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Review of chapter "Chapter 16" from DieselDriver
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The idea of all the so called "fictional universes" being real is explored in a lot of detail in Robert Heinlein's "The Number of the Beast" in which the number is not translated correctly in the modern versions of the Bible because the ancient Jews who received the prophecy did not understand powers of numbers. So, in his story, he postulates that the number is actually 6X10 to the 6th power raised to the sixth power... Not sure how to show that on here.

.........6
.......6
6X10

If that shows up the way I think it should that will be close. Note though that any way you look at it, that's a REALLY BIG number of possible universes. Not infinite but still. And each of those possibilities is only the basic framework in which a multitude of possible outcomes exist. Another point of his story line is that each time an Author writes a new story line, that story is real somewhere else and he is creating it as he writes.

Ah poo. it didn't work. Lined them all up on the left hand margin. I'll put dots in to space them over, maybe that will work.

Basically the exponent 6 is for the whole thing, twice.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [3 Apr 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 15" from DieselDriver
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Ivanova would have liked that "Boom". (B5)
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [3 Apr 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 14" from DieselDriver
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WOO HOO! I love the Scorpions! Finished that chapter in full on belly laugh mode. Way Fun! Another possibility for a theme for that scene would be the old song that starts "I am the God of Hellfire". Can't remember who sang it, "Something Brown???"

Hah! Found it. "The Crazy World of Arthur Brown" the song is "Fire".

The Bible says it best "The wages of Sin are Death." The Goa'uld are definitely sinners to be cast into the lake of everlasting fire.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [3 Apr 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 13" from DieselDriver
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You know, your author's note at the end of this chapter is kind of exasperating. There is no chance whatsoever of me losing interest and the longer the chapter is, if written well, is all for the better. I really didn't notice if it was longer or not...
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [3 Apr 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 12" from DieselDriver
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That's the first time I've ever read someone invoking an actual miracle from God. Being a born again Christian, I kind of like that. God is, of course, able to do this if he chooses and it meets his purpose to do so.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [3 Apr 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 11" from DieselDriver
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Dear Author,

Make the freaking arcs as many chapters as you need to tell that part of the story. If it's 3 chapters fine. If it's 203 chapters that's fine too. The more the merrier. Take a look at the length of some of the story arcs in Diane Castle's magnificent stories. As far as I'm concerned she's the best author on this site. You are very darned good too but you could improve. I honestly like your story lines a lot. Keep writing please. And please don't leave this one unfinished.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [3 Apr 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 10" from DieselDriver
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I thought the whole point of fan fiction was to put the characters into new situations and see what happens. This story is quite good and I'm enjoying it very much. How can they be in character when you don't know what the original would do in the same situation. I think you've extrapolated their actions quite well in this alternate universe.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [3 Apr 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 9" from DieselDriver
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Your use of the English language, as spoken here in America, seems to be pretty close to exactly right. Good use of idioms as well as proper names. Noticed one of two missing words but much better than a lot of English first language people. I'm not looking forward to reaching the stopping point because I'm really enjoying the story and the people... Poor Thor.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [3 Apr 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 7" from DieselDriver
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Ok, this is cool. I always liked the Kendra character and wished she could have survived.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [3 Apr 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 6" from DieselDriver
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Interesting that this later portrayal of Zorro is played by an actor who actually knows some fencing and that he already played the role of the non fictional Errol Flynn (any relation to Flynn in Tron?). Flynn and Basil Rathbone, good guy and bad guy in the most notable Zorro Movie I know of had the interesting juxtaposition of Rathbone having to coach Flynn in fencing in order to make the movie scenes look more believable.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [3 Apr 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from DieselDriver
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Ah man, you haven't updated this since 2011. Come ON! I don't know what happens in the next 27 chapters but I can tell it isn't enough. This is so cool!
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [3 Apr 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from DieselDriver
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More and more fun. Very entertaining. Fah, racial slurs only bother people who are insecure. Others know better and just realize it is either, like yours, unintentional or simply a reflection on the person casting the aspersion. It does not matter to the self assured individual... Sticks and stones etc... Words only hurt if they actually apply or if you let them.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [3 Apr 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from DieselDriver
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Stealth suit. Very cool. Of course first models are bulky and relatively clumsy. Continued refinement will cure that.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [3 Apr 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 1" from DieselDriver
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This is certainly different. Very interesting so far. Trying to make advanced tech work in a different dimension, possibly different basic physical laws, makes for the possibility of very strange work arounds. Looking forward to reading more. Really hope so.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [3 Apr 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from theprincesjewel
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I am amused
I must declare
That Biggs and Wedge
Get a break nowhere.

(Rhyming review day? Who thought that up? Enjoy!)
Review By [theprincesjewel] • Date [14 Mar 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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