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Review of chapter "Halloween And The Aftereffects" from HeatherDee
Review:
The concept is good. As written It feels a bit 'compressed' in places almost like you're pushing through where it should be written out in more detail. The part where she goes out looking for Ethan and finds Spike for instance. As it is it reads like something between a rough draft and a full story.

It is original enough to be a good story. I have seen a couple of Willow/Goa'uld fics but I don't recall any Willow/Tok'ra fics. It just needs some more detail.
Review By [HeatherDee] • Date [18 Feb 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Halloween And The Aftereffects" from mandac
Review:
Lol, famous last words :) This is a very interesting concept with the Tok'ra and the blending idea happening at the Halloween fiasco. Can't wait to see where you take this :D
Review By [mandac] • Date [18 Feb 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Halloween And The Aftereffects" from Inquisitor
Review:
cool story...can't wait for the next update...i'm looking forward to Willow learning both magic and goa'uld advanced tech with mentor who won't let her go postal..also it's interesting that the goa'uld will learn to do an actual magic...imagine turning the systemlords into rats...anyway i hope that the other ppl were wearing a different costume as well...if Xander was a soldier, maybe he wore an authentic replica GI Joe's dog tags of Snake Eyes to go along with his costume...
Review By [Inquisitor] • Date [18 Feb 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Halloween And The Aftereffects" from Vianca
Review:
"What’s the worst that could happen"

Famous last words.


Does Anara know how to create Goa'uld(?) technology?
Could become handy, Willow just needs to get the ownership papers of Calax Research and Development or CRD.
Some Gits (Ghost in the Shell) type hacking is needed to get the needed money for it.

She will have to look at Sci-fi and manga/anime for ideas to hid the tech in plane sight.
Hope she can get the Antartica gate before SGC does.
Can see Joyce Summers living in the end, thought.
Comments from author:
To answer a few questions...
1) Does Anara know how to create Goa'uld technology? Commonly known fact in the Stargate Universe is that symbiotes have a genetic memory meaning that they know everything that their Queen knew provided the Queen chooses to pass it on. So yes Anara will know how to create Goa'uld technology but only to the level known five thousand years ago.

2) Willow aquiring CRD, might happen and I was thinking of having Anara play the stock market gor the money.

3) Antartic gate, since the Goa'uld didn't know about that gate, chances are she won't.

4) Joyce Summers surviving...probably
Review By [Vianca] • Date [18 Feb 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Halloween And The Aftereffects" from blackcanary
Review:
Awesome. I like these type of stories. I can't wait for the next chapter please update soon.
Review By [blackcanary] • Date [18 Feb 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Halloween And The Aftereffects" from (Past Donor)mpop
Review:
"What’s the worst that could happen?" Famous last words.
Good start. We'll see if it continues to be good.
Review By [(Past Donor)mpop] • Date [18 Feb 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Halloween And The Aftereffects" from purrfus
Review:
There are a few bits that could use a deep breath, but over all its an intriguing set up and was fun to read. I look forward to seeing where you take this.
Review By [purrfus] • Date [18 Feb 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Halloween And The Aftereffects" from CPTSkip
Review:
Excellent setup. I really look forward to more of your story. It is nice to read a Helloween story where Willow was the one most effected. I am a bit worried about Cordy. I hope "JoJo the dog faced boy" didn't eat her. And it looks like poor old Oz is going to be looking for another snuggle-bunny. Lol!
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [18 Feb 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Halloween And The Aftereffects" from KzintiKiller
Review:
This could be very interesting. Usually Xander's the one getting empowered at this point, not Willow. I assume that Willow's guest has no way to detect the fact that there's a working Chapa'ai on planet? And that, sooner or later the SGC is going to become aware of her presence.

KK
Review By [KzintiKiller] • Date [18 Feb 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Halloween And The Aftereffects" from AllenPitt
Review:
Very nice idea. Puts them in the Stargate universe, also. Gotta figure sooner or later rumors of Willow with a zat' etc & glowing eyes will get out. Maybe not until s4? But a "foothold situation" alert could go out at some point, making life more interesting for her, especially if it's before the SGC finds out about the Tok'ra....
Willow/Anara would be shocked to know there IS an SGC with a Stargate, in contact with Tok'ra etc. if they see Teal'c they'll assume he's the first prime of Apophis etc.
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [18 Feb 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Halloween And The Aftereffects" from (Past Donor)athenewolfe
Review:
very intriguing beginning - I am enjoying this story immensely!
Review By [(Past Donor)athenewolfe] • Date [18 Feb 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Halloween And The Aftereffects" from dragonsdaughter
Review:
Great story! It will be interesting to see how she meets up with the SGC and the current Tok'ra...I have a feeling Willow won't particularly care for the other Tok'ra like Anise.
Review By [dragonsdaughter] • Date [18 Feb 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Halloween And The Aftereffects" from arkeus
Review:
pretty good so far, though it's the "easy" part.
Review By [arkeus] • Date [18 Feb 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Halloween And The Aftereffects" from SpinelessPunster
Review:
Awesome answer to a challenge, and great first chapter.

I might even be more interested in this one than BtM umyeah!

If that's possible. (and that's an awkward abbreviation. BtM..uy? BtM.Y.? What's the series name, that might work..)

Please continue, or I will get a vamp to turn your plotbunny. Imagine the carnage!
Review By [SpinelessPunster] • Date [18 Feb 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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