Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty" from RioM
Please continue this story, it's fantastic. You've done a great job writing the characters and the storyline is compelling, fascinating and a great read. Thanks for writing it and I'm looking forward to more.
Review By [RioM
] • Date [25 Jan 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty" from kanikan
Wonderful story, you have built up a AU that is highly addictive, well thought out and written. I love the way Xander's character has grown yet managed to maintain his humanity and like-ability, that he hasn't fallen to despair (which I think is in character based on his character portrayal in Buffy). I hope you continue this story, it's been two years now and I don't know if you're still around and writing, though I'm keeping my fingers crossed and optimistic that you're just taking a hiatus and will finish this (it would be a shame if you left it there).
Review By [kanikan
] • Date [8 Oct 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty" from junnights
Review By [junnights
] • Date [28 Sep 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Kalliza
I know it's been two years since this was updated, but I'd just like to put forth my request that it be picked back up. You've built up a fascinating set of personalities and character interactions here, and I want to see where they go.
I really like how you've built this multi-layered personality for Xander. I really want to see him go into his fugue state at least in front of Rodney, if not the rest of Shepperd's team and/or Lorne's team. There are all of these facets that I think it would be good (and fantastically dramatic) for Rodney to see. Especially if Xander entering that fugue state is a result of him trying to protect Rodney from something.
It occurs to me that in the last chapter, no one thought of the idea that Rodney's mind control could be as much an assassination attempt against Xander (after all, the nish'ta didn't work on Xander, and that's dangerous), as it could be an attempted assassination of Rodney himself. Xander is an ex-Keeper. He killed for survival. A *lot*. I think it's perfectly logical to assume Rodney couldn't successfully assassinate Xander, but that Xander would kill him for trying. And if Rodney managed to kill Xander, bonus.
I also want to see how you decide to reveal the strength of Xander's ATA gene (if, indeed, it is stronger than others'). The bit with the door is a good start, but how will Atlantas respond if Xander sends it a command, maybe while *in* his fugue state? A command that's imbued with all the power of his anger and determination? Also, that Ancient repository: does he know tricks around Atlantis's computers that even Rodney doesn't know? He just doesn't know he knows it, or assumes he's wrong, or something?
I also absolutely love the idea of Rodney confessing his crush in typical Rodney-style verbal diarrhea. He just gets too stressed and flustered and the secret comes out ... right to Xander's face, and Xander's forced to consider the idea and decide what he wants to do about it. Particularly since given cannon timeline, he's gotta be only barely 20, if that.
Lastly, I really want to know how Xander's status as an American comes out. There have been a few fics where the Scoobies end up going to Atlantis for some reason or another. I think it'd be fantastic if either the Initiative soldiers get sent to Atlantis instead of demon hunting around the world, and Riley recognizes Xander from pictures of Buffy's, or if one of the Scoobies his/herself comes to Atlantis for some reason and recognizes. The latter could be more dramatic, but the former could be an interesting way of revealing his history.
Overall, I REALLY want to see where you were planning on going with this, and very much hope you decide to continue writing.
Review By [Kalliza
] • Date [22 Sep 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty" from Chaoskitten
Please, please tell me that you are still writing this fic. I really want to know how it ends.
Review By [Chaoskitten
] • Date [6 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty" from Kakariki
This story is beyond brilliant!
I love the characters and the premise, the plot is so captivating and the writing is great.
It's so unique and inspired and I was counting down the chapters I had left hoping that the later ones were ten times as big so that I'd have more to read.
I really hope that you are going to update this story. It would seriously make my week!
Thank you so much for sharing this :)
Review By [Kakariki
] • Date [30 May 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty" from ora
I know its been forever but any plans for an update?
Review By [ora
] • Date [11 Jan 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty" from Vickzie
Absolutely brilliant series!! Please, please update some more soon
Review By [Vickzie
] • Date [19 Oct 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty" from jgoodman
Love this story and can't wait to read more, please update
Review By [jgoodman
] • Date [21 Aug 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty" from chajalive
I really hope you decide to continue this story, since I have really really enjoyed reading it. Xander and Rodney are super-well written and their courtship is hilarious.
