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Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from Bobboky
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [25 Sep 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from fanofkali
Great story.

Very well developed OC.
Review By [fanofkali] • Date [25 Sep 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from spk
Very intriguing story. I too was hoping it was a "Buffy's real family" story but decided to give a chance anyway because I love SG-1 so much. I'm really enjoying this and can't wait to see how you approach the coming revelation. :)
Review By [spk] • Date [24 Sep 08] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from Shezzi
This is brilliant. And yes, AllanPitt has almost precog like abilities when it comes to plot, and, watch out for these, a cage of the evilest evil plot bunnies EVER. He likes to sic'em on people when they're stuck...and then if they don't give you ideas for the story you're stuck on, you get ideas for others...but he's brilliant. And this is fantastic, loved it, excellent grammar, nice characterisation, good use of the SGC assumptive personalities. Thanks for sharing! love xx Shezzi
Comments from author:
I think you just made my day. Good Grammar? Really? **preens**

Me and Grammar have been archenemies since Kindergarten. Knowing that other people think that I'm making headway in this almost fifteen year long battle makes me happy. Really, really, really, really, happy. ; ) (Now it is time to launch an attack on the archenemy: SPELLING. Mwuahhahahahahaha!)
Review By [Shezzi] • Date [24 Sep 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from Greywizard
Okay, you've shown us what's been happening from the SG-1 point of view, so I'm guessing that the next chapter shows us how Xander has gone on the warpath (possibly quite literally!) to find what's happened to Zabby and where she might be now.

First thing I see him doing is calling Willow and/or her coven to use a location spell to find Zabby and then, after seeing where she is, calling as many influential people as they can to get her released, since Slayers/Council business and the military are definitely non-mixy things, as Buffy has said in the past.

I'm also eagerly looking forward to seeing the upcoming confrontation between Xander and Jack over Zabby since it's going to be along the lines of the irresistible force coming up against the immovable object. ;-)

Also, I'm wondering if/how they're going to be able to restore Zabby's Slayerness, since it would appear that it was separated from her when she was beamed aboard Thor's ship.

Anyway, a great story, and I'm looking forward to seeing more soon.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review, but I won't comment on the predictions too much, because that would give to much away. Instead I'll just try and get another chapter up faster. ; )

As for the confrontation, well that's really why I started writing this story in the first place. Just imagine the explosion that happens when two people as alike as Xander and Jack crash. (Evil giggling. Lots of evil giggling.)

And just to clear it up, being a Slayer is not the same thing as being possessed, so Thor's doohickeys didn't really remove the Slayer. But they did cause a whole lot of damage trying. So now Zabby is pretty weak, though her hearing and metabolism are still better than the average Joe's (or should that be Jane's?).
Review By [Greywizard] • Date [24 Sep 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from userid
Ok why am i getting the feeling that xander will be sneaking into the base soon if he isnt already working his way in? If he dose get in will he then be able to sneak her out before the know hes on base?
Comments from author:
Oh, I don't know about the sneaking. I was kind of thinking more along the lines of him walking into the Front Door, guns blazing. (***drifts off, imagining destruction***)
Review By [userid] • Date [24 Sep 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from arkeus
Nice :-)

Very well done, though i am hoping it will move on :D
Comments from author:
It should pick up the pace in the Next chapter. Though I haven't actually written it yet, so it might go in a completely different direction from what I'm currently planning. I just never know ; )
Review By [arkeus] • Date [24 Sep 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from inarae
VERY interesting! I like the way you've set it up, and I'm eager to read more. Thanks for sharing.
Comments from author:
Thanks for reviewing. I'm glad you liked it.
Review By [inarae] • Date [18 Sep 08] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from Cristina
I have just one question...Is Zabby still a Slayer?
I kinda had an impression that being a Slayer was not exactly a possession...
And I loved your engle about 'True Slayer' bit there shuld be at least one in evry continent.
Comments from author:
The fact that being a slayer isn't really a possession is the reason why extraction went so horribly wrong. She is still the Slayer, but the healing took a lot out of her, so she you won't see her in any big fights for the next couple of chapters.

And I'm really glad that you liked the True Slayer Idea, and I really was thinking about having a Slayer for each cont intent, but then I figured that Antarctica didn't really need a Penguin Slayer, and the Aussies are a tough lot: they can take care of themselves. jk :D
Review By [Cristina] • Date [24 Aug 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from KarlStahl
Great story. I think your Zabby is a great and likable original character.

The upcoming confrontation between Jack and Xander over 'their' girl should be fun to read; especially after the research results Daniel has come up with. Those are a great and very funny idea, even though the resulting attitude of SG 1 towards the Council will be anything but funny. After their experience with the Initiative the New Council will be wary of another secret military installation - even more room for further misunderstandings.

Or maybe there will be no confrontation? While Jack has access to Asgard beaming technology, Xander knows at least one powerful witch with access to location- and teleport-spells.

I really enjoyed reading the first three chapters of your story.
Comments from author:
Thank you.
As for the confrontation... well can you really see this ending peacefully? ; )
Review By [KarlStahl] • Date [7 Aug 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from Satori
Not so much pre-cog as the fact that it's been done before in several other fanfics, methinks.

Excellent work so far. Please continue.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the Review.
I will try to get the next chapter up sometime this week.
Review By [Satori] • Date [1 Aug 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from ColonelPeroxide
Brilliant! Very original idea with the Real Slayers. Can't wait to read more.

One thing I'd like to find out at some point is "what fate Kennedy" (sorry, had to do that bad pun). I know the focus of the story is elsewhere, but if Willow is involved in any bigger capacity, that is probably going to matter.
Comments from author:
I just always felt that if the balance really was so important than having so many Slayers was a recipe for disaster.
I haven't really considered Kennedy before, but I will try to write her in eventually. Or at least something about her.
Review By [ColonelPeroxide] • Date [1 Aug 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from Thedruid
A nice tense set-up for a meeting between SGC and the post-season 7 BTVS. And your not doing it by the tradational tie-ins. Looking forward to more!
Comments from author:
I'm happy that you like the tenseness, because there is a lot more coming. I feel almost evil.
Review By [Thedruid] • Date [30 Jul 08] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from (Past Donor)morgyair
Missed Zabby and can't wait for her next appearance...not to mention Xanders appearance
Comments from author:
Zabby really will be in the next chapter, but I'm afraid youre going to have to wait for Xander. (I have to give him enough time to build up all of that fear and worry after all.)
Review By [(Past Donor)morgyair] • Date [30 Jul 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from MountainWilliam
Just getting better and better!

What a nice way to recover from a really tense day at work with a new chapter of your wonderful story.

(I have lots of these tense days - hint, hint.)

Comments from author:
Hint recieved.
I will do my very best.
Review By [MountainWilliam] • Date [30 Jul 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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