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Review of chapter "Comes the Dawn" from AllenPitt
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No need to do anything drastic to get rid of the extra girls--just have them scared off by the spooky powers, plus the boys all switch their interest to Dawn, sensing her key -power-ness. Hm,which she doesn't know about yet.....
Comments from author:
Yeah, the Key is going to be a little different than in the series, but you'll have to stay tuned to find out how.
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [23 Jun 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Comes the Dawn" from Zith
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I don't think you should do away with them permanently; just make them like other people (or be interested in the boys but then find someone else they like better). It would be nice for them to stay friends with Dawn.
Comments from author:
Yeah, I'm thinking maybe Kate gets pulled out of Spenser after the spiders thing but Sarah will probably hang around.
Review By [Zith] • Date [23 Jun 08] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Comes the Dawn" from Dragonpink
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To get rid of Kate you can just let her get caught being a little to chummy with Chase. In the movie if I remember right Pogue gets jealous over how she acts, so for the sake of the story you can just give him something to get so jealous over that he dumps her?
Comments from author:
Not sure yet. I think Chase is a little too creepy, but I'll think about it. Thanks for the review.
Review By [Dragonpink] • Date [23 Jun 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Comes the Dawn" from kidkili
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To get rid of the girls maybe you could have Kate end up with Chase like the movie implies is headed that way, and split her and Pogue up. Then Sarah just not end up with Caleb out of deference to her first school friend and roomate. Girl Solidarity and Girl Power and all that.
Comments from author:
No, Chase is still the bad guy. Yeah, I'll probably do that with Sarah. I really don't like the damsel in distress thing she had going.
Review By [kidkili] • Date [23 Jun 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Comes the Dawn" from Melli
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This is a great start! Only the first chapter and you already have me hooked. :)

I love how you are writing Dawn into the Covenant plot, it should be very interesting to see the movie with a Dawn-twist to the entire thing. I especially loved Dawn's snarking at Kira, and the characterization seems dead-on so far. Hmm, as far as what to do with Sarah and Kate; killing them off would probably leave too much drama (particularly for Pogue), you could play into what the movie implied and have Kate end up going for Chase, but that still leaves Sarah... hmm. Possibly her moving away or if you felt like bringing in another Sunnydale native, sticking them with her? Grr. I will have to think of something and get back to you on that one. ;)

Anyway; enough of my verbal effusiveness. Please keep up the excellent work; I can't wait for the next chapter!

EDIT: Oops, sorry, I accidentally double-clicked and posted twice and I have no idea how to delete the duplicate. My apologies. Perhaps I adore your story so much that I subconsiously couldn't stand the possibility of the possibility of you somehow missing the first review? ;)
Review By [Melli] • Date [23 Jun 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Comes the Dawn" from CelticWitch
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Good read so far u really don`t see alot of good stories with Dawn . And one of My Fav Characters
Comments from author:
Thanks.
Review By [CelticWitch] • Date [23 Jun 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Comes the Dawn" from Melli
Review:
This is a great start! Only the first chapter and you already have me hooked. :)

I love how you are writing Dawn into the Covenant plot, it should be very interesting to see the movie with a Dawn-twist to the entire thing. I especially loved Dawn's snarking at Kira, and the characterization seems dead-on so far. Hmm, as far as what to do with Sarah and Kate; killing them off would probably leave too much drama (particularly for Pogue), you could play into what the movie implied and have Kate end up going for Chase, but that still leaves Sarah... hmm. Possibly her moving away or if you felt like bringing in another Sunnydale native, sticking them with her? Grr. I will have to think of something and get back to you on that one. ;)

Anyway; enough of my verbal effusiveness. Please keep up the excellent work; I can't wait for the next chapter!
Comments from author:
Thank you, I'm glad you liked it. Bringing in someone else has possibilities. I'll have to think about it.
Review By [Melli] • Date [23 Jun 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Comes the Dawn" from JarodsSlayer
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As a suggestion for Kate, you could have Pogue find Kate cheating on him. Oh, and I love the story.
Comments from author:
Yeah, I might do that, though I've seen it done a few times. Thanks for the review.
Review By [JarodsSlayer] • Date [23 Jun 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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