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Review of chapter "Chapter Twelve: Protector in the Shadows" from Elorie
Great potential - and beginning. You've set yourself up for a really long story here...
Review By [Elorie] • Date [16 Aug 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Twelve: Protector in the Shadows" from removedauthor
I thought the story was fantastic and I hope you continue to write it.
Review By [removedauthor] • Date [28 Jul 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Twelve: Protector in the Shadows" from Joseph
One of the best!
Review By [Joseph] • Date [29 Mar 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two: Hellmouth opening" from Runewolf
Just started this story. I like it, though I'm not familiar with the original story. I suspect I'd get more if I was. I am beginning to pick it up.

The overview you provided was just enough information without feeling like an info dump. I didn't even realize you'd snuck the info in. That's really hard to do... you see too many big info dumps in fanfic.
Review By [Runewolf] • Date [2 Mar 13] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Twelve: Protector in the Shadows" from Vianca
It´s ALIVE!!!!

Good to see this one is still around.
Suggest Andrew builds two Holo-emmiters, one can be used as a live scan map display in 3D.

When is this in comparison to Stargate?
Why I ask this?

The incomplete Goa'uld spacecraft is a makeshift spacecraft constructed by cloned Goa'uld in Steveston, Oregon.

Yeah, it might be a good idea to ad some updates to quite a few sat´s.
And I´m talking about senor updates here.
This should let them find places that they might want to investigate.

For the the moment they should think about base-building.
Power-armor is a must.
Shame "Bubblegum Crisis" or "Starcraft" it´s base constructor(s) ain´t there, but I understand the why.
As for why it´s a shame, the first has female power-armor, the second has Starcraft it´s tech-tree.

They might need transport, does the sealed chaos-storage-room have a few terrain verhincels from both the Halo games and the first Final Fantasy movie?
Why I ask this?
They look basicaly the same, so if they can recreate them in a bigger size, then they could take the best parts of both verhincels.
Atleast in terms of mecha power, the Andromeda should have pretty good armor, while the Gundam-Seed verse has Phase-Shift Armor, so part of the quistion then becomes which version of the Archangel class mobile assault ship is it?
If it´s the Archangel her self, from when does she come?
Start of the Anime or some other time periode?
Because the technical data of certain things can only be entered at a later date.
But in the later date there is a limited energy shield that seems way better then that of Star Wars and if you ad in the Master Chief his personal shield....
Depending on the fact if the later Gundam models are onboard, the Stargazer´s Voiture Lumiere light propulsion system is there to be studied.

Also, is somebody walking around with a real version of the missing planet ring?
If so, there might just be a un-expected appearence of a certain captain.

As for weapons, both Final Fantasy and Magical Girl Lyrical Nanoha have a few nice ones, just as the real world.
And can you say hoverboard?
Yeah, but think for a moment, with how small their production factories are now, it is a good way to get a weapon that you could use as a hoverboard and maybe even as free-standing weapon platforms.

Heh, atleast the Celsius (from FF-X2) gives them dress-spheres.
Don´t know if those com-spheres are usefull in any way, but I can see how the ability to make more dress-spheres could be usefull.

Here are the links to a the Halo "Warthog" and the Final Fantasy Spirits Within "Bandit"
Also take note of the Final Fantasy Spirits Within "MXOV-801 large-scale transportation shuttle", since it´s way better in looks then a Halo "Pelican dropship".

As for Nanoha, all the spells are based on math.
But these two links might help you a bit, else look on youtube or so.

ps: Do take note of the action-figure that could have been used to show how certain costumes would look or should be worn.
How many Gundams would you find in that section?
If you go from the fact that the universe has the same resources as any alternative universe might have, then different tech trees are possible to be developd, like the one from Babylon-5, Star Trek or Mass Effect.
But might I point you to the fact that they didn´t try to download the databanks of Superman´s capsule?

