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Review of chapter "5 - Scarier by the Lake" from VillageOrchid
Review:
Cool stuff.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [10 Mar 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "5 - Scarier by the Lake" from Martin
Review:
I remember reading this whole story last year. Are you just resubmitting it with a bit of edit?
Comments from author:
Yes, I put it on fanfiction.net last year. This version is mildly edited, incorporating some suggestions I rec'd.
Review By [Martin] • Date [10 Mar 09] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "5 - Scarier by the Lake" from robertlisle
Review:
Enjoying your story, though it seems vaguely familiar. I really enjoyed Early Edition and you make it fit nicely with Buffy and the gang.
Review By [robertlisle] • Date [10 Mar 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "5 - Scarier by the Lake" from (Recent Donor)DonSample
Review:
So, is the creature going to have two heads now?
Comments from author:
I should be annoyed with you for stealing my thunder, but I like a guy who knows his mythology. 8-)
Review By [(Recent Donor)DonSample] • Date [9 Mar 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "4 - Shopping with the Slayer" from VillageOrchid
Review:
Um... they need to sharpen the swords. Vendors at Ren faires don't sell sharpened weapons. You see, I knew they needed Xander!
Comments from author:
Giles will take care of it. He's a detail guy.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [9 Mar 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "3 - Dinner and an Action Show" from VillageOrchid
Review:
Well, also Gary willing gave up most of his life to do what he was asked to do. The fight scene worked fine for me.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [9 Mar 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "2 - Alarums and excursions" from VillageOrchid
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It looked like you had Xander at the airport, comforting Willow? Anyhow, you're in AU territory with Giles taking any Scoobie let alone Willow with friends on a trip to look at colleges. I love it, but I disagree with your note about Xander.
Comments from author:
I was looking at that again, and you're right. The teen is Oz, but I need to throw in some description to make that clear.
As for Xander not being university material, I think he's like people I knew who dropped out of college, but went back later (ofter in their mid to late thirties). Of course, if you're reading the comic book 8th season, you know Xander's life is still chock full o' danger, so I don't know if he'll ever get that chance.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [9 Mar 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "1 - Morning Delivery" from VillageOrchid
Review:
Cool twist, starting in Chicago. Liking your narrative style. Thanks for sharing.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [9 Mar 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "4 - Shopping with the Slayer" from AllenPitt
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hm, more supernatural activity in the city than seen ever before--is someone or something aware the slayer is in town and trying to kill her off? Thinking about it--maybe the mayor of Sunnydale is contracting out hits to the local bads?
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [9 Mar 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "4 - Shopping with the Slayer" from (Current Donor)Shieldage
Review:
Nice.

grappling hooks are cool. So is your having an old job where you sold items of mayhem :D

As Willow reschedules each school, the list of reported dead (and possibly the nature of the reported incidents) should change accordingly. Could you please have Gary read the paper again when she's finished? :D
Review By [(Current Donor)Shieldage] • Date [9 Mar 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "3 - Dinner and an Action Show" from Rhyssia
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Cats are always better PTB than stupid blue people. Unless it's Illyria. In which case you just nod and back away.

Unfortunately, fightscenes are evil.
Review By [Rhyssia] • Date [6 Mar 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "3 - Dinner and an Action Show" from (Recent Donor)DonSample
Review:
I enjoyed that quite a bit.

Now, if you'd set this during season 3, you could have had Movie Buffy meeting TV Show Buffy.

Added comment: Actually, season 3 of Early Edition does correspond with season 3 of Buffy.
Comments from author:
I was thinking of putting in an offhand, "gee, I feel like I should know the bartender" line in, but couldn't think of way that didn't seem forced.

Thanks for the feedback.
Review By [(Recent Donor)DonSample] • Date [6 Mar 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "3 - Dinner and an Action Show" from Abryxis
Review:
Not Bad. I remember an episode that someone had managed to put a GPS tracking bug on Cat. One moment he was one-place and disappeared, a minute later he reappeared some miles away.

In another episode two wannabe witches thought Gary was a warlock with real powers, and Cat was his familiar. Before Gary read the paper and met these ladies, Cat jumped off a dresser into his arms, and in mid flight Cat's orange fur turned black. Marisa recognized Cat by his smell.

If you didn't see either of these episodes maybe these can give you some ideas.

Looking forward for more.
Review By [Abryxis] • Date [6 Mar 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "3 - Dinner and an Action Show" from Marcel
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Unfortunately, besides changing Giles' "Damn" to a "Bollocks", I have no idea what's not exactly "there" with the fighting scene. It's not great, but's ok :)
Review By [Marcel] • Date [6 Mar 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "3 - Dinner and an Action Show" from azulkan
Review:
Really like this story. Always liked Early Edition. Looking forward to the next part.
Review By [azulkan] • Date [5 Mar 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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