Review of chapter "Chapter 29" from Jackaniny
Still loving the story, but it's been a year since last update! Where are you man?
Review By [Jackaniny
] • Date [12 May 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 29" from tgo
This is one of my favorite Marvel BtVS crossovers, also read stelar wonderer, which is really good to. Hope you update soon, cant wait to see what you come up with next.
Review By [tgo
] • Date [13 Apr 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 29" from sajuuk
I SAW THAT YOU ARE INCOME OF THE DEAD, SO I POST THIS REVIEW
I hope you have an armor set for faith but also two iron witch (for use janna and anna) but you have an armor Hulkbuster
I must say that I hope that will continue to evolve Technites while character but also shaped appearance
I hope that the techniques are like internet, video games, but the emissions ausi science fiction and they do make their own technologies and research
ca I say just because I would really love Technites techhnologies create universes like mas effect, halo, gundam, crysis, Section 8 and other ...
I also hope that some Technites follow some of the friends xander and helps to become more mature and close to him but also think outside the box commee they say and using technology in science fiction
otherwise I must say that among the iron man there are some that can give xander technologies other than iron tech
example is an iron emperor iron man who killed fatalis and its technology has conquered the land and founded the Terran Empire
there has ultimate iron man developed neural tissue normally found only in the brain all throughout his body, causing his entire body to act as one massive brain, giving him tremendous mental capacity. However, one of the side effects of the accident from the minute he was born was a extreme dermal sensitivity, making even the sensation of air on his skin feel like severe burns due to the over stimulation of neural cells in his skin. His father, a master inventor and owner and CEO of his own billion dollar tech company, used a newly invented liquid, biological armor to ease Tony's agony; a buffer allowing him to interact with the world normally, but one he would have to wear for the rest of his life. Despite the pain, he is endowed with regenerative capabilities due to the same mutation that caused the neural cells to differentiate all over his body allowing him to completely regenerate whole body parts if necessary. The biotechnology armor he wears is constructed out of genetically modified bacteria that are able to group together to dissipate kinetic energy when impacted upon, allowing the wearer to withstand tremendous blows and is able to dissolve any metal that can be oxidized. The two disadvantages of this biotech armor, which made it unmarketable, are that it can be easily neutralized by being washed off with antibacterial soap and water and, more importantly, that it will dissolve a normal human's skin after a few hours if not thoroughly washed off. This "side effect" worked well with Tony's regenerative capabilities, seeing as how his skin would regenerate as fast as the armor would eat it making it a perfect fit. Another secondary problem was that, initially, the liquid armor turned his skin a bright blue hue making socialization and the idea of going to a normal school more difficult.
there is the iron maniac, which is a Starrk whose world was destroyed by is technology and so the armor is composed of nanorobot that this can change at any blades, weapons and tools
there is the Mandarin iron that killed Mandarin and recreate and improve power rings of the Mandarin
I even believe that there is a stark tony who replace red richardss in one dimension and makes armor with unstable particles of four fantastic
I think Xander can exceed all stark
but it must do so in his way
relax and have a mind can with video games (still a teen)
also make sure that they can include a more his friends as the young Tony Stark in IRON MAN ARMORED ADVENTURES and why it proposes to pay them training in trades that may interest them in his business
kendra in music and dance
Faith in the car
buffy in psychology or other
willow in IT
oz in logistics
tara in Ingenerie (and of course the magic)
giles in the commerce, history and archeology for his contacts
joyce in art and commemorative effects (a secretary who know the secret of xander and assistance especially after discovering the supernatural)
if your going to see Xander move all his secrets in Lilandra and his ship make its mobile base as the helicopter for the shield??
Xander goes on t he aler worlds as the world advanced Tollan, arshen, nox, asgard, atlantis and steal, hack, copy their database??
is that the DNA of xander can be change again but next time with the dna of the elders??
what glory is when attack is that by xander Pasera extremis (a new super soldier serum in which a stark amalgamate with his armor and becomes stronger, faster, intelligent and able to interact in thought with the technology)?
otherwise you can use the type and design of the armor gundam which has the theme of Souvant knight but also of the angel
will see Gundam Wing, Gundam Seed, Gundam 00 and Gundam age and you will see I speak of Iroquois
but mostly they have weapons that I think are versatile enough that they could have the level of power required for a Vampire to a glorrificus
a french reviewer
ps writting soon after or take a partner to write when you can not
Review By [sajuuk
] • Date [8 Feb 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 29" from winddancer
Outstanding series. I have not read your other works but I plan on doing so. I like that you bring other series to the mix but not so much as to overwhelm the story. Thank you for your hard work and for sharing the story. Looking foreword to More when you can. Good luck.
Review By [winddancer
] • Date [6 Dec 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 29" from budrick
continuing to enjoy the fic ,hope we dont have to wait as long for the next chapter ,keeping the creative juices going is important , i happen to enjoy crossovers with the marvel and dc universes ,but i do have 1 question as it has been 7 months now since the last update , when can we expect the next chapter to arrive? or is it on hiatus ??
