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Review of chapter "Around the Bend" from SamDragon
Review:
"I like blondes"Thats good.Love it.
This is much better than having her end up with Ron.I never liked them as a couple.Idiot guy and brilliant girl just a recipe for trouble down the road.
Comments from author:
Yeah. That was why I wanted to start a Hermione/someone story and after reading a few brilliant Hr/Lu stories, I had to.
Review By [SamDragon] • Date [16 Oct 08] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Around the Bend" from TheatricalBarrister
Review:
I would have thought that magically applied lipstick wouldn't have come off like that, but it does make for an amusing situation. (Or did I misinterpret Hermione's use of magic while doing her makeup and getting ready?)

Anyway, great chapter. Looking forward to more.

BTW, "a quick wit and a quicker mind" has the ring of a quotation to me, and I was astounded that Google only returned two pages when I searched for it with quotes. (Although, I assume in a day or two, this page will show up, as well :-))
Comments from author:
My mind works in mysterious ways. A few of the things I've said are quotable quotes, I've been told. :)
Review By [TheatricalBarrister] • Date [16 Oct 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Around the Bend" from laoshi
Review:
Sorry about the Pushing/Punishing thing from the last chapter. That's down to my inability to read my own writing. I'm glad you came through on your promise to address the age issue and that the relationship will develop naturally. Loved the nargle infested mistletoe line. Watching other people reactions is a large part of the appeal of Luna's craziness and it was nice to see the shoe on the other foot when Hermione wrong footed Luna over the goodnight kiss. Hermione doesn't seem to be as solicitous of Luna's feelings as Luna's of hers. Luna's refusal to initiate the kiss is clearly a sign that Hermione has made her much more unsure of herself. I like the phrase a quick wit and a quicker mind but I'm not sure you're using it correctly. Wit can mean both brain-smarts and being intelligently funny. But as far as I know when you say a quick wit you mean intelligence and not humour. I've heard of a ready wit being used in a humourous context but never quick. Hermione messing with Parvati and Lavender was a great note to end the chapter on. Oh, and ashamed as I am to admit it, I've never been to Scotland. Do they have crickets there?
Comments from author:
With Hermione and Luna... I was rereading some Wikia articles to firm up details here and reading the page for "Hermione Jean Weasley (née Granger)" just makes me shudder. I realized that I'd pushed Hermione back into a submissive position that didn't fit the confident, assertive young witch we saw in books 1-5 and so I wanted her to push back a bit against Luna. Equality, as Hermione states in the chapter.

And at least around here, wit is almost entirely restricted to humor. Quick wit being someone who is ready with a joke or a snappy comeback at a moment's notice, like the Weasley twins. So what I meant to imply was that Hermione was drawn to both Luna's sense of humor and her mental abilities as a whole. I can't see her being with someone who's not her equal mentally, which makes Hermione/Ron all the more baffling.

As for the insects, I'm pretty sure crickets are everywhere...
Review By [laoshi] • Date [16 Oct 08] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Around the Bend" from feekh
Review:
Hermione's last comment? Simply classic.
I do so enjoy everything you write. Completely wicked.
Comments from author:
RUN LAVENDER RUN!
Review By [feekh] • Date [16 Oct 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chemicals React" from (Recent Donor)mpop
Review:
Nice story.
The Hermione part is very good.
Comments from author:
Thankses. ^_^
Review By [(Recent Donor)mpop] • Date [15 Oct 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chemicals React" from (Past Donor)sopchoppy
Review:
Very nice, very well done Hermione characterization - the discussion at the table, and having to do an experiment. Hope to read more soon.
Comments from author:
It's at the beta.
Review By [(Past Donor)sopchoppy] • Date [15 Oct 08] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chemicals React" from laoshi
Review:
There's a mistake in the first paragraph it should be and that punishing not at that punishing. It does make you wonder why was Hermione put in Gryffindor? Yes she has proved time and again that she's a brave person, but surely her thirst for intellectual excellence was her defining characteristic as a first year. How old is everybody? Hermione's fourth year which makes her 15 and Luna's third year which makes her fourteen. I ask because the Ravenclaws seem unusually insightful for 15 year olds. And before anyone says it insight and intelligence don't necessarily go together, anyone can be a bit dense about something as Hermione demonstrates in this chapter. Her ignorance of that oh so delightful idiom is great comic moment as is Luna shoving the chicken in her mouth in the first place. Using science as a justification for kissing Luna fits in well with Hermione's character. i was surprised at first that Hermione was the one to initiate the kiss, but upon further reflection Luna has been to careful with Hermione so far to push her into anything like that.
Comments from author:
Pushing, not punishing. Took me a minute to find it because of that. Fixed though.

Hermione here is 15, the majority of fourth years are 14 with a few like Hermione at 15, and Luna is 13. That'll be remarked upon next chapter. Hermione has been established as having a birthday in early September, so while Harry turns 11 in the July before first year, 12 before second, etc., Hermione turned 11 too late to attend in the year before Harry's, so she was 11 for only a few days in first year before turning 12.

