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Review of chapter "Crashing Down" from rpgwarrior
Review:
It seems like a real confrontation is brewing between Buffy and Joyce about just how much influence Joyce can exert on the slayer related aspects of her life. I really don't think that Joyce is going to react well when she is hit with some hard truths during that conversation either.
Comments from author:
Yep thats exactly the push I was was giving it. Joyce had the summer to reconcile some things. But this is VERY early in S3. Remember Anne was the first episode and that was before Buffys return there has been only 1 SD episode before this. The current setting is very early in Faith Hope Trick which is the third episode and was when Faith had arrived. Joyce IMO is still running on the in charge principle but Buffy is the Slayer. Joss missed some good story points by not showing more head butting on that basis. The closest that he came to it was Dead Men Walking S3e2.
Review By [rpgwarrior] • Date [29 May 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Crashing Down" from TheatricalBarrister
Review:
Chapter 10 is me! I'm working on it.

EDIT: See my review on 16 May and the response.
Comments from author:
NP Hope you have fun with the little bombshell I passed along to you.
Review By [TheatricalBarrister] • Date [29 May 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Crashing Down" from wizdmgoddes
Review:
more more more!
Comments from author:
Less Less Less! (/Statler&Waldorf)

It's up to whoever grabs ch10. AFAIK it's still unclaimed.
Review By [wizdmgoddes] • Date [28 May 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Crashing Down" from manic
Review:
Oh, Joyce. That was a low blow!! LOL!
Comments from author:
You could say she hit Jack below the (paternity) belt.

:)
Review By [manic] • Date [28 May 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Crashing Down" from DreamOfStories
Review:
Yep, much better.

And I agree with the whole Joyce not cheating thing. After all, what's to say they were married at the time, or that Joyce didn't get into an argument with Hank before they got married... or anything along those lines.

Also, I like the way the security guards are prepared to turn a blind eye to Buffy and Co. The idea that the town is that stupid never really sat right...

So roll on Chapter 10 with Jack and Buffy's response!
Comments from author:
I hope someone picks up ch10. So far no one has stepped forward. If no one does by Fri night then I might be willing to do the first double chapter and maybe help smooth out a few less urgent items if call. agrees.
Review By [DreamOfStories] • Date [28 May 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Crashing Down" from Annadel
Review:
I'm not going to comment on the changing characterizations because that's inevitable when you have so many authors working on one story, but could we please try to avoid the ricocheting points of view?

Please stick with one perspective. Jumping from one character's head to another from one paragraph or sentence to the next starts making some of us feel seasick after a bit.

And yes, knowing Buffy's character, the shock of hearing Joyce's last statement would cause her to tense, thus insuring Jack now has a shattered hand considering the fact she was already bearing down on the poor appendage.
Comments from author:
Well maybe she just sprains it bad or Jack has a minor fracture. But Buffy was told first to Let go by her mother so maybe Jack gets lucky. Depends on next author.
Review By [Annadel] • Date [27 May 08] • Rating [4 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Crashing Down" from (Current Donor)JanessaRavenwood
Review:
Sigh. So now we go to OOC behavior and Buffy bashing. This story's going downhill...
Comments from author:
Please explain in my public email) how I bashed Buffy.

IMO Joyce (Who is under a LOT of stress.) is simply insisting that Buffy follow normal rules of courtesy in that you don't interrupt your parents conversation. Thats the way I was raised and I'm sure in stressful moments Joyce would insist on the same regardless of being somewhat easy going most of the time.

Joyce having a temper is established canon so thats not truly OOC. There are procedures and forms every time you draw your weapon on anyone. Jack doesn't have a legal leg to stand on.

Buffy getting upset and threatening mayhem in protection of a loved one. Well didn't she declare she would let the world end if it meant protecting dawn just that little bit longer. So threats in defense of her mother would not IMO being either OOC or any sort of bashing.
Review By [(Current Donor)JanessaRavenwood] • Date [27 May 08] • Rating [4 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Crashing Down" from Inquisitor
Review:
nice surprise at the end but i think the next sound would had been Jack's hand cracking since Buffy would had crushed it just by that revelation...maybe Willow can do a healing spell to transfer the injuries to Buffy's hand so that she can heal the damage while Jack is recovering...
Comments from author:
Thats up to the next author. Right now Willow can float pencils. Healing spells are another thing.
Review By [Inquisitor] • Date [27 May 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Crashing Down" from grd
Review:
The last line is priceless and should shock everyone into a state that I can't wait to read. Thank you everyone. I was afraid of how this tale would end up with so many authors but I'm very impressed with it so far.
Comments from author:
Well I was left with a nasty cliffhanger and wanted to pass it along. ;-}>
Review By [grd] • Date [27 May 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Current Donor)kcl
Review:
"Buffy, let go of your father's hand." Now that's just evil (and I love it!). What an excellent job with this chapter. The next author has quite the act to follow. I look forward to it.
Review By [(Current Donor)kcl] • Date [27 May 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Crashing Down" from RevDorothyL
Review:
Jack not reading the background briefing does seem a bit more believable than that he'd knowingly go after the child of an old friend, even if he had no ill intent in stalking Buffy originally.
Comments from author:
You hit the nail on the head with what I tried to clear up. Jack was pooped he didn't go through the material as closely as he should have.

Buffy? well it is CA. Joyce and her girl are still in LA. Not this SD place.
Review By [RevDorothyL] • Date [27 May 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Decisions, Decisions" from manic
Review:
Joyce! It's Joyce! I still think Carter's characterization is off. It almost borders on character-bashing, as in Carter-bashing.

Anyways. I'm loving the fic and can't wait for more! Keep up the good work everyone!
Comments from author:
Actually, I'm not Carter bashing at all. I kind of agree with you about the characterization. Personally, she's probably my favorite SG character. She's like a balance between Jack and Daniel, able to see things from both sides of the spectrum. I just went along with how she was written in chapters previously. Honestly, I don't think she would have that negative of a reaction from getting her butt kicked because she's usually more passive than the others, but it's kind of hard to integrate those type of changes when there's more than one person writing the story. As for the mysterious guest, it could be Joyce or Jack or someone else. That decision would be up to the next writer. I'm glad the you're enjoying the story. Thanks for reviewing.

gigi
Review By [manic] • Date [24 May 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Unforeseen Surprise" from manic
Review:
It's turned into a Buffy's-real-father fic! LOL! I don't think Buffy is going to appreciate her mom meeting with one of her stalkers! :)
Review By [manic] • Date [24 May 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Crucifixing it" from manic
Review:
I loved Jack getting hit in the head with a crucifix!! Though, I don't think after everything that has happend so far in the fic, that he would raise his weapon. I thought it hilarious that he even tried to hide! LOL! And what a surprise that he knew Joyce!
Review By [manic] • Date [24 May 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Sisterly Twists" from manic
Review:
I loved Jack's version of the note! As stated in my previous review, I think that giving Buffy a note is a good idea, but I never considered that the team wouldn't wait around for the note to be delivered by mail, and that meant they would have to decide how to pass the note on to Buffy.

Now they might run into one of the main problems they had discussed before deciding on the note method; they will be going near Buffy's mom and might end up being perceived as a threat before the non-threatening note is delivered! I'm loving the fic.
Review By [manic] • Date [24 May 08] • Not Rated
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