Review of chapter "ANYA" from missinglink
Actually giving it an 8 or 9 for the story, but if this is going how I see it laying out then that alone deserves a 10. Verbage aka back and forth needs work or you were just trying to make it appear more wooden with Anya. Not completely feeling the right vibe even though I am so glad someone found a good cue to do a Grosse xover with. Of course it would have to go without saying that Cordy's dad is the hit. Please make sure you lay out the ground work that he doesn't know the hit well as that was part of the charm/catalyst in the movie that he was getting closer to the girl again only to have this blow up in his face. Oooo who will you get for the Ackroid role? Guess it could just be a straight rip as there was no past connection outside the world of assassination between them. Man, really want this to be superb. Hope it works well for you. Will be anxious for more.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the constructive criticism! I am now revamping some of the plot element due to your feedback (see, this is why more people should write detailed reviews--they can influence the story). I obviously hit my target with Anya's dialogue: she is not the 99% humanized version we know and love, as she was not exposed to the constant criticism of the Scoobies, nor the multiple back-and-forthing of demon to human, as she wasn't stood up at the altar. Her AU husband had much less of a mellowing influence on her, and it shows. This is going to be the case with most of the characters we encounter. Think back to season 3, and then take away Xander's influence on a character for the next ten years. Some of it's gonna be ugly, but I think it'll be worth the read.
Review By [missinglink
] • Date [30 Jun 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "ANYA" from Wauzi
Sounds interesting! I absolutely love that movie and can't wait to read more. Keep up the good work!
Review By [Wauzi
] • Date [30 Jun 08] • Not Rated