The Ravenclaws are really bright because contrary to JKR's opinion of women, I see them as more than brood mares. Especially the Ravenclaws, who would logically fall into Hermione's camp and be concerned with their own scholastic achievement and future job placement as opposed to who they're dating. But I would think that they'd also be a house that has Slytherin tendencies, because most jobs involve outshining other people. They'd be excellent observers and judges of character, which is how Morag and Su can cut through Ron's bullshit so easily.
Review By [laoshi] • Date [15 Oct 08] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chemicals React" from Idmonscat
Review:
Glad your continuing his as there seems to be a lack of good HP femslash, and your take on the characters is very cute with just a seasoning of naughty.
Comments from author:
Best way to do it. :)
Review By [Idmonscat] • Date [15 Oct 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Mirror" from prehensileclaw
Review:
This is fun and cute... I want to see more. Maybe a little Ron-bashing wouldn't go amiss.
Comments from author:
Trust me, Ron gets bashed.
Review By [prehensileclaw] • Date [14 Oct 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Mirror" from laoshi
Review:
I'd give you the 8 just for the Luna pic. I'm in complete agreement with Hermione Luna's outfit is just adorable. It looks like is inspired by the horse and hound set or a Tipping the Velvet interpretation of something Dickensian. Is Sleekazy your invention or something from the background material? I read in your comments to another review that your Luna's madness reminiscent of Hamlet. Radish corsages and upside down Quibblers certainly mane for great is she messing with us moments. Highlight of chaps got to be Luna continuing to act the part of the gentleman by defending Hermione's honour. It wasn't the worlds greatest putdown but it was definitely high middle and it got the job done.
Comments from author:
The potion is canon, but there's no details about it so I just sorta winged it. Figured it'd probably be the consistency of conditioner to work into hair properly, rather than a real liquid. And it's true. Purebloods probably are siblings.
Review By [laoshi] • Date [14 Oct 08] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Mirror" from fanofkali
Review:
Luna is one of my favorite characters.

The way you write her is so good. Bringing forward her "think very different" attitude and off-cuff remarks make this story very enjoyable to read.

Looking forward to more.
Comments from author:
Probably tomorrow or so.
Review By [fanofkali] • Date [14 Oct 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Girls Just Want to Have Lunch" from laoshi
Review:
My musical horizons continue to expand. The thing about Ron is that he hardly every surprises you. He reacts exactly as expected to finding out Hermione is going with Luna. It's still fun to watch though. Is the blibbering humdinger line lifted from the book? Luna's complete insouciance is almost as good as her acting completely of the Wall. But Luna being Loony would undermine the tentative sense of empathy Hermione feels for a brilliant lonely girl. i like the comparison you draw between Luna and Hermione in the first year. Turning Luna's tie Gryffindor Red was a nice touch. I almost wish the first Harry and Ron knew about Luna is when she turns up on Hermione's arm. But i guess realistic that couldn't happen and it would have deprived us of the nice little seen that rounds off the chapter. She's Loony indeed. It's almost my favourite word for crazy but you just can't beat doolally.
Comments from author:
I'm surprised more people haven't seen the parallels between Luna and Hermione, honestly. They're flip sides of the same coin as far as friends and such go.
Review By [laoshi] • Date [14 Oct 08] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Ruin Me" from laoshi
Review:
I've never heard of 'Ruin Me' before, I hope your going for lighthearted and not a doomed Romance. I've said it before, well mostly in my head, but i love the way you write Luna. My favourite is Illyria-Luna, but she has the right mix of insanity and insight to be an interesting character in her own right. The most disconcerting thing about crazy people is when they start to make sense, it was fun to watch Hermione try to cope then be thrown by Luna's comment about their dresses matching. When your writing Luna do you just assume she's had the conversation in her head already and sort of forgets Hermione hasn't? Luna saying she'll be a perfect gentleman tickled my funny bone and calling her my Hermione is just sweet.
Comments from author:
If you have DirecTV, you get roughly 25 XM radio channels in the 800+ channel range. One of them is a Christian station, which is where I found Ruin Me. Then I got it off iTunes. Technically it's more of a "I belong to you, God" song but the lyrics worked here. A lot of Christian songs are like that.

And it'll be not quite light-hearted, but not doomed romance.
Review By [laoshi] • Date [14 Oct 08] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Mirror" from TheatricalBarrister
Review:
Luna's response to Malfoy was totally awesome! Also, I support her in her effort to achieve her goal.
Comments from author:
Go Luna go!
Review By [TheatricalBarrister] • Date [14 Oct 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Mirror" from (Past Donor)sopchoppy
Review:
Good Chapter, I hope to read more soon.
Comments from author:
Have another one at the beta already.
Review By [(Past Donor)sopchoppy] • Date [14 Oct 08] • Rating [9 out of 10]
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