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Review of chapter "Chapter One" from EvenMoreCookies
Review:
So...why didn't they just kill Ben as in canon?
Comments from author:
Cos in cannon he was evil,and here he isn't - he helped her escape instead of turning her over to Glory.
Review By [EvenMoreCookies] • Date [4 Sep 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from norgco
Review:
Good work.

Looking forward to how you handle the Initiative issue. I've always had the feeling that Special Operations Command or similar would be anxiously keeping track of the Scoobs for situations like this and a chance to build a positive relationship with people with a proven success record.

Or maybe that's just me not liking Whedon's cardboard cut-out moustache twirling villain view of the military and science.

Anyway enjoyed the part and hope for more soon!
Review By [norgco] • Date [4 Sep 08] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from AllenPitt
Review:
Dawn I think is 14 or 15 at most at this point. Though she's quite tall, so it's hard to tell I guess. I assume the place that hired her paid in cash and didn't ask for a social security # etc? (Just curious, I can see somebody desperate for help taking her on for the day, "paperwork to follow" )
* Yes I've always thought it'd be funny in a crossover to do that: someone sees a staking, and the natural conclusion is "wow, they have the power to turn people into dust!"
I was going to say that kidnapping her off the street like that is kind of 'out there', but they think it's a potential "Foothold" situation, so it makes sense. If they think to run her prints, she might come up as a missing runaway? Potential witness to multiple murders ?. Meanwhile: can't you just picture Glory pounding away at that huge metal door at the entrance? Heh---
Medical exam will show her as human; wrist scars; no belly scar, neat... hm, Sam doing checks might show up that she's emitting energy (key/ball of energy) ?
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [4 Sep 08] • Not Rated
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