review By [(Current Donor)Tempi] • Date [19 Feb 08] • Rating [9 out of 10]
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