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Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty-Five" from Izar
Review:
nice story hope you finish it
Comments from author:
Thanks!

There will only be a chapter or two before the fic is completed; unfortunately I'm devoting most of my free time to my Uni work; but it will be completed soon.

Glad you like the story :)
Review By [Izar] • Date [28 Oct 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty-Five" from Thedruid
Review:
Ok ok, enough already! We're up to several thousand words, and over 30 chapters. 80% of this story is agnst. Another 18% is foreshadowing of what is going to happen. That leaves 2% to be actual story! Alot of things keep on happening in this fic, but little actual plot and charcter developent is actually happening. Might as well have injected 2 agnsty 8 year olds into the story, give them some psychic powers, and write this entire thing as a re-write of Stargate episodes with them hovering in the backgroud.

The concept is good, but you seem to constantly write about how this charcter or that charcter is worried, niave, what-are-we-going-to-do, what-can-happen-next, etc. instead of advanceing the story, or having the courage to deviate alot from the Stargate plotline. The mere fact it's Willow and Xander doesn't really seem to mean anything so far. Also I am so sick of the agnst in this story that I find myself just skimming through at this point trying to find actual plot-lilne. I did the same thing when the Anita Blake series because so over-done with the Audur.
Comments from author:
Well, I'm sorry you don't like the story.

I would have more to say, but there really isn't a lot of, if any, constructive criticism here.

Maybe find something more to your liking?

Thanks for the review!
Review By [Thedruid] • Date [21 Sep 11] • Rating [3 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty-Five" from Eureka
Review:
So they are going home, but it will be a bit? Can't they just explain to SG1 that they have their memories back and try to work something out?
Apparently Amy will never get better huh?
Comments from author:
The story will end in the next two or three chapters, they might work something out :) There might be a sequel at some point

I don't think anything short of an apocalypse could sort Amy out, doomed from season one's 'Witch' onward.

Thanks for reviewing :)
Review By [Eureka] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty-Five" from RevDorothyL
Review:
Awww...! But at least if Willow and Xander go back home, perhaps SG1, the Asgard, and the Tok'ra will have one less thing to worry about, in regard to the Goa'uld (much though they'd miss their little mischief-makers and smiley-sun-draw-ers!).
Comments from author:
Yep, there will definitely be a lot less trouble when the Goa'uld aren't bent on getting Willow's magic; unfortunately they're running into the age of 'Replicators' and 'Anubis', with the 'Ori' not far behind :)

Willow and Xander will certainly leave a lot behind; smiley-suns included :D

Thanks for the review!
Review By [RevDorothyL] • Date [15 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty-Five" from (Current Donor)vidicon
Review:
Going back to Cleveland...And visiting the Stargate dimension, not a safe thing to do...So they will loose at least these versions of SG1.

Also, poor Amy.
Comments from author:
Unfortunately, yes.

Amy never did have much of a chance with Catherine Madison as her mum; at least she never body-snatched :)

Thanks for the review!
Review By [(Current Donor)vidicon] • Date [15 Sep 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty-Four" from MarcusSLazarus
Review:
The question of what Amy sought to accomplish by de-aging Xander and Willow and sending them to another reality might be a bit elusive at the moment- what exactly did she gain by doing something so ridiculously complicated when she could have just killed them; I can’t imagine that Xander’s presence changed Amy’s original spell THAT much?-, but I can’t argue with the results.

Their childish reactions and confusion over what’s happening to them after they arrive in the SGC, combined with SG-1’s natural desire to protect the children, came across very well, and the obvious anomalies caused by the injuries they retained after their regression- particularly Xander’s lost eye- and Willow and Xander’s ‘flashbacks/forwards’ (They might be of Willow and Xander’s chronological pasts but they’re physically older in them) of the events that occurred in their lives with Buffy add a very interesting edge to their interaction with the rest of the team.