If you want to have a bit of fun, let them get a Delorian and give it both a "Back to the Future" flying car and a "James Bond" diving car make-over.
Great way to mess with people like the SGC, NID, ect, ect.
Off course, if they find a blue police telephone box inside the chaos storage seal......
Comments from author:
hi Vianca, that's a nice idea with the Halo technologies. As for the missing planeteer ring ;) don't worry, all will be resolved somewhere in the future. About Magical Girl Nanoha... I am not very sure how their magic works to be truthful. But I'll be taking note of all of your interesting suggestions!
Review By [Vianca] • Date [5 Nov 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Twelve: Protector in the Shadows" from JediKnight
Nice work on the update you have, but you have several grammar mistakes or missing words(too many thing for me to copy and paste) in the chapter that at points made sentences hard to understand. I hope to read more soon
Review By [JediKnight] • Date [5 Nov 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Twelve: Protector in the Shadows" from mojtaba
Youre story is amazing. i cant wait to read more and more!! keep on writing!!
Review By [mojtaba] • Date [4 Nov 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Seven: Beginning of the End 1/2" from iamjmph
So I'm rereading this story cause i finally got a break from life, and saw the update... so to start with, THANK YOU for writing this story... its a great story and I'm glad to see it continued.. There may be some spelling and grammar mistakes, but id be a hypocrite to point them out as i suck at spelling and grammar.(15 mistakes when i used spell checker for this review)

I''m reviewing for this chapter just to day, its too bad you didn't include the season 8 stuff... then they might have realized that Angel is just a selfish prick who did what he did for "his" sake... As proved by how uncaring he is about all the death and destruction he caused as Twilight just so he could get in Buffy's pants again.

Anyways, it is a great story, HATE your PTBs, but that's usually the case with the PTB... any leader who talks about sacrifice, but relies on others to make those sacrifices is not a good person. Truman was willing to become a monster in order to spare American lives... while he didn't press the button himself... well its all on him isn't it... most people don't even remember the name of the plane that's dropped the bomb, much less the names of the crew....

sorry bout the rant Thanks Again
Comments from author:
Thanks iamjmph for the review :) yeah I am sort of avoiding Season 8 stuff because I bought and read through the comics halfway and decided that it is really not for me ^^" I prefer to have my open ended Season 7 actually, though I migh be using elements of Season 8.
Review By [iamjmph] • Date [2 Nov 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Twelve: Protector in the Shadows" from Genuka
You know that you're an evil mastermind right?
Comments from author:
^^ would be better if I have my own little kingdom too ;)
Review By [Genuka] • Date [1 Nov 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Twelve: Protector in the Shadows" from MistofRainbows
It's nice to see another chapter of the story out. It's nice to see Buffy finally decide to tell Joyce... I'm hoping that Xander has more than two seals for Dawn... she needs at least 5 to 10 to be able to defend herself against Glory :) And not just a weapon... go for real power Dawn... real power I say. But seriously nice job on the chapter.
Comments from author:
Thanks MistofRainbows! Yup, Dawn will be getting real power and companions in the near future ;)
Review By [MistofRainbows] • Date [1 Nov 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Twelve: Protector in the Shadows" from Morgomir
Another fantastic addition to this great story. Keep up the good work.
Comments from author:
Thank you Morgomir :)
Review By [Morgomir] • Date [30 Oct 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Twelve: Protector in the Shadows" from KingHawke
the monk was an amusing yet surprisingly resourceful character. I hope Cortana gets a holographic projector; or better yet, an android body! like the body of the internet demon who tried to bed Willow in the show. operation Hell Watch should be interesting considering how obnoxious the Watcher's Council is. I can't wait till they stare down the barrel of Master Chief & are under the blade of the Jedi. however, sneaking up on Wilkins will take a special amount of stealth. can't wait to see it!
Comments from author:
Thanks for your review KingHawke :) yeah the holographic projector will be given to Cortana soon, I am working to tie down the main story with the side story.
Review By [KingHawke] • Date [30 Oct 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One: Konoha Halloween" from AlphaBeta
Good to see your back!
Comments from author:
Thank you AlphaBeta!
Review By [AlphaBeta] • Date [29 Oct 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Twelve: Protector in the Shadows" from CageFire
Awesome to see a new chapter. It's been a while, and I'm really looking forward to reading more. :)

Wow, I just checked my records, it's been over a year since the last update. I'm assuming you had some real life issues. That seems to be the given reason lately, and it's an understandable one. It would be so nice if we lived in a world where all the necessities were taken care of with replicators or something so people didn't have to work all the time.
Comments from author:
Thanks CageFire for the review :) yeah got some stuff going on. Hopefully I will be able to get back to writing now. ^^
Review By [CageFire] • Date [29 Oct 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Twelve: Protector in the Shadows" from Thedruid
I thought thigs was abdonaed, glad to see it back. More chapters soon, there is ALOT going on!
Comments from author:
Thanks Thedruid for all of your reviews! :)
Review By [Thedruid] • Date [29 Oct 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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