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The beginning of Elizabeth Tali

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Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Past Donor)MyTia
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I didn't really like Ari's father before - but this story tells how playing with people's lives will destroy not only them but is kind of contagious and continues to the people around them.

Great idea, well written and captivating!
Review By [(Past Donor)MyTia] • Date [8 Jan 09] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from stephaniebhall
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Extremely interested to see where you are going to take this, great start!
Review By [stephaniebhall] • Date [8 Jan 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Clandestine
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Awesome!
Review By [Clandestine] • Date [8 Jan 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from WriteTheGoodWrite
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Great story - I loved it in fact - but you might really wanna change the rating.

Hope the main story comes out soon!!!
Review By [WriteTheGoodWrite] • Date [8 Jan 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from CadenceCascade
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oh my god. That was ... I'm seriously having trouble coming up with something that effectively communicates how that made me feel. Like a jaw dropping punchNhug, from the same person.

A grown up dawn. A serious and angsty lil thing. OMG I completely love this!

I mean, it's complete. There's room for more, definitly (and please), but it is in and of it's self, whole.
Review By [CadenceCascade] • Date [8 Jan 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from cflat
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Really interesting. Can't wait to read the main story!
Review By [cflat] • Date [8 Jan 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from missbucklebury
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Wow, that's quite a start. Really really intriguing, I can't wait to see where this goes next and how Dawn meets up with the NCIS team (especially Ziva)!
Review By [missbucklebury] • Date [8 Jan 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from moonstarsfu
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Wow, this is so awesome. I love NCIS and I can't wait to read the story that goes with this.
Review By [moonstarsfu] • Date [8 Jan 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from ariannasanders
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All I can say is that, like everything else you write, this was oh my God amazing and I'm almost willing to say that I think I want more of this more than I want more of The Key, The Dark Hunter, And The Link, which I love quite greatly. I always did have a love/hate thing with Ari. I love this little snapshot and cannot wait for a longer series if at all possible.
Review By [ariannasanders] • Date [8 Jan 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from lizard
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Wow! You managed to do something NCIS never did, make me not hate Ari totally. I'm glad to see you writing, I'll read anything you write. I hope you haven't given up on some of your other stories (House's Key, The Key, the Dark-hunter and the Link and The Flipped Side...My Daughter the what)
Review By [lizard] • Date [8 Jan 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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