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Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from EarnestScribbler

This is living up to its potential. Sooner or later (and my money's on sooner), Joyce is going to see those ports. That will be an interesting conversation.

I also agree with one of your earlier replies...Buffy is real good at pining.

I'm guessing the Buffy/Angel relationship is dead in the water...and I'm thinking he's not gonna take it well. So, no Angelus?

One tiny's kind of a pet peeve of mine. In canon, Willow's nickname is Will, not Wills. Xander sometimes called her Willster, but nobody ever called her Wills. Don't get me wrong, I still think this is pretty darn good, but that particular thing just irks me for some reason.

And Halloween fics are kind of overused...but that's because there are so many possible variations. This one is pretty original, and I want to see where it's gonna go.

Edit: know, I'm not 100% sure they never called her Wills, but I don't remember them ever doing so. Personally, I'd avoid it. It's your story, though, so YMMV.
Comments from author:
Really? I could have sworn I heard them call her 'Wills' at some point. I know I've read it a few times. ... Screw it. I'm not watching all the episodes to find out. I'll just take your word for it.

Angelus may, or may not appear. I've got a few ideas on how to bring him out, but I haven't decided if I want to do it yet. I'm leaning towards it, though.

And Joyce, being the (comparatively) observant mother she is, will DEFINITELY see the ports before long. I'm looking forward to that.

... Hehe. Buffy pining. It's just too cute. She gets all pouty.

Glad you're enjoying it!
Review By [EarnestScribbler] • Date [12 Mar 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from Chan
Hmm... some interesting discoveries but it's early days yet, I'm kind of curious to know if they were the only persons within the zone that got changed. not likely but possible.

I just have to sit down and smile because of the seeming emotional chaos buffy's going to be going through. this also gives one a good chance to explore rarely seen sides of the character as they struggle to grow up. :D

A thought am I the only one who wants to see the three curb stomp the council?
Comments from author:
All in good time, my good man. The Council hasn't really done anything egregious yet. You've gotta let them get Buffy's ire going.

*pats Buffy's shoulder* Poor girl. She's got the whole 'I'm gay!' thing to deal with. Not easy.

Glad you're enjoying it!
Review By [Chan] • Date [11 Mar 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from Shadohime
DarthMurphy is right. There are NO cybernetics involved AT ALL with the SPARTAN-II's physiology. They are just smacked-up humans with a bunch of physical boosts to strength, speed, and stamina. One SPARTAN, Linda, actually survived a mortal wound to the back, having been put in cryo and transported to a medical facility in time. Again, I digress.

Having said that, this is shaping up to be a great story. I myself am a femmeslash/shoujoai/yuri fan (whichever term strikes your fancy), and Buffy/Willow is sadly unexplored territory for me. For some reason, I can never picture the soft-spoken brainiac falling for the never-say-die Slayer, but you've pulled it off well, by completely offsetting Willow's original personality with that of Samus Aran. If you want a good fic with Samus in it, check out Fusion of Destinies on It's a Harry Potter/Metroid crossover that's remarkably well-done. Never having played any of the Metroid games, I nonetheless was able to understand what was going on.

Also, were there any other lasting effects from Halloween? Was anyone else changed irreversibly?
Comments from author:
You're just gonna have to wait and see. ;)

Now, you've had your little rant. I'm gonna have mine: Does NO ONE listen when I say 'I know nothing about Halo'? Seriously. I put it in the first chapter. I saw Haloid, then I saw a 'Buffy is Master Chief' challenge. This is what came of it. I got some cursory information from my brother, just enough to build on, and I went for it.

Okay. I'm done. Go back to whatever you were doing. :)

P.S. HP/Metroid? Cool...

P.P.S. I'm glad you're enjoying it! Samus kicks a$$!

(And finally) P.P.P.S. I totally agree with you. That's why I prefer Willow and Tara. Or Dawn. Or, really, ANYONE but Kennedy. I just had a serious lack of options here.
Review By [Shadohime] • Date [11 Mar 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from DarthMurphy
The SPARTAN program just used chemical and surgical augmentation on superb physical specimens conscripted by the Navy. They all look like normal people, if you can ignore how every last one of them is really big. If you have difficulty finding answers to pretty much any Halo related question, try checking Halopedia, or direct your questions to somebody on
Comments from author:
I was told they were cyborgs. This, to my mind, brings up the Borg, or something.

Besides, I needed a bit of angst. So, I gave her Matrix style ports.

