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Review of chapter "The End Of The Beginning" from brokenmimir
I love this one. Such a brilliantly off the wall take on Buffy. I wish you would continue the sequel -- this is one the best fics on the site, and I would love to see more in this AU. Great work.
Review By [brokenmimir] • Date [12 Sep 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The End Of The Beginning" from Mackon
Brilliant and fun universe you have built here, love the way the scoobies and changing and growing into the new roles. Hope you take it back up one day I'd love to read their further adventures.
Review By [Mackon] • Date [21 Jan 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Reactions, Adjustments and Preparations" from Harry
Sounds like Red is going to have to find a new teacher. And I do NOT care for Sammy Z! He makes his slayer into a creature who only does what he tells her to do. That is NOT the way to do a Slayer! Teach her, but give her some flexiblity to do things. Forget Kendra and Sammy z. BRING IN Faith!
Review By [Harry] • Date [8 Sep 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Necessary Exposition" from Harry
I think that Willow may have found herself a Mystical teacher in Joyce! And now that Buffy has found the way to stay human, she can live like a normal person as long as the Vamps hold off attacking. And I still can't wait to see how well Sam Zabbuto and Kendra do in Sunnydale.
Review By [Harry] • Date [8 Sep 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "New Girl!" from Harry
So, Buffy is a mixture of Dragon and Human, eh? Sounds interesting. Now, lets get rid of Kendra and BRING IN FAITH!
Review By [Harry] • Date [8 Sep 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The End Of The Beginning" from (Past Donor)deitarionSSokolow
Excellent job. Both on Buffy and the events surrounding her and on Willow's new status. The end felt a bit abrupt, which makes me suspect that what I sensed to be the driving conflict wasn't the one you'd intended, but aside from that, a solid 4.5 out of 5.
Review By [(Past Donor)deitarionSSokolow] • Date [10 Jul 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The End Of The Beginning" from Prometeus
I disagree with your depiction of Willow's tragic flaw for two reasons. First of all, for highly technical reasons which I won't get into, it's necessary to be intellectually superior in order to count as a moral being. Secondly, Willow simply doesn't have any morality. Her ethics are pretty weak (ethics is long-term self-interest) but her morality (the belief that the group matters intrinsically) is completely non-existent.

Willow doesn't think other humans matter in any way shape or form (not what they think, not what happens to them, nor even whether they live or die) except as it relates to her. If Willow were a moral person, she would never ever have been capable of raping Tara, whether mentally or sexually. And she certainly would never have been capable of destroying all of humanity.

It occurs to me that you probably aren't using 'morality' in the highly specific and technical sense I am. Nonetheless it is the correct sense and compatible with everyday usage which contrary to philosphers' pretentions *does* distinguish between ethics and morality. Notice personal ethics (to others), professional ethics (to patients) vs tribal (internal) morality, religious (internal) morality and universal human rights.

In fact, there are ought statements (what a person wants-to-want) that have nothing to do with justice (eg, I ought not to overeat). And justice itself is made up of far more than just morality + ethics, since it also subsumes necessity and convention.

And Willow only learned *ethics* in canon. She never learned about morality because morality is about consequences to *others*, not about consequences to oneself. So what you're describing happened to Willow has nothing to do with morality. The fact that Willow never suddenly decided that she had to cure cancer because she had great power ... proves again that the intrinsic value she attaches to human beings for being human beings is precisely ... zero.

You're right though that her intellectual superiority is linked to her amorality. It has produced a complex of Exceptionalism to the extreme that she believes she's simply not a human being. Her magical superiority has only made this worse.
Comments from author:
Okay...we're moving beyond the story here and into matters that are more appropriate for a forum thread. Clearly your interpretation is different from mine; anything more than that is not really appropriate for a story review.

Thanks for your rating; you apparently enjoyed what you read and I'm glad. I'm in a difficult time in my life right now, but I'm trying to get the next chapter of The Claws That Catch written; I hope you like it as much (what there is of it so far).
Review By [Prometeus] • Date [26 Oct 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The End Of The Beginning" from Prometeus
What you did with Cordelia and Willow is awesome.

By the way, Joyce's fuel efficient car idea? Well, a Boeing 747 burns about $80,000 worth of fuel on a 10 hour flight. There have been 1400 747s built. If each enchantment took an hour, she could take care of about 3000 aircraft in a year.

That one spell is worth in the tens of billions of dollars *per year* for the US economy alone. Just in aviation fuel.