Review By [chajalive
] • Date [20 Jul 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty" from jeanniewood
Very much enjoying the story still, and happily waiting for more. Realized I've never written a review to you, so I thought I would get some in now that I've reread the story from the beginning. (( Because yes, you are that awesome, and I will probably read it again before the next update if you don't update quickly. ))
I am so looking forward to the actual, 'omg, were in a relationship' bit between Rodney and Xander, but also looking forward to the, 'omg, were on earth' part too. (( As Xander will eventually have to get back to Earth; Drusilla did say she would see our lovely hero again some day )). Can't wait to see the Scooby crews reaction to the new and improved ( does it count as improved when your fucked up for life? idk... ) alien-Xander.
Quick question, in one of the previous chapters you mentioned ( while Xander was hovering over sleeping!Xander ), that Xander looked to be twenty some. Is Rodney ever going to notice that he's actually lusting over a person who, at most, would be 19? (( Oz was most heavily in season 2, where Xander would have been 17. Give at least 1 year and a bit for the wandering after his escape to the keep, and maybe 6 months in the keep, 19 is actually the far end of the spectrum for age. )). I just find it funny because Rodney is in his late 30's, going for a teen. ^_^ Cradle snatcher much?
I don't think the characterization on Sheppard is quite on, though your Rodney (Ronon and Teyla also, I think) is perfect.
Grammar wise, I'm probably not the person to judge, but I think you have some awesome skills there. :)
Thank you again for continuing your story- please remember always that there are fans reading, and awaiting, your next installments. Next time you're sitting, bored, think of your fans.
Review By [jeanniewood
] • Date [15 May 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty" from NattG
Oh, god, please add more. This is absurdly, ridiculously brilliant, and we'd all be absolutely blessed if there was more of it.
Review By [NattG
] • Date [21 Apr 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty" from ClumsyElf
You know I've been waiting since the first story for the slash to actually show up. I mean ok so there is little hints like with Lorne/Parrish and Rodney's admitted crush on Zander. But I mean.... when's the smooties coming?
Great story!!!! Hope to see more real soon!!
Review By [ClumsyElf
] • Date [6 Apr 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty" from Duskie
I love this story. I'm quite heart broken that you seem to have vanished. I come back every few months to check if you have updated and I just haven’t got the notification.
I just reread most of it from the point Xander arrived on Atlantis, which is of coarse the point you had us all hanging in suspense for for around a million years. Which was very worth the wait.
So was them finding out he was a keeper, buy someone who understood the significance
I really hope you are going to continue. I've been waiting with the same anticipation for lots of things you have built up for, so well - Rodney and Xander happening(obviously), them getting to the planet, actual action again, Xander going with a team through the Stargate, Alvarez being discovered, I'm not actually anticipating them finding out he's from earth I hope they don't for a long while cause it sounds hard to read.
When you continue I hope you develop further on Xander and Ronon's friendship.
I really like the way you have developed Xander's character. He is vastly different from the Xander in the later seasons of Buffy but with obvious reason, he has logicically developed differently from the extreme differences in their lifestyles.
I really enjoy how he is powerfully strong with no sense of self importance. There have been quite a few points in which I've felt quite moved.
I really hope you continue as this is a brilliant story. Right up there in my absolute faves of all time.
If you have just changed were you are posting could you direct me towards the right place please :)
I wish you luck in your writing and fertility in your plot bunnies.
Review By [Duskie
] • Date [3 Apr 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty" from spacey
I just reread this entire trillogy and found a chapter at the end that I hadn't read! I was gonna review to talk about serendipity and thank you for updating but at the very end saw that the update is from a year ago!
So I'm gonna do what I've done only once or twice before (ever) and ask you to please post or write any additional chapters you may have in honor of my birthday (6 april). Think of it as a thanks for reviewing if you want, and for rereading your fics, and I'll of course review again if you actually do update. If not...well, I really like the xander in the later two fics of this trillogy! Thanks for writing
Review By [spacey
] • Date [24 Mar 11] • Not Rated