I'm hoping there will be a quick update for this...I'm a little uncertain about the glibness of this chapter. Definitely will keep reading, it just seemed to go too quick, without as much emotional investment as I was hoping for. The explanation for Buffy being that she would naturally try to come back for Dawn and Tom (I agree, I think she'd be less than happy about leaving someone so young) could use some work. Maybe mentioning a tightening around her eyes when she says she's glad she's back, or something. She was in Heaven for three months.....
Hey, it's not my story, it's yours, run with it. I'm looking forward to the next update.
Comments from author:
I'm impatient. It's my weakness. I wanted Buffy back, so I shoved ahead a little.
Review By [chrysanne] • Date [29 Mar 09] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Really good start to this story. I especially like the Tom is Voldemort but isn't vibe that you have going on. I also like the whole nature versus nurture debate that you are including. JK Rowling came firmly down on the nature overcoming nurture side, so it is refreshing to see an opposing viewpoint in this fandom... keep up the good work.
Comments from author:
Well, as far as I could tell, Voldemort was a product of nurture. Grew up in a dingy little orphanage, psychologically tortured by his peers... The makings of a sociopath.
Glad you're enjoying it!
Review By [EricThorsen] • Date [29 Mar 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Interesting story. What was the sorting hat's issue? I assume that someone "Dawned" Tom into the Summers family? Meaning he's a magic construct? Since when does an unnatural artifact have problems with an unnatural child? Prejudiced much?
Won't the Death Eaters be in for a shock when their "Leader" turns out to be one of the good guys? It reminds me of "The Boys From Brazil", where the Nazis were trying to recreate Hitler, and they couldn't get it right.....nature versus nurture. The kids just kept refusing to turn into vicious sociopaths.
This story looks seriously interesting. I'll be hanging around to see what shakes.
KK
Comments from author:
'Boys From Brazil,' huh? Sounds interesting. I'll have to check that out.
The Sorting Hat senses what Tom used to be. He can't put his brim on it, but he knows something isn't right about the kid.
He's not a magic construct... I don't think. I'm still working on that.
Review By [KzintiKiller] • Date [29 Mar 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Great fic. I'm kinda holding out a hope that Harry will bust out the DHs and be all, "You shouldn't be here," to Buffy since as the Master of Death he should be able to tell when someone should be dead and when one should be alive. If you want ideas on how to make a really badass Harry go to seel'vor's yahoo group at, uk.groups.yahoo.com/group/seelvorfanfiction, it has a ton of good drabbles about badass Harry, most paired with Hermione. I like the way you have Tom, but a question bugging me is that you have Buffy being ok coming back for Tom at age 11 but she didn't want to come back for Dawn at age 16. Maybe that's too strong but she did come back different in a disconnected with the group way in canon.
Comments from author:
16 is nearly an adult. Dawn could (theoretically) take care of herself. Tom just barely turned 11. He's still a child, and their mom is dead. Buffy wouldn't leave it like that. And if, like she said, she was trying to come back the entire time, she wouldn't be disconnected. At least, that's my take on it.
I do love a bad-ass Harry... Thanks for the tip! I almost wrote this as a 'Harry/Hermione,' but I didn't want Jason and Luna to be related.
Glad you're enjoying it!
Review By [espinosaca] • Date [29 Mar 09] • Not Rated
Oh I am so very glad that that granted thing was just a prank. I really really hope that Harry gets over his fear soon. It was rather interesting how the two of them saw the resurrection spell for Buffy.I really love this chapter. More soon please.
Comments from author:
Soon as I can!
Review By [spring] • Date [29 Mar 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Interesting reaction from the hat. I have to say that I expected Tom to know better than that, I hope things don't get to bad for him. I also have to wonder why a vengeance demon was at the school on the first day. More soon of this wonderful fic please.
Comments from author:
It's coming!
Review By [spring] • Date [28 Mar 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Yay!! I'm so happy you threw out the crapilogue. Dean came out of nowhere though, so that really surprised me. Will Harry get to meet Buffy and the others? It'd be interesting, Master of Death meets the person who's gift is death. I like Luna, will this turn into a Luna/Tom? That'd be fun.
Comments from author:
^_^ Not saying. They're only 11, so it's hard to tell, even for the author.
Review By [espinosaca] • Date [28 Mar 09] • Not Rated
funny that Luna's daughter is skeptical about the existence of mythical beings. Probably comes from having a mother who believes in all of them... will be interesting to see if Tom gets back 'memories' or "only" the equivalent of a video showing him 'stuff'...the former would be "Voldemort reborn" the latter would be just a video history. Hm... Hagrid knew Tom R., but that was when Tom was (probably) a 6th or 7th year), that's why he didn't know him by face. Boy after this series of clues even Minerva M. might start to get a little suspicious. Heh. I wonder if Spike will have to pay a visit to sort things out. heh. Those 2 charm bracelets might come in handy. Hey--if Buffy comes back... HP and company would interpret that as being like the end of book 4, ie "this must be a really dark family...." doing spells like the one at end of "Goblet...". Next up: Does Angel know about Hogwarts? He's had 250+ years to find out about stuff like that... and vampires do move in the wizarding world, sometimes even socially... hey--Drusilla might be a relative of Trelawney's....
Comments from author:
I love when people ask questions. It gives me ideas.
Glad you're enjoying it!
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [28 Mar 09] • Not Rated