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Review of chapter "The Beginning" from mithrilandtj
Review:
Cool.
Interesting start.

Is one of the Watchers gonna follow to Colorado?
Review By [mithrilandtj] • Date [20 Feb 08] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Beginning" from DeeRose
Review:
Hi,
You have a really interesting idea for a story here, and I've love to see more. (I like all the ideas you have thrown to the wall, they all stick nicely.) The problem is that what you've written so far isn't a story so much as it's a list of events that have happened. That works okay if all you meant for this to be was a introduction or a prologue, but not if the rest of the fic is going to be narrated in the same way. A complete story needs character interaction, and dialog, and scenery. You need to add the who, what, where, why, when and how.

If you need help, feel free to ask.
Dee
Review By [DeeRose] • Date [20 Feb 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Beginning" from Althalus
Review:
Interesting start. A bit out of the blue for some of it, but nice to read.
It will be interesting how the Scoobies will interact with the SGC. And how they will find out about it.
Buffy sensing Teal'c? Dawn/Willow reading some of Daniels texts?

I'll be tracking this one ;-)
Review By [Althalus] • Date [20 Feb 08] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Beginning" from CPTSkip
Review:
Interesting, if a bit bloody, start. I look forward to seeing where you go with your story.
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [20 Feb 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Beginning" from Erryn
Review:
Hi -

I'm not sure where this is going, other than the Scoobies through the StarGate... but you have definitely peaked my interest. Chapter one reads like a prologue to what looks to be a very interesting fic. I look forward to reading more.

Thank you for sharing.
Review By [Erryn] • Date [20 Feb 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Beginning" from megan
Review:
Love your story, I love reading stories where Buffy turns out to be Jack's daughter. Will you be putting flashbacks up like when Jack finds out he has a daughter. Hope the next chapter is out soon?
Review By [megan] • Date [20 Feb 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Beginning" from KnightWulf
Review:
sounds interesting can't wai t till more
Review By [KnightWulf] • Date [20 Feb 08] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Beginning" from Jonakhensu
Review:
Interesting concept, though you seem to be saying, rather than showing. Still, there is potential. Keep it up.
Review By [Jonakhensu] • Date [20 Feb 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Beginning" from GypsyDruid
Review:
heh. cute start
Review By [GypsyDruid] • Date [20 Feb 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Beginning" from DreamOfStories
Review:
It seems Ok, but it could have done with a bit more detail in the parts. I know a lot of people would have wanted to know more about when Jack came, and what happened to Buffy when she found her Mum was dead. Maybe you could include that with some flashbacks soon?

As it was, it seems promising and I'll definitely be keeping track of it...

Good Luck with the story

*Dream*
Review By [DreamOfStories] • Date [20 Feb 08] • Rating [5 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Beginning" from spk
Review:
Definitely an intriguing start. Can't wait to see what you do with this. :)
Review By [spk] • Date [20 Feb 08] • Rating [7 out of 10]
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