hey im still reli likin this i like the bill/buffy interaction! please update soon

Thanks :D

hey this seems good im liking it so far. will you be bringing the scoobies into it? please continue soon

The scoobies will appear in the second story of the series.
Thanks for reviewing.

I really like this story, I read it on another site but I'm glad you've added it here now. Can't wait to see more of it.

probably at http://paradsuslost.proboards42.com since that's the only place where I posted it. chapters 1 and 2 are posted there too. chapters 3 and 4 are at my beta's and I'm working on chapter 5.
Thanks for reviewing :D

I like it! A new take on things, very interesting! Good work!

Thank you :D

Okay, you made me cry a little with this chapter. I don't think I can imagine being Buffy's age in this and having my whole world collapse around me. Great work, and I hope to see more soon!

I'll post chapter 1 next week. If you don't want to wait you can check it and chapter 2 out at http://paradsuslost.proboards42.com chapter 3 and 4 are at my beta and working on chapter 5 now.

Thanks for your review :D

This is interesting and well paced. I like that John and Dean saved her, but they aren't the ones to raise her or bring her to Ellen. My only quibble is that Buffy's reactions seemed a bit mature for a ten year old and that the paramedics treated more like an adult then a child alone with her mother's body. Aside from those minor details I'm intrigued to see where you go with this.

The maturity thing was hard for me to write, since I'm used to writing a teenage Buffy and never been an 10year old girl, since I'm a guy. Anyways, my beta notes and suggestions on how to make Buffy more childlike were used and because of her help it improved a lot. Couldn't have done it without her. in chapter 5, whihc I'm writing now, Buffy's fourteen and that's more easy to write for me.
The paramedics bit I just adjusted from Buffy S5 The Body to fit with the story. Since I don't live in the US, I have no exprerience as to how it goes in reality there. I just figured it was among those lines. My beta made a note about it too, and I adjusted it a little. I like that you can pick up the points I need to work on improving. Thanks for reviewing :D

interesting! ... I like it. (and just imagine Dawn getting retroactively inserted into all this. Probably 'adopted out while B. went to her aunt' or something like that, then showing up in SunnyD in S5.....
Based on the synopsis, B. is not going to like watchers much....but at least she'll be better trained... of course watcher 'training' seems to be mostly "do exactly what I tell you"; but the book training would come in handy. Hey. She might get a copy of the slayer instruction manual!

Oh she'll definitely will have a rocky relationship with the Watchers, you can read the start of it on paradiselost, the link is http://paradsuslost.proboards42.com I've posted chapter 1 and two there. Both long ones. Beta is still working on chapters 3 and 4. I won't post chapter 1 until next week, maybe.