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Review of chapter "Chuck Versus the Ghost" from eriktheviking
A great story, thanks.
Comments from author:
Thanks for reading!
Review By [eriktheviking] • Date [9 Nov 08] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chuck Versus the Lawyer and the Pirate" from anpu
Excellent story. Best written rendition of Kennedy I've ever read and even better than Joss' writing.
P.S:I totally agree with you about the canon version of Kennedy.
Comments from author:
*blink* I'm not sure I can accept that last part. I'm awed and humbled by the comparison, however. Thank you.

As for Kennedy, as I mentioned in my author's notes, I really didn't like the character in BtVS. Not only did I feel like she was a slap in the face of the Willow/Tara relationship, which while lovely, I still think happened too fast, but the character wasn't very likable. I never really saw what Willow might see in her in the first place.

But, after Sunnydale and the Hellmouth, and fighting for five years beyond that, anyone would mature. It just wouldn't do for her to still be an annoying brat. Nope, I reserve that role for Dawn! ;)
Review By [anpu] • Date [8 Nov 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chuck Versus the Ghost" from CPTSkip
I'm happy. I quite liked this chapter. And all the others up until now. You do such a good job with the characterizations, I can easily 'hear' the characters' voices in my head. And, no, it is not my schizophrenia talking. Well, now my paranoia has activated so I will sign off. But now I want you to go write more, I am enjoying this story a lot.
Comments from author:
It's quite possible that me not being happy with it is simply that I tend to be a perfectionist. Which means it's really irritating when something feels 'off' and I can't figure out why (and fix it).

I've considered if maybe it was because this chapter was almost all talk, and not much in the way of action. Maybe I should write a side-story and get that part of it out of the way.

As for hearing voices, if it's your schizophrenia talking, then it must have company. 'cause when I write these 'fics (both of them), that's part of what I'm doing too. I try to 'hear' the characters saying what I have them saying. More often than not, it comes out well. As a result, there are few times when, during my reread, I go 'what the heck was I thinking here' - it's usually more a matter of me shifting clumsy-sounding phrases around so they don't sound quite so clumsy.
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [8 Nov 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chuck Versus the Ghost" from Dragonhulk
Very cool, can't wait until Xander and Co find out about the mess in the Supernatural world.
Comments from author:
Heh. I can already see Xander's response - it's Situation Normal: All Frakked Up.

Though, the whole revelation about angels? Real ones? I think that one might cause a real furor. I can see two possible response, and both are of the good for story reasons: it can give some people hope. Or it can make them curse things all the more (because how can there be so much evil in the world if there are angels of G-d on the scene)?
Review By [Dragonhulk] • Date [8 Nov 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chuck Versus the Ghost" from Caliadragon
I loved this chapter and it was cool to see how Xander survived and I look forward to seeing Xander and the others meet Dean and Sam.

Comments from author:
It may be a while. I'm not sure it came out real well, but the Council is pretty much clueless when it comes to this. Noone spotted the mark on the Witnesses in order to be able to look it up. And Dean, well, he's definitely not the type to share information.
Review By [Caliadragon] • Date [8 Nov 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chuck Versus the Ghost" from VillageOrchid
Nicely done exposition. Thanks for sharing.
Comments from author:
Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it!
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [7 Nov 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chuck Versus the Gossip" from danielhimura
Will they find the truth soon? (the council i mean)
Hope they do, i would like to see Casey get a kick in the pants;
Comments from author:
I can honestly tell you that I don't really know. There are a lot of potential truths out there for them to learn, for one thing.

I am curious, though: why so interested in Casey getting a kick in the pants?
Review By [danielhimura] • Date [6 Nov 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chuck Versus the Gossip" from Dragonhulk
Sweet story. Not a big Chuck fan, but I'm enjoying this.
Comments from author:
Glad to hear it! I'm having a good time writing it too, and getting more of a real feel for the differences between different *kinds* of chapters. For example, this one is mostly 'fluff' compared to others which are mostly 'plot'. You learn through doing, I guess.
Review By [Dragonhulk] • Date [6 Nov 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chuck Versus the Gossip" from Caliadragon
Coolness! You brought Jono into the situation. I love the way that this story is going and I am so glad that you didn't stick with the easy and make Kennedy the bad guy in everything.

Comments from author:
With Kennedy, like I mentioned, I never much cared for the character during the series. But everyone's gotta grow up sometime, even if you're a self-proclaimed 'brat.'

