this has been great fun already, the combinations of legends of all kinds...mixing the Gate with Cordelia is just grand because her and Teal'c, just perfect and as I really like Illyria(and hope to see her again), I like that Cindy is her daughter and mother of the Slayers. kick ass
please continue this very fresh story!!!!!
Phyllis
Review By [phyllismski] • Date [15 Aug 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Good premise. But how can a ghost and a magical amulet work in the non-magic area?
Comments from author:
I'm glad you asked. The ghost thing will be explained in chapter 3 and whenever the magical amulet appears I'll explain it then. But I do know why they work.
Review By [MatthewC] • Date [15 Aug 08] • Rating [7 out of 10]
I like how you're tying in bits and snippets of so many other fandoms. Do you plan on expanding any of them?
Aside from that, this is a very interesting premise and I look forward to seeing where you take it. Thanks!
Comments from author:
I'm only really planning to mention several other fandoms, I'm not planning to make this a multiple crossings fic. ^-^ I hope you enjoy where I'm taking it.
Review By [kcl] • Date [14 Aug 08] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Illyria sounds better and a God King having a daughter? Wild! Thanks. Since Cindy took over a body am I to understand the body would be human and the green blood the transplanted demon soul changing the body?
Comments from author:
Sorry about that, fixed the name ^-^ Why couldn't Illyria be a mother? ^-^ I meant to explain the blood comment in the chapter but somehow missed it, I'll try to work it into chapter 3.
Review By [PATM] • Date [14 Aug 08] • Rating [7 out of 10]
I'm just picturing Illyria trying to force all of the slayers to call her Grandma. The Vampire Demon and the Slayer Demon being related that makes sense though. They both inhabit human bodies just one inhabits dead bodies and one inhabits living bodies.
Review By [enderverse] • Date [14 Aug 08] • Not Rated
I think you've misnamed Cindy. You should have called her after her two grandmothers: Mary and Sue.
Comments from author:
Hehe. Yeah I suppose she is like a Mary Sue character. I needed someone to tell Cordelia to move to Colorado Springs and it suited my story to have her know everything, I just needed to give her a reason why she knows everything. Though I think she got a lot of background so she could just be an original character. Her name, by the way, came from Sinny (what I was planning to call her originally) which in turn came from Sineya, the first slayer.
omg thanks for picking my challenge cant wait to read more
Comments from author:
YAY! I hope you like it. I was looking through a ton of challenges and saving the ones I thought I might be able to write and then I was going to randomly select one and attempt to write it. As soon as I saw yours I got the idea in my head with Cordelia going to Colorado Springs so I went with it. I've got my ideas for the next couple of chapters of how they meet and become friends, but I'm still not sure of the overall plot.
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