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Review of chapter "Plans, Guns, And Eyes" from Kumoatsu
Review:
Wow this is good, please update!
Comments from author:
I will when I can.
Review By [Kumoatsu] • Date [31 Jul 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Plans, Guns, And Eyes" from rfresa
Review:
Very interesting story, though I feel like some of Xander's essential characteristics are missing, and I didn't really follow the part where you kind of skim over the in-between episodes. Maybe it's just been too long since I watched them. Why did Oz have to die? Will this make Willow turn evil sooner?
Comments from author:
Can't answer all of that, it would spoil it. Somebody had to die and Oz wasn't essential. I like Oz, but, well, you get it.
Review By [rfresa] • Date [12 Jul 09] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Plans, Guns, And Eyes" from XanderHalcyon
Review:
I really hope you continue this soon.
Comments from author:
I will when I get the chance.
Review By [XanderHalcyon] • Date [13 Mar 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Plans, Guns, And Eyes" from CrystalBlaze
Review:
Very interesting! The Powers are so controlling as they've LOST everything else, you say. That indicates they really need to rethink their strategy. (As opposed to moaning about mortals dying on them--hello? They are MORTAL.)
Comments from author:
Exactly. they don't understand mortals because they're not mortals.
Review By [CrystalBlaze] • Date [7 Feb 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Plans, Guns, And Eyes" from hollywoude
Review:
I just found this story and I love it! I really hope you plan to continue it. Great job so far. I love where your going with the story. Keep up the good work.
Comments from author:
Thank you. I will continue it after Christmas along with my other stories.
Review By [hollywoude] • Date [13 Dec 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Plans, Guns, And Eyes" from LFW
Review:
Excellent YAHF
Mixing John and Xander to deal with the Vamps is a great read
Looking forward to more
Comments from author:
Thanks, more will be on the way.
Review By [LFW] • Date [6 Oct 08] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Plans, Guns, And Eyes" from Ame
Review:
Okay that was interesting. I do hope to see more of this soon.
And I must say, I was surprised and enjoyed your PtB sub-plot going on.
I think this is the first I've seen them as portrayed with thier backs to the wall.
Seeking not balance but survival..
Comments from author:
I figure they had to be desperate to have Angel and Buffy as champions.*shrugs*
Review By [Ame] • Date [30 Sep 08] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Plans, Guns, And Eyes" from Robby
Review:
Great job! Hope you update soon!
Comments from author:
Me too.
Review By [Robby] • Date [25 Sep 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Plans, Guns, And Eyes" from Bobboky
Review:
awesome
Comments from author:
Thanks.
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [25 Sep 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Plans, Guns, And Eyes" from JediKnight
Review:
Love Xander's last quote and how the news about Xander's costume was broken to the group. Please do your best to add more soon.
When will you bring in the "Stargate: SG-1" crossover?
Comments from author:
Not sure, after Pylea definitely.
Review By [JediKnight] • Date [2 Sep 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Plans, Guns, And Eyes" from ReflectionsOfReality
Review:
You need him gone and gone soon. With Angelus free and Oz dead the next viable event would be the events in "Bewitched, Bothered and Bewildered" now there would be no Valentine love spells but Xander probably would still catch Amy's little magic trick (hypnotizing the teacher to avoid punishment for not doing homework) now the first modification that the PTB might just happen to leave a spell book with certain transportation spells somewhere for Amy Madison to find and study (or even just a page in one of her mum's books that she just happened to be reading the night before) now a sterner, colder, way scarier Xander Harris pulls Amy aside and tells her that he needs to talk to her later after school might cause the witch to slightly panic but Xander heads to class and Amy pulls out the spell and manages to have the components. When Xander pulls her aside at the end of the day she blows some dust in his face lights some herbs and says a short Latin phrase causing a portal to open up and swallow him whole.

Walla! Though you might want to compound it by having Whistler remove the evidence by removing Amy's memory of casting the spell and the page/book vanishing back into thin air.

I don't really see Xander liberating Pylea taking that long so you should either have the time there be slower so that a few weeks could be some months on earth or you grant Xander a disability like amnesia or a broken leg and have Fred find him and help him out.

Or after you can use any of the previous ideas to complement these.

So does this one fit your needs?
~Reflections
Comments from author:
No need for the leg to happen. You see the people in Pylea are beaten and broken, it will take a while to gain an army large enough to not only overthrow one city but the whole land. That would years on horse back. Thanks for the Amy idea, my friend. I'll probably update Sarafan Brotherhood next, check that out and tell me if you have any ideas about that. I would love to hear them.
Review By [ReflectionsOfReality] • Date [1 Sep 08] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Plans, Guns, And Eyes" from ReflectionsOfReality
Review:
Obviously the best time for Xander's departure would be at the end of the season with Acathla. Normally I dislike escalation of enemy action from cannon but with Xander and his T series Angelus probably would use a vampire's expedience switch and produce even greater numbers of minions even by going farther afield to gain a surplus. Escalation for its sake alone pisses me off as if the enemy were capable of greater actions or weaponry they would have considered it in cannon. But if instead of 20 minions Angelus has a hundred then Xander would be kept busy fighting while Buffy tries to stop Angelus.

