You say, in this chapter: "Xander rolled his eyes." That's not possible. He only has one eye - and that has been remarked on earlier in this story, so it's not an AU where he didn't get the other eye gouged out. You should say "Xander rolled his eye."

The only criticism I have is that you need for someone to review your stories before you post them ... lots of errors.

I see you have won an award for the characterizing Buffy, but the way you did Dawn as a four year old was totally magnificent. Reminded me of my own daughter when she was that age and brought back memories I had long forgotten. If you decide to write again ... a sequel to this story would be absolutely fantastic.

Thank You for sharing this fine story.

Think I better get some sleep now since I've been up since 11PM last night reading this story. It was so great I just couldn't stop reading it.

I loved this fic

Interesting job, really.

It might be kind of hard to see Buffy having a one-night stand during her summer in Los Angeles- after the way things fell apart when she had sex with Angel, I can’t see her as being exactly willing to have another such encounter so shortly after she had to KILL the first man she ever really loved-, but with the Monks involved things are more likely, and things still progress in an interesting manner from then on.

The moment when Buffy got a chance to prove herself ‘under fire’ was certainly a dramatic way to prove what she’s capable of despite any apparent misapprehensions about her capabilities, and the subsequent bond between her and Janet was an interesting touch all around.

Of course, the twist with an ‘alliance’ between the Monks of Dagon and Loki regarding Dawn’s creation in this timeline was DEFINITELY a nice touch; neat way to bring them together on a permanent basis without creating the ‘need’ for an actual RELATIONSHIP.

I just found your stories, and indulged while parked in a motel room.

Story quality: Very good! Your muses get a cookie ( chocolate with chips, one each). Pacing was good, and your blending of characters was well done.

Technical items: I deliberately left my editor/grammar-fiend hat off. Overall you did well. There were some typos, word glitches, misplaced commas, and the like, but nothing to really break my story focus. Your execution was above average.

Again, good story! Thanks for sharing your talent.

When I saw your, well, stating that this fic won a bunch of awards, I naturally was reminded of it, and then I decided that I just HAD to reread this. Still a dang good fic, and probably worth all those awards as well. Well, thanks for writing this, and congrats on the awards, bye for now.

awesome story!

Great story. Totally enjoyed it. Would love to see more, even maybe a story about Dawn later. Having her go to the Academy would be awesome.

Interesting story. There were some bits I had problems reading, but context got that sorted pretty easily. Thanks for sharing this!

I loved this story. I'm not always a big fan of Buffy but I liked your characterization of her and SG1 in this story. Dawnie was absolutely adorable. Thanks for writing and finishing this story.

Well I started reading this because it was in the best crossover with Stargate. I can see why. A damn well written story. And until I finish the others it has my vote for sure. Hope you decide to continue the story some day. Would make a great series.

Thanks! It's always great to hear someone liked my stories.

I still have plans to write a sequel, but I've got one story running, another one about to start and I can only manage 2 at a time... but I'd definitely love to return to this story too!

Great fic! I loved it :) and I hope that you will write more !!

Jack didn't bother with his glass but took a long swig of whisky right from the bottle. "Ben? Did you kill him?"

Buffy shook her head. "It wasn't his fault. I ... I couldn't do it. And he promised to stay away from us."

Jack whirled around and looked at her as if she'd gone crazy. "Are you mad? What about Glory? You beat her, great, but give her time and
she'll be back. The bad guys always are!" Jack started pacing in front of Buffy. A few seconds later he stopped again and grabbed Buffy by
her shoulders, forcing her to look up at him. "Where is he now? How do I find him?"

It didn't need a genius to read his thoughts. "He's dead," she said quietly. "Giles did what I couldn't do that day."

Jack nodded stiffly. "Good."


How could Buffy kill Ben if she was dead at that time? I'm referring here to "I ... I couldn't do it.". If I remember correctly the fact that Ben was Glory shell was known only after Buffy was dead...

She didn't. Giles did, hence the "Giles did what i couldn't do that day."

Darn, Dawn is Jack's daughter? That's booooring. I'd hoped you'd made Buffy Jack's daughter.

"I guess deep down I've still blamed you for it. My eye, you know."

Enjoyed the Xander-Buffy interaction.

Buffy narrowed her eyes at him. With his smile growing even more, he bent down and picked up Dawnie. It never hurt to have a Dawnie-shaped shield when faced with a not-so-happy Buffy.

Ooohhhh Xander smarter...