Review of chapter "2 - Alarums and excursions" from Shieldage
Hmm, I'm not used to the Cat being that direct. No problems other than that with the first chapter, good incident, great newspaper clipping.
Nice touch having Gary lead the tour bus until he's hoarse. Stuff happens to him a lot and that's a great example :D
I'd have preferred more of a Quantum Butterfly effect rather than the Scoobies saving Gary by reading about his death in the paper, but it falling out of his back pocket during a rescue makes sense.
So, has Gary been slightly oblivious to the nightlife in Chicago, or is the (normally subdued?) Hellmouth 300 miles away in Cleveland attracting more demons than normal? Or something else entirely? :D
Review By [Shieldage
] • Date [5 Mar 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "2 - Alarums and excursions" from Marcel
Well... can't say I ever saw this crossover before :) Great start, a little to abrupt on introducing Gary to the vampire stuff, but works. Looking forward to what comes next.
Review By [Marcel
] • Date [5 Mar 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "2 - Alarums and excursions" from mokahi
Nice beginning. I like the way you introduced Gary to the gang. I'm looking forward to the next installment.
Review By [mokahi
] • Date [4 Mar 09] • Not Rated