If Joyce demanded a billion dollars, they would hand over the check without blinking. As well as declare her a national treasure and assign her a team of bodyguards to protect her life and well-being no matter what.
Comments from author:
Alas, that would attract a lot of attention to her...and to Buffy. And now that she knows that there may be all kinds of supernatural menaces in the world, any one of which might have all kinds of uses for harvested dragon-girl organs, I think she'll be loathe to pursue such an idea no matter how much they'd be willing to pay her.
Review By [Prometeus] • Date [26 Oct 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Consequences" from Prometeus
Already everyone can see Willow's addiction and lust for power. Not only that but we see that Willow decided that Xander was someone she had to treat like any other hostile power.

And she gets away with it scot-free with no consequences. She threw away her best friend and proved she's too dangerous to allow to live but a few tears and she skips away with everything honkey-dory. Niiiiice.

The best part is how stupid BTVS fans (and Xanders) are about Willow. Refusing to accept that her character was written as a power addict from the very first episode, someone who did illegal things for the fun power trip. That her darkness and evil is an intrinsic part of her personality and have nothing to do with any magic.
Comments from author:
I wouldn't say no consequences. She's been through pain that would break most people, and most of that can be traced back to her own actions. I wouldn't call that skipping away. That pattern only stopped when she finally acknowledged the moral responsibility that having that much power imposed.

That said...Willow definitely has flaws and issues, going back to episode one. Her Tragic Flaw (in the classical Greek dramatic sense) was always her inability to distinguish between intellectual superiority (which she has in spades) and moral superiority (which she most emphatically does not). Those issues would have colored her life whether she learned magic or not. Her hacking habit, as useful as it may have been to the Scoobies, was at best morally questionable, for instance.

In this crossover AU, I've given her a mentor who sees this flaw very clearly, and will be trying to guide her into seeing it herself. As with all such flaws, however, that will not be easy.
Review By [Prometeus] • Date [25 Oct 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The End Of The Beginning" from Gideon
Great story! You managed to use the cannon characters in a new way but still have them be recognisable. Everyone except for Angel is having more fun (and its not a good idea for him to have much fun), or and Cordy is dead, even if she is loving it. This is just what a crossover should be, injecting a unique factor into a well loved story and making it better. I can't wait to read the sequel :)
Review By [Gideon] • Date [14 Sep 10] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The End Of The Beginning" from LetsRandom
I enjoyed the stories and certain lines made me laugh out loud. I'm moving on to the sequel now, update that thing!
Review By [LetsRandom] • Date [18 Aug 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The End Of The Beginning" from DavidFraser
What an unusual and imaginative take on a story possibility...

Well, I just loved to read this.

Well done !
Review By [DavidFraser] • Date [30 Jun 10] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The End Of The Beginning" from GoldenRat
Awesome fic. One very unique small change makes for a very different story.
Review By [GoldenRat] • Date [24 Feb 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The End Of The Beginning" from Chikageko
Well hell, This certianly was and enjoyable three episodes... Cool thing saving Jessie; It happens fairly often but I've yet to see a story that kept the character around as more then an occasional mention. You did a good job of him.

I read the basis behind the challenge so I know asking for Xander to find a power of his own is useless and Probably quite to late at this point but seeing him as a useless charactor who's only really there for willows emotional support and plot butt-monkie is... Irksome in even the lightest sence of the word; probably why so many people are hyped on the Xander gets a cool power theme.
Point is, If it's not already to late in your story, could you give Xander and Jessie At least some useful skill to make them if not badass at least more than an after thought or hostage in battle situations? I don't know, teach Jessie Swords and Xander durty fighting or somthing. Make one of them Willows MagisGirl side kick with a small skewed portion of her powers like in negima (shudder) and the other a Gun, stake and imagination. It's really all up to you if your sequel hasn't done so already.

Anyways thanks for listening, It was a Cool story, especially where you gave Joyce both powers and a developed and active personality.

Fun with Kendra... ]:-} She was always sort of a flat charactor in all other stories I've read, thanks for giving her a little life. If you're open to suggestions there I'd give her somthing a little more modern for weapons, Iron-age at least. Most people argue stakes, crosses and holy water over weapons because they think you can't easily conceal them but I know from experiance a good leather jacket can hide a pair of shortswords crossed up the back quite easily and a trench coat can hide just about anything you could want to give her. You've written her training with swords and axes of varying descriptions and she's the slayer besides so use should only be a thing of writing it.
Review By [Chikageko] • Date [25 Nov 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The End Of The Beginning" from Mackon
Just read this again, great story. Loved how you built everything and had the scoobies grow.

Can not wait for their next adventure.

Thanks for sharing.
Comments from author:
I appreciate it. Been a bit distracted by unemployment for the ghod, eleven months now...but I'm still struggling with it.
Review By [Mackon] • Date [20 Aug 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
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