Add in the tragedy of Willow and Xander’s counterparts lives in the Stargate universe, and things were interesting even before you introduced the Goa’uld’s awareness of their presence and the successful infiltration of the SGC (Even if I think that last one was a LITTLE too far due to the unfortunate ‘coincidence’ factor and the fact that issue didn’t come up in the original show, although I admit that’s because I prefer AUs with a specific catalyst where everything changes from that point onwards only).

Admittedly, the current ‘back-and-forth’ nature of their attempts to keep Willow safe from the Goa’uld is a BIT repetitive, but with Buffy apparently coming to get her friends back I have a feeling that things are about to get VERY interesting on that score...

Keep up the good work!

(Just don’t forget to explain why Amy felt the ‘need’ to de-age Willow and Xander as well as send them to another reality)
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review!

I know Amy's reason hasn't yet been explained, but this will be partly addressed in chapter 35, the reasoning will be explained by the end of the fic (hopefully within one or two more chapters).

I'm glad you like Willow and Xander's interaction with SG1, it certainly is fun to write :)

I got the feeling that it was a little repetitive too; thankfully, the Asgard are more capable of protecting them, otherwise the SGC would have had to come up with something else.

Glad you liked the fic.

Chapter 35 has been posted up, hopefully it'll begin to answer your questions.
Review By [MarcusSLazarus] • Date [28 Aug 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty-Four" from jgoodman
Review:
Love this story and can't wait to read more
Comments from author:
Thanks, chapter 35 should be finished soon :)
Review By [jgoodman] • Date [21 Aug 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty-Four" from leelaa
Review:
Superb. Sorry for reviewing so late. Looking forward to the next chapter. :)
Comments from author:
Glad you like it!

The next chapter should be up soon; the August fic a day challenge is taking up a lot of my writing time; but on the up-side: companion fics ;-)

Hopefully the story will be finished very soon

Thanks for reviewing!
Review By [leelaa] • Date [11 Aug 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty-Four" from VillageOrchid
Review:
Continuing to enjoy this story!

I noticed a vocabulary issue in this chapter and it appeared in one other chapter. Our solar system, or stellar system includes the sun and our planets and our asteroids.... but we're just one system in the milky-way galaxy - where I believe that almost all of the G'oauld activity takes place. Pegasus, that's another galaxy.

Oops edit. Atlantis series takes place in another Galaxy. Andromeda is a neighboring star, if my memory has been jump started correctly... or it could be another galaxy in the Captain Harlock series.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [5 Aug 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty-Three" from VillageOrchid
Review:
Okay... and now I'm hoping that "Ben" is an alter for Methos.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [5 Aug 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty-Two" from VillageOrchid
Review:
An unexpected teaser from the Buffy-verse side of the story. And tension on Carter's one or two doses of brain-washing. Hopefully the Asgard have a medical scanner subroutine with transport beams... but maybe not???
Comments from author:
Wow, thanks for all the reviews!

Do you mean 'the tickle' she felt one or twice in her mind? If so, I've already hinted as to who caused it, but it will be addressed within the last few chapters; allmost completed
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [5 Aug 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty-One" from VillageOrchid
Review:
Ah... waiting for... Xander to quote Clark's law of magic and science ... it is Clark, right? It wouldn't be out of the ordinary to hear it from Willow, but I'd like Xander to surprise them. Older Xander would have known it and used it from time to time.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [5 Aug 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty" from VillageOrchid
Review:
Oh. Simon Wells. Well, common enough surname. Colorful sparkles are a good thing. I wonder how long it will take her to access the "white" energy.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [5 Aug 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Twenty-Nine" from VillageOrchid
Review:
I'm glad you got everyone back. Still waiting to find out if Lt. Wells is Andy Wells.
Comments from author:
Thanks!

Lt. Simon Wells is the airman who was wounded in 'Heroes', Janet was trying to patch him up when she was killed by a jaffa. This is about four or five years before then, so he's just started out at the SGC.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [5 Aug 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Twenty-Eight" from VillageOrchid
Review:
Oooh. Was Hammond compromised by the nanites?
Comments from author:
Nah... but, that would be a concern if he was though :)
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [5 Aug 11] • Not Rated
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