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Review of chapter "Surprise" from imokit
Review:
wow, good story, undecided about the twist though
Review By [imokit] • Date [2 Mar 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Surprise" from Hermionetobe
Review:
More, More!!!

I love Dawn-centered stories, they make me laugh. And I love the idea of why her and Faith are going to Atlantis. Oh and I'm waiting for more info on this prophecy thingie from the ancient text.

So adding this and looking forward to more.
Comments from author:
there will be more on the prophecy soon :) Just wait until they get to Atlantis, the then the games will begin :)
Review By [Hermionetobe] • Date [2 Mar 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Surprise" from (Past Donor)mpop
Review:
How's that for a twist?
Good chapter, keep them coming.
Review By [(Past Donor)mpop] • Date [2 Mar 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Into Every Generation...." from Tempe
Review:
Nice update. I like the fact that you're acknowledging that although Buffy and Faith can work together they don't really get along. Some writers have the tendency to make everything five-by-five just to fit a story line so it's good to see people in character.
As to my previous review you said that I could give some recommendations for pairings so I'm going to give it a shot.
I'm assuming you already have Dawn's chosen but just in case I'm going to throw in a name I would like NOT to see her with. I'm not a huge fan of Aiden Ford so I'm really REALLY hoping that your not going to go there regardless of their closeness in age compared to the rest of the cast. I've seen a few authors do John or Ronon which I love, but I have to admit that I've never seen, or at least I can't recall having ever seen, a Dawn and Rodney pairing. It could be interesting as he kind of reminds me of Xander who we know Dawn used to have a crush on. It's really up to you though so remember these are just suggestions.
As for Faith she has to be with someone who is not a pushover, but is willing to take a backseat. Maybe John might be best for that as I could see him changing her a bit for the better but still keeping her much the same. Plus, it would really change this up in the series giving you more leeway.
So those are my recommendations but like I said before it doesn't really mater in the long run as I'm planing to continue reading anyway.
One other thing though, I noticed your title says Slayers in Atlantis which would imply there being more then just Faith posted there. Who is the other Slayer going to be?
Please post more soon!
Review By [Tempe] • Date [15 Feb 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Into Every Generation...." from nicjphill
Review:
I am glad that Faith is going with Buffy! Can't wait to see how Daniel and Teal'c react to slayers. Looking forward to the next update!
Review By [nicjphill] • Date [15 Feb 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Into Every Generation...." from Inquisitor
Review:
can't wait for Faith and the other slayer volunteers to wear the Kull armour and a really big sword when they encounter the wraith...wonder if the slayer power also includes being able to fly a wraith dart considering that it is a weapon...
Review By [Inquisitor] • Date [15 Feb 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Into Every Generation...." from Clandestine
Review:
Nice twist with the Scoobies' mind speak! Plus, nice that you've mad Faith and Dawn friends. I've always been partial to stories like those. LOL.

Now my other comment still stand somewhat. Your story would get even better if you tried and develop the events taking place further more, it'd give it more credibility and explain the characters reactions better.

Other than that, all I can say is you did a very good job with this chapter. And it'll be very interesting to see what you come up with next!
Review By [Clandestine] • Date [15 Feb 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Translator Wanted" from octarinefirefly
Review:
You might want to spell check your summary- you'd probably get a lot more hits if you did.
Review By [octarinefirefly] • Date [13 Feb 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Do you believe in aliens?" from nicjphill
Review:
Good start. I like the Faith and Dawn relationship. I wonder if Faith is going to go with Dawn to translate. Looking forward to the next update!
Review By [nicjphill] • Date [13 Feb 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Do you believe in aliens?" from Tempe
Review:
Looks interesting so far although I'm curious about this "other" pairing for Dawn. I don't suppose you'd care to share? Please update again soon!
Comments from author:
he he, not quite ready to tell the pairings yet. Though if you have a request i might be able to fit it in. I live to serve my readers. :)
Review By [Tempe] • Date [13 Feb 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Translator Wanted" from Keshkreature
Review:
Well, it's an interesting start. I suppose what has me the most confused is why this is listed as "finished" when you haven't really revealed anything about the Huntress across the stars. Is this really a one-shot, or did it just get tagged wrong?

The dialog was actually quite good. The catching-you-up paragraph in the middle of scene one seemed a bit forced/rushed. I can see why you did it, keeping you from having to spend a lot of time setting the scene, which a lot of authors do, but it might make the story flow better if you dropped that into the author's notes at he beginning. The best option would be to have most of those things revealed over the course of the story, with maybe a line or two of narration dropped in occasionally as explanation (like you did with Daniel and his inability to go to Atlantis), but it might take a lot more time, and jumping right into the story isn't bad.

Your characters seemed to be very in-character, which is always a good way to start. Although when Daniel called Wes and asked about the Council, if Wes gave him a name, wouldn't he have given him a phone number too?

If you're writing more, I'll be interested to see where it goes from here.
Review By [Keshkreature] • Date [12 Feb 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Translator Wanted" from MegKF
Review:
I really like the story so far. I'm a big fan of Buffy x SG-1. I'm excited to see where you're going to take this story. I wonder if the whole Huntress thing is actually a prophesy instead of a history.
Note: You need to change the story settings so this doesn't read as complete if you're planning to continue it.
Review By [MegKF] • Date [12 Feb 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Translator Wanted" from martelcris
Review:
Good.

I hope that the "Complete" flag on the story details is a mistake, and this is only the first chapter.
Continue please!
I'll be tuned.
Review By [martelcris] • Date [12 Feb 09] • Rating [8 out of 10]
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