And yeah. I like Jono too, hence his presence. I never thought he really got a fair shake. He will probably show up a bit more than he does in canon in my other (newer) fic as well.
Review By [Caliadragon] • Date [6 Nov 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chuck Versus the Gossip" from VillageOrchid
Cool chapter!
Comments from author:
Thanks! Glad to see you're still reading with us!
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [6 Nov 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chuck Versus the Gossip" from kaleecat
I've gotten out of the habit of watching 'chuck' but I definitely feel the Buy More vibe with this story. I really like that its Wesley & Xander there. The ghostly Jonathan is a clever idea, and appreciated for I always liked his character. I also love the way you're writing Xander; can't wait to see him take on Casey. Casey won't know what hit him.
Comments from author:
I'm glad that I'm putting forth the Buy More 'vibe' for you. To tell the truth, that's one of my biggest concerns. I mean, I've had a lot longer to get used to Buffy characters, after all, so it's easier to write for them. Xander is my favorite Buffy character, so it's probably easiest of all to write for him.

I'm not sure how Xander and Casey will interact. I suspect it will be like either a fight or a shark attack, with the two fighters/sharks circling each other until one smells blood.

Jonathan was always my second-favorite 'normal guy.' I identified with him a lot; I was even quite a lot like him in high school. But, like Buffy said in Earshot, we all suffer during high school
Review By [kaleecat] • Date [6 Nov 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chuck Versus the Gossip" from (Current Donor)dogbertcarroll

I love the way they are worrying about actually having to work.
Comments from author:
Yes, little do they know that Xander is probably as big a goof-off as they are!
Review By [(Current Donor)dogbertcarroll] • Date [6 Nov 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chuck Versus the Lesbian" from vandevere
Looks like Casey's gonna folks who have...more than the usual kinds of resources...

I wonder what sorts of oddities they'll uncover?

And...what's this about Morgan? Zonking him out like that..? :O

Comments from author:
Well, yes and no. Xander might be good at identifying people with military experience, but the Intersect and its handlers (Sarah and John) are, like, Triple-X Top Secret. Especially seeing as they have Chuck available to regular civilian access.

So they'll probably have a hard time discovering anything, at least through the military side.

Zonking Morgan out was really just a matter of politeness. They wanted to talk to Jonathan, and it was better not to panic the guy for no obvious reason. I'm still thinking about whether Jonathan might want his cousin (Morgan) to be let into the 'know' or not. I can see him wanting to share (since Jonathan's been sharing Morgan's body for at least four years), but I can also see him wanting to keep this to himself.

I guess it'll just happen as it happens. Some parts of this story just write themselves without any input from me, if you catch my drift.
Review By [vandevere] • Date [5 Nov 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chuck Versus the Lesbian" from Kensington
I'm enjoying this story quite a bit. Chuck is a truly entertaining show and its menagerie of characters easily gel into that of the Buffyverse. I also definitely like the chapter titles.

I am a little curious as to how Jonathon justifies so many resources being deployed near Buy Hard. Hopefully you'll explain that to a satisfactory degree in upcoming chapters.

Keep up the great work.
Comments from author:
Thanks! The chapter titles are sometimes the hardest part for me, especially in those chapters that don't actually include Chuck himself. But yeah, I think that that's part of it too: Chuck has a good character set, much like Buffy did/does, so it's easy to write for.

As for all the resources being allocated to Jonathan (and not all of them have been revealed yet), the truth is that it isn't all that much. It's only been mentioned obliquely so far, but Xander is doing a lot more than just working on this issue with Jonathan. They guessed that it was Jonathan there at that time (but weren't absolutely sure) and it dove-tailed nicely into the situation that they've started to notice, so they incorporated it at the same time. The appearance of Kennedy and her team are more a function of Xander being there (and intending to be there for a while) than anything to do with Jonathan. And they won't be there long; it's more a matter of making an initial sweep to hit the supernatural nightlife hard and make the area (at least temporarily) safer.

I don't want to discuss too much about what I have planned, partially because that spoils it somewhat, but also partially because I may decide to change it and don't want to be locked down too tightly.
Review By [Kensington] • Date [5 Nov 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chuck Versus the Lesbian" from Kenshin
looking forward to read more
Comments from author:
Thanks! It's good to know people like the story!
Review By [Kenshin] • Date [5 Nov 08] • Rating [9 out of 10]
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