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Review of chapter "Chapter One" from cwolf
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saw it in an X-man short story collection in books-a-million retail store many years ago. Magneto could control the metal in the blood streams.
Comments from author:
I have a comic book where Magneto controls a group of soldiers through the natural metals we have in our bodies, but I the idea actually came from the Eragon magic and the Force Unleashed.
Review By [cwolf] • Date [20 Sep 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from DTHunter
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Lifting an X-Wing requires brute force. Dealing with blood vessels requires finesse. I would think that the Jedi Order would drill students in both. Besides, what's the point of being a force for good without using all available options. Looking at only one side of an equation would tend to get you blind-sided by the other. For an order that has been around for millennia, they seemed, to me at least, to be extremely...blind.

Excellent work, by the way. And plausible, in a way that some stories are not.
Comments from author:
Thank you. The whole finesse vs strength point was the one I was trying to go for. I was playing the Force Unleashed game and it was showing me just how much a damage a single force user could do, but all of it was just brute force damage. It took forever to pull the Star Destroyer down when I just kept thinking it would have been easier to yank a few wires or detonate a proton torpedo in tube.
Review By [DTHunter] • Date [20 Sep 08] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from misterq
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Yep, knowledge of anatomy - and in the Star Wars universe, knowledge of xenobiology, would be hella-useful for any medical jedi to have. Heck, block the blood being pumped into the brain, and you can knock someone out from a distance - without marks or anything. The only thing is - since there's so many kinds of aliens, that the droid schematics issue would be extended to non-humans. Still, a few books of Little Gray Men Anatomy, and you'd know exactly where the weak internal spot of someone is.

The other school of thought is that Yoda knew all about Palpatine and his plans. He also knew that if the galaxy would remain at peace, the Yuzan Vong (sp?) would burn everything to the ground in 50 years or so. Thus, Yoda only pulled force-sensitive children from unhappy families to train in the academy and left a massive amount of potential jedi alone to not get slaughtered by Anakin. Yoda also knew that if Palpatine thought there were trained jedi helping with the rebellion, he would have been all over them rather than dismissing them as a tiny band of rabble. I mean, what could they do, right?
Comments from author:
Yeah I didn't really consider the whole many alien types thing all that much beyond the fact that humans seem to be the dominate species just considering the amount of numbers shown in the movies and the fact that all the clones were human, so I thought the Jedi would prepare by studying human anatomy. I guess if you really wanted an idea why biologicals are easier to kill then I guess you can apply the whole "they have midochlorians" to help the jedi sense how they work where driods dont.

As for Yodas plan or whatever, well I ignore just about everything after the sixth movie. I hated the fact that the Vong could conquer the entire galaxy just about so I never really read the books and don't know much about them. Personally I think the Empire, with its millitary might, constantly improving technology, and shear unitedness should have kicked both the Rebels and the Vongs butts. If Yoda really had a plan I didn't really see it. I just thought they would be rather catious with an army appearing out of no where and the darkside clouding the force.
Review By [misterq] • Date [20 Sep 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from enderverse
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Ive always thought if they were able to lift five rocks at the same time that they should be able to crush 5 hearts at the same time.
Comments from author:
That was the basic idea here. I kinda got it from Eragon and that idea of magic. I just thought they had to be respected for something besides their lightsabers since any trained swordsperson would be able to use them or a weapon just as good, like force pikes or vibroblades.
Review By [enderverse] • Date [20 Sep 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Orion
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I like this. Good work.
Comments from author:
Thanks. It was just a short one shot I did in about an hour.
Review By [Orion] • Date [20 Sep 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from WolfWriter
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Scary.

Scarier than Palpatine.

And just what would the Jedi do to Padme and her children?

Arrange an 'accident' for her, and steal her twins?
Comments from author:
Your welcome to write that if you wish.
The whole idea of the story was just basically made up on the spot to give me an excuse to use the blowing blood vessel idea.
I didn't really want to portray the Jedi as evil, but I just thought they had to be better then the movies showed if they really did exist for thousands of years. After all a single temple is easily bombed and you can't block a turbo laser bolt the size of your body with a lightsaber. And everyone knows that politicians are corrupt, I figure they had to turn on the Jedi at least once in that length of time. After all the Jedi weren't directly under the Senate's control so the Senate had a reason to fear them. And I think Padme's children would merely be trained as Jedi, just like all force sensative children fould below a certain age. Padme would probably willingly allow them trained after she saw what happened to a force sensative child that wasn't trained until later.
Review By [WolfWriter] • Date [20 Sep 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from eriktheviking
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A very well written alternative.

Thank you.
Comments from author:
Just kinda came up with it spur of the moment.
Thanks
Review By [eriktheviking] • Date [20 Sep 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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