First Part in place.

Second part the Powers That Be decide that they will kill two birds with one stone and alter the printout of the spell in such a way as to make the soul permanent while upping the asking price of the curse (as I strongly believe that the stronger magic is the greater its cost whether it is immediately apparent or only becomes apparent in hind sight) and instead of where Willow faltered before she seemed to be possessed she continues on for a slight bit longer.

~Old stuff~
Willow: Gods, bind him. Cast his heart from the... evil... realm.
Willow: Return. (pants) I call on... (pants)~NEW~ my warriors sacrifice...(Gasp)to grant my desire~ END NEW~
Without warning Willow's head snaps back and she looks up with her eyes
wide open. Her head snaps back down and her eyes stare into the Orb. She
begins to chant steadily in Rumanian as though possessed.
Willow: Te implor, Doamne, nu ignora aceasta rugaminte.
Translation: I implore you, Lord, do not ignore this request.
~End Old~

And then instead of just a swirling vortex from cannon Acathla the vortex starts shooting out lightening bolts(similar to the Glory portal) add a bit of flair they barely miss everyone though large chunks of the floor goes missing where they strike. Xander in a power armor is going close combat as some minion had knocked his plasma riffle out of his hand (maybe lightning struck it and it vanished as well as one of his Terminators if you want them there in Pylea)

~Cut back to willow~
Willow: Nici mort, nici al fiintei...
Translation: Neither dead, nor of the living...
Cordelia: (freaked out) Hey, speak English!
Willow: Lasa orbita sa fie vasul care-i va transporta, sufletul la el.
Translation: Let this Orb be the vessel that will carry his soul to
him.
The table lurches hard. The camera pans around
Willow and closes in on her face.
Willow: Asa sa fie! Asa sa fie! Acum!
Translation: So it shall be! So it shall be! Now!
Willow: Acum!
Translation: Now!
The Orb glows brightly for a brief moment and goes dark. Willow suddenly
relaxes, and looks around blankly.
~End Willow side~

Cut to the mansion. Buffy raises her sword to dispatch Angelus, but
stays herself when he suddenly gasps loudly and groans in pain. She sees
his eyes glow bright red for an instant and go back dark.
~New~
As Angel's eyes glow no one sees a lightening bolt strike out and hit Xander causing him to vanish into then air.

They don't realise he is missing until way later when they notice Buffy is also missing. Maybe one of the T units recorded his vanishing so that the Scoobies know that he did not run away.

You could rewrite the spell scene for Miss Calender but I think she firmly believed that she was not strong enough to cast it so it may have been Willow any way even if the teacher lived.

If you want Xander back for Graduation then I really would think that when the Sisterhood of Jhe opens the Hellmouth to have Xander crawl out of the ground would be really brilliant. Simply have him of escaped Pylea the wrong way and remember that while some Hell dimensions might have time running really fast others could flow at normal time or even be slower than Earth's (heck I bet there are even dimensions whose time runs backwards if you wanted to hunt them down or even that jump around time maybe have Xander be one of the ones responsible for one of the Egyptian uprisings against the Goa'uld or one of the founders of the Watchers Council whose message was lost to antiquity) if Fred was with him she would not be able to keep her shy persona from cannon but probably end up as an odd blend with Sarah Conner.

Work with me if there is something that feels wrong with these scenes. While Jhe would only be 9 months it would still let him be able to help plan things and if you work it out you could even have Xander go under cover working for the mayor by having him claim to have kill the Deputy Mayor before Faith can try to spin her lies only to have him have a talk with Faith about collateral damage and Buffy for throwing innocent bystanders at a fighter during a combat situation (if you want to try to handle that challenge point),

Hope you can use this,
~Reflections
Comments from author:
First, Xander would have killed Angelus by then. I need him gone before he kills Angel that means within days of the events of last chapter.
Review By [ReflectionsOfReality] • Date [1 Sep 08] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Plans, Guns, And Eyes" from angelus
Review:
liking this story poor Oz though :(
Comments from author:
Sorry he had to go.
Review By [angelus] • Date [1 Sep 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Plans, Guns, And Eyes" from Bill
Review:
Very well done!
Comments from author:
Thanks Bill.
Review By [Bill] • Date [31 Aug 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Plans, Guns, And Eyes" from Soulreavers
Review:
Wow i found this tonight great 3 chapter cant wait to see more.

The only one thing i think you should add into the story is that Xander starts to learn a bit of magic or he starts to collect or make a database of magic and demonic books or information. Because all large scale wars are won by information plus conner paranoia would probably make him do it.

I also love the fact that Xander might be starting a multi reality war on darkness. it would be very cool if you sent him to some well known worlds besides Stargate. you could maybe make is so that he recreates the time machine and adds some magic to it so he able to go to other dimensions. He could send the terminator army to the wheel of time world because the bore that freed the dark one sounds suspiciously like a hellmouth. or perhaps the world of Azeroth he could probably learn allot of combat magic from them and he could probably get some good ideas on how to make a inter dimensional ship by studying the Exodar.

Anyway i hope you update soon your doing a great job of it.

Soulreaver
Comments from author:
Very interesting ideas...tell me more.
Review By [Soulreavers] • Date [31 Aug 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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