I really do adore your characterizations, and am enjoying the telling of your tale.

I'm enjoying the fic. I like your characterizations and your writing style. And I was pleasantly surprised that, at least for the most part, I really bought in to Willow's reasoning. I get a little touchy when there is talk about Xander being the token human, but... I think you did a good job with a hard task.

I really loved Dru in this. I greatly look forward to more.

Looks like a good start to an excellent story... Off to read more

I like,I like! An incredible Willow story and now the Xander is coming. Right? The Characters
have all been wound up like nothing I've read in a while and the resolution for them is....?
there is hint that Willow is going to be mistrusted for years. I think a mental institution
couldn't relieve her self horror. This story is due a resolution much less a continuation.
Thanks for some excellent reading.

This was a great story and I look forward to seeing what happens next. I can't believe that Oz is a vegatable.


Thanks
Calia

Heh. People were asking why she was acting like Season 6 Willow and you found a good reason to justify it.

Poor Oz.

The gremlins/New Moon build-up from minor ongoing commentary to OH-NO moment was very nicely done :)

I noticed that with Joyce you switched between 1st, 2nd, and 3rd person for private thoughts. People generally use italics or punctuation marks to set personal, direct thoughts of the 1st/2nd person-type off from the rest of the third person narration, because that slight bit of separation alerts the brain to a possible oncoming change, making the text easier to read.

I never thought the possibility that Willow is under a spell. That's really surprising. At first I was very angry at her and now it turn to pity. It's a good thing that Buffy thought about that. Now, I'm off to read the next fic in this series.

I was about to hunt you down and force you to write more until I saw that you're making a sequel.

ok, that gets weird....maybe he's an Ancient who fled the wraith or something? Have to admit, I thought he'd turn out to be Charlie.... (Jack's son)
Huh. so the mayor did the reckless thing to Willow instead of having Faith shoot Angel with the poisoned arrow, in effect. Big mistake, Willow & Buffy are really angry now...
And even under a reckless spell, Buffy will probably hold it against Willow for years...
Maybe they'll find him someday, using Dawn? (years later)...

Very Good! Willow is in a real bad place right now. At least Buffy will cut her a little slack since she was the victim of a spell. Ethan, on the other hand, had better have a good place to hide. I'm guessing that Xander is Charlie. Jack should seriously freak. I have to admit, even though it is likely to be several chapters into the future, it will be interesting to see how Xander holds up againt Teal'c in a sparing match.

Poor Willow, and please don't say Xander is dead, I don't like dead Xander...

Update you and I will worship you forever.

Hey! Try this on for size. It's one of my additions to

http://www.tthfanfic.org/Story-11757-241/Methos+Tales+from+the+Barman.htm

specifically:

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"We lost our Xander ...No trail of him leaving the multiverse, nothing! We're trying everything we can think of, but..." her voice trailed off, her eyes moist. "It's like he simply ceased to exist."

"Have you searched his room - or his hairbrush - for stray hairs, DNA, anything like that?"

"You think a ritual link would-"

"No, I'm just thinking about a family called Foster and the conservation of energy... Your Xander might have been an imaginary friend empowered by something, a dream-made-real... Your memories and photographs would be valid, because he would have been physically there, but any stray hairs - or bloodstains - would be artifacts sustained by the spell. If that's the case, they've been unraveled along with the rest of his body."

"Gotcha. You sound like you've put some thought into it before," the floating head said, then promptly vanished, back to whichever reality it came from.

"Weirdly enough we, I, had this conversation with my version of Willow," Xander said, then paused, noticing the absence. He finished aloud anyway. "When we were thinking about what might have happened if Dawn had jumped instead of Buffy..."

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Yeah, in your case you're having Willow do it, but the side effects might line up the same :D

Good luck :)

Well, so far Xander isn't superXan. That's good. Also, I like the interaction between the Scoobies. It's very season 3, for the most part. THe only characterization thing I'm not so sure about is Willow. She's definitely got the potential for being this Willow--the problem I've got is that it seems a bit premature; is there a reason she's progressed this quickly to the later-season Willow? One that will come up later?

WOW!
I like where is story is going. Dru was a nice touch with the necklace. You also did an excellent job of keeping us guessing on if Xander is real or not.
Anyway, thank you for letting us read your work and I can't wait to read more.

Signed

John