Review By [budrick
] • Date [19 Nov 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 29" from MissArrowette
Really cool read. I enjoyed the Iron Man focus--the whole thing reminds me a little of the Journey 'verse stories, with the multiple well-done crossovers. Good voices and characterizations. I like what you've done with Jenny and her clan although I could definitely go for a little more SG-1 interaction. While I don't mind them coming off rather....slow? frustrated? it would be nice to see more of a confrontation, recruitment, or Pal-Core business deal crop up in the plot line.
Can't wait to see how it keeps evolving!
Review By [MissArrowette
] • Date [19 Oct 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 29" from Genesis
keep it up I am looking forward to the rest of the story
Review By [Genesis
] • Date [18 Sep 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 29" from rankokunathree
cant wait for the next chapter love the story! cliff hanging it really annoys me! but then it usually means the next chapter is going to be fantastic!
Keep up the awesome writing!
Review By [rankokunathree
] • Date [6 Sep 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 29" from greysh
Lovely fic! A new twist ^-^ I hope that you will continue with this wonderfull crossover.
Review By [greysh
] • Date [27 Aug 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 29" from Bunney
Beautiful...just wow :) Just read this all in one sitting and while you have admittedly skipped around you have done it successfully for this fic to be read as a universal plot with out having several different stories running at once. So that even in its unfinished state I feel like i know what's going on :) So Update as RL lets you and I shall definitly be waiting here on the other end to read it :)
Later and Love
Review By [Bunney
] • Date [17 Aug 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 29" from Speakertocustomers
I agree with Semil and Thedruid. This chapter is going in directions that make the story pretty much unreadable. A shame when it showed so much promise earlier.
Review By [Speakertocustomers
] • Date [27 Jul 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 29" from Darklight
Nice new part, like the change of plans of the Mayor, even with all the foresight Xander has with the knowledge of the starks, he still can miss stuff.
In some way I don't think the Mayor is going to turn himself in Lotesh, even with the increase in size, power and being able to fly, it wouldn't be enough against the silver paladine. Looking forward to see what plans the mayor made to make everything go down without a hiccup and kick some paladine and Mitril butt, or at least not go down in one fight of shot.
Like the idea of Xander going his own way, but have the option to call for help. Don't overpower Xander.
Keep the chapters coming
Comments from author:
Don't worry, Xander's not going to be overpowered. Yes, Wilkins IS trying to turn into Lotesh - but whether he gets what he wants in full is another matter entirely.
Review By [Darklight
] • Date [6 Jun 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 29" from Elleria
Looking forward to the next bit.
Review By [Elleria
] • Date [28 May 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 29" from LFW
Michael Knight is a nice touch, but I do so love the touch of 'Full Metal Panic'
Is a dark haired school girl going to start hitting Xander with a paper fan now?
Looking forward to more
Review By [LFW
] • Date [25 May 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 29" from Semil
This chapter basically ruined the rest of the story for me. Involving Knight Rider and Mithril didn't bother me as much as Xander's seeming acceptance of the blockade and being followed. He was yelling at himself one sentence, the next he's perfectly fine with going along. Maybe its explainable, but it wasn't explained, so the incredible shift between the two makes absolutely no sense.
Add that to the sudden appearance of "wanded" magic users...if this is Harry Potter then I'm gone. I know there's a companion story that features Harry Potter with the Iron Magus Supremus armor, but because this universe and that one are almost entirely incompatible I just ignore it for the sake of my own sanity. At the very least you need to explain what wanded magic is, how its different from whatever other magics Xander might know about, and why he's so surprised to see her.
The appearance of Faith and Kendra...did Jenny not call them, do they just do whatever they want and fuck the consequences, or are the under mind control. This isn't even a cliff hanger, its just incredibly frustrating in its lack of explanation.
The entire chapter features a glaring lack of description and explanation. Unless your plan is to drive people to wikipedia to look things up you need to explain more. I'm of an age to remember Knight Rider, but I bet alot of people only know it second hand or from the horrible remake. Things just happen, people react, and no reason for either is given. There's a roadblock ahead of Xander and a car behind, but we get literally no descriptions of either. Are the people in the roadblock armed? Are they driving economy cars, Humvee's, or tanks? Why doesn't Xander go around them? I'm not even arguing about the direction the story takes, but it feels like you're a tour guide and the bus we're in has blacked out windows, we only get the barest details.
I'm also fairly confused as to why Xander both put Jenny on speaker phone and didn't tell her. Did he get a lobotomy just for that paragraph? He's meeting with a clandestine group he's never heard of and people he's never met, but he's fine with letting Jenny say whatever she wants without knowing they'll hear? Its another point where your vision for the story overtakes (and violently bludgeons) both suspension of disbelief and any reasonable or explainable though process.
Overall I liked the story up until this chapter, when it took a turn into bizarre character interactions.
Review By [Semil
] • Date [25 May 11] • Not Rated