Okay really liked the moment: Sure, he had been born in an alternate reality and was part fish, but still his boy.
Not sure about random vampire, plus Dawn, Willow and Buffy visiting... or what you meant happened to Faith. It seems like you stopped Glory in a unique way, leaving Oz Giles and Faith behind.
I like that you set up a possible conflict between Willow and Buffy's assumptions and the way things are in your new version of the Star Wars universe. I do see that you plan to continue the story.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [12 Oct 09] • Rating [8 out of 10]
The AU earth scenario is scary. I hope they are able to return to a place that they can make more of a difference in. There's also the chance that the UK Watcher's historical society is a front for the Watcher of immortals... but not really sure about your AU history stuff. The part about Hitler's dad marrying someone else is interesting.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [12 Oct 09] • Not Rated
Like the psychology, tactics and characterization here, starting with last chapter(?) when you had Leia and Mara discussing the Empathy species/culture situation. Looking forward to the point where more formal "do you want to join our federation" situations come along. Because wouldn't you rather be a member of a trade/civil protection federation than a "rebel alliance."
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [12 Oct 09] • Not Rated
This was an exciting chapter... nice plotting... good crossover elements....nice follow up on the visual elements of the planet. The story needs a little recap every now and then on how people look, beyond the color of their armor, but overall the narrative style is pretty good. You did a good job a few chapters ago with the height thing with the little silver guys and describing Cloe's hair.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [12 Oct 09] • Not Rated
I like that Xander is taking some good aspects from Trek into consideration. The whole thing with the Force Rangers support crew, though reminds me of the Blue Blaze Irregulars from Buckaroo Banzai... so I'll be looking out for some references there.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [12 Oct 09] • Not Rated
Once again Xander had done it. Gone from A straight to Z without stopping by B or C. He thought it was all logical, but it was not logical at all. She suspected it was a Force talent of Xander’s, some form of precognition or something. She could see Lowbacka had made the same connection.
They silently wondered whether Xander knew about this or still actually believed it was all perfectly logical.
-- Very much an extension of "the one who sees" into the force.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [12 Oct 09] • Not Rated
Lots of interesting twists... question, though when did 1 million gone become 500,000 in the slave system. Did half of them just implode upon reaching this universe? Or is it deliberate bad accounting on the part of the original slavers to have more to sell on the side?
Comments from author:
uhh I fear you caught us there :)
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [11 Oct 09] • Not Rated
I liked what you did with Thomas the tattooed New Yorker, and am surprised there still is a small "Empire" out there.
Comments from author:
as I said we come back to a few of them and there are people who loved "the order" the Empire brought to their lives and after removing the bad parts like Palpatine and Vader it got better :)
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [11 Oct 09] • Not Rated
Here I think you did a good job of showing that while Xander is a good problem solver and tactition, the older characters aren't helpless either... and they recognize that in his youth if he has time to recharge... and even learn new things... he and the other can be more effective in the long term.
Comments from author:
yes, even if it is mostley a Xander fic he can't do everythng alone :)
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [11 Oct 09] • Not Rated
Mmm. This chapter was okay... I think it tried to cover too much ground over a period of time and training. You got there, but I wasn't enthralled. There was a lot of information for the reader to cover, too.
Comments from author:
sadly sometimes you have to cover a lot and it isn't alway easy. We are not happy with the chapter either.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [11 Oct 09] • Not Rated