Thanks for the link, though. I appreciate it!
Review By [DarthMurphy] • Date [11 Mar 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from (Recent Donor)MissingAuthor
Wonderful second chapter and love your style of humor! Laugh out loud several time. I like how Buffy is reacting to Willow and I'm looking forward to see what you come up with next.

Comments from author:
^_^ Thank you! I'm glad you're enjoying it!
Review By [(Recent Donor)MissingAuthor] • Date [11 Mar 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from (Recent Donor)Deamondeathstone
As far as i know, the Master Chief's body is pale from wearing the armor all the time and covered in scars. Not something you'd want Buffy to have, so i'd ignore it if i were you.
Comments from author:
Ew, really? Yeah, ignoring that is definitely a good idea. I appreciate the info, though.
Review By [(Recent Donor)Deamondeathstone] • Date [11 Mar 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from JoeDineen
Dunno much about Master Chief but I really doubt that ports would be need. At that tech level wireless relays and subdermal contacts would be all that is needed. The biggest issue with sci fi computer stuff is that generally the writers are too conservative. Except for the AI stuff and the holo projectors most of the computer and coms tech in Star Trek the Next Generation was not much better that current state of the art at the time and in some cases less so.

Of course now that you have given her ports she has them. Its your story and you can go pretty much anyway you want.

I think you are rushing the Wiffy a bit though, slow could be better here.
Comments from author:
Sadly, Wiffy isn't here yet. Only Buffy's new mental additions. They won't get together for a while, but Buffy's going to do a bit of pining. You can't deny, she's good at that. ^_^
Review By [JoeDineen] • Date [11 Mar 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from bluehairedgirl
A truly new and cool story, that is shaping up to be both exciting and sexy. Please continue you fine works.
Comments from author:
Thank you! And I will, as much as I can!
Review By [bluehairedgirl] • Date [11 Mar 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Addlcove
good start, looking forward to see where this is going.
Comments from author:
Thank you!
Review By [Addlcove] • Date [10 Mar 09] • Rating [5 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from zafaran
More, more, more, please. This is a wonderful beginning to what looks like is going to be an outstanding entry in the YAHF catagory. Well done. I hope your muse and schedule will allow you to write and post more chapters sometime soon. Keep up the good work. Zafaran {mailto:} zafaran {at} fastmail {dot} fm
Comments from author:
I hope it is! YAHF is a bit done to death, but this seemed like a lot of fun.
Review By [zafaran] • Date [8 Mar 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from jack
great start continue now please continue please
Comments from author:
I am! ^_^
Review By [jack] • Date [8 Mar 09] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Shadohime
You know, I was actually thinking of something similar to this. Only, Buffy dresses as Cortana, and gets stuck in the Internet. She manages to make a lot of money, and builds the Sunnydale equivalent of NORAD in a warehouse. But I digress.

This is a great improvement over the traditional "Xander as Master Chief" stories, and very memorable. I find myself wanting to know more. But you should have made Xander REALLY become Cortana. That would have been funny! Keep this up!
Comments from author:
That actually sounds pretty cool. Let me know if you write that, I'll be there to read it.

I'm glad you think so! I've read the 'Xander Chief' stories, and I couldn't help think, 'Xander is the Zeppo! It's not nice, perhaps, but that's his function. He helps the super-types with their emotional problems.' Thusly, with a little inspiration, we have this!

I thought about doing that, I really did. But, I don't think Chaos magic would go QUITE that far.

Glad you're enjoying it!
Review By [Shadohime] • Date [8 Mar 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from CPTSkip
I really liked your take on Helloween. You story has much potential for chaos and sexual confusion. Lol! I look forward to more of your story.
Comments from author:
*squee!* I know! I'm looking forward to it, myself!
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [8 Mar 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Xaldaran
I suggest that if you have not done so already you read the Halo novels.

The characterization of John-117 is so bad that I was unable to finish reading the first chapter.
Comments from author:
I haven't, obviously, but I only needed him for one chapter.

And you don't have to be so rude about it. Words hurt, you know. Jeez...
Review By [Xaldaran] • Date [8 Mar 09] • Rating [3 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Chan
Now this is something I can get behind the group comes out stronger than when they went in thus far. I'm really curious as to the sheer amount of chaos that might follow from this seeming innocent costume choice.
Comments from author:
Respect that Chaos. Poor Ethan died to make it happen. ;)
Review By [Chan] • Date [8 Mar 09] • Not Rated
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