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Review of chapter "Never Say the "W" Word" from borgthreeofnine
Review:
sounds intresting so far cant wait for more
Review By [borgthreeofnine] • Date [10 Jul 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Never Say the "W" Word" from darkmagician
Review:
What kind of trainer is he gonna be? Is he gonna be a general trainer like Ash, or a specialist like Misty?
Comments from author:
He's a generalist, but I haven't decided if he'll just have his six party Pokemon or if he somehow brought all of his Pokemon with him.
Review By [darkmagician] • Date [9 Jul 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Never Say the "W" Word" from (Past Donor)gunsmith
Review:
This story is good... for a second, I almost thought Xander became a Pokemon (like Mew) due to the title at first glance before I read the summary. I'm excited to see what sort of chaos Xander will unleash with his Pokemon Team. Keep it up!
Comments from author:
Thanks! The title was originally going to be the name of the challenge "The Change-Man and Monsters," but I decided to go with something I came up with myself, hence "Zeppomon" (admittedly it's not that original, but *shrugs*)
Review By [(Past Donor)gunsmith] • Date [9 Jul 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Never Say the "W" Word" from (Recent Donor)Dakaath
Review:
The idea of your story is a good one, with a good solid start.
Good grammar, spelling, and punctuation usage.

Make sure to reread your story before posting, possibly aloud, to catch any errors.
Errors to fix:
Willow slammed the book in front of her shut in frustration. Xander had been gone for almost a week since Xander had disappeared and they hadn’t been able to find any clues to his whereabouts.

At his feet was a reddish-brown fox-like creature with six red, curly tails and a curly tuft of red fur on the top of its red.

All in all a good start. I really liked the detail you put into the ritual and how you defined the different shapes. The mysterious part about the two beings was a good teaser as well.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review!

I tend to have some typos like that, so I appreciate any help in finding them. It mostly comes from getting distracting while I'm writing and my thoughts getting a little jumbled.
Review By [(Recent Donor)Dakaath] • Date [9 Jul 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Never Say the "W" Word" from SwedishFrog
Review:
Please make this a really long fic?
Pretty please with lots of pokeballs and a naked Xander on top?
Comments from author:
Gah! Don't tempt me with naked men!

But seriously, I'm really thinking about making this much longer than I had originally intended. People really seem to be loving it, so I'll give them what they want.

Thanks for reviewing!
Review By [SwedishFrog] • Date [9 Jul 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Never Say the "W" Word" from darkmagician
Review:
I hope this one continues. I read another Pokemon story that never went anywhere. Good luck!
Comments from author:
It's definitely going to continue and it's going to be longer than I had originally thought it would be. I'm getting a lot of requests for it to be longer and a smart authoress gives her readers what they want.

Thanks for reviewing!
Review By [darkmagician] • Date [9 Jul 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Never Say the "W" Word" from Siggisab
Review:
Ok, nice start, i looking forward to the next chapters (many please)
Comments from author:
I wasn't planning on making this one very long, but I may reconsider since so many people seem to be enjoying it.
Review By [Siggisab] • Date [9 Jul 08] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Never Say the "W" Word" from (Current Donor)Shieldage
Review:
Neat. I want the iscosahedron ice-mold :D

Effectively neat way to get the vampire-character-destruction part of the Challenge out of the way. Poor Dru, I guess she saw a vision of what her life would be like without Spike's healing ritual, so she decided to join him in the sun :)
Comments from author:
Yeah, I was hoping no one would question the logistics of getting a block of ice in the shape of an icosahedronal block of ice. I was going to say it was chiseled, but I like the idea of an ice mold better.

I hadn't really wanted to kill Dru (she's one of my favorite Buffy characters), but I decided just take her and Spike out together as a couple.

Anyway, thanks for the review.
Review By [(Current Donor)Shieldage] • Date [9 Jul 08] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Never Say the "W" Word" from Tjin
Review:
Vulpix? hmmm... a good start to a story, hopefully we will get to see more soon.

-Tjin
Comments from author:
Thanks for reviewing!

Yeah, I picked Vulpix because Vulpix is one of my faves, but I'll explain more about him (yes, the Pokemon are going to have gender since I'm using game continuity) in the next chapter.
Review By [Tjin] • Date [9 Jul 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Never Say the "W" Word" from Weaver
Review:
Pretty good, somewhat suprisingly. I kind of had Pokemon down as a series that was uncrossover-able beyond relatively minor references or without some alterations taking place, but you seem to have pulled it off pretty well.

p.s. There's a new chapter of my Hallow-verse fic if you're interested.
Comments from author:
Thanks for reviewing. I'll check out your new chapter, I have the next chapter of mine in the works, it'll just depend on my imagination giving me some stuff to finish it up.
Review By [Weaver] • Date [9 Jul 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Never Say the "W" Word" from (Recent Donor)Deamondeathstone
Review:
Would Xander be old enough for a Xander/Jenny pairing? I like and unless it becomes slash I'll keep reading it.
Comments from author:
Thanks for reviewing. I haven't really decided on what pairings (if any) I'm going to do. I'm more into reading romance than writing it, but I might give it a shot. Don't worry, no slash. If I ever get up the courage to write slash, I'll post a clear warning in the summary.
Review By [(Recent Donor)Deamondeathstone] • Date [9 Jul 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Never Say the "W" Word" from arkeus
Review:
nice so far :-)

I do hope a plot is coming though :D
Comments from author:
Thanks!

There will be a plot...sort of. I have it somewhat planned out, but when I write, things just sort of fall into place as I'm writing.
Review By [arkeus] • Date [9 Jul 08] • Not Rated
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