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Review of chapter "Chapter Thirteen" from TroyGuffey
Review:
VERY NICE! :D
Comments from author:
Well thanks.
Review By [TroyGuffey] • Date [17 Dec 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirteen" from Hecatonchires
Review:
Nice to see some of the b-team shine
Comments from author:
Whole purpose of the story :)
Review By [Hecatonchires] • Date [8 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirteen" from war
Review:
great story.
Review By [war] • Date [8 Nov 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Twelve" from war
Review:
that's some intense combat.

good story looking forward to your next chapter.
Review By [war] • Date [2 Jan 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Eleven" from war
Review:
sounds like it's turning into one hell of a fight.

good story looking forward to your next chapter.
Review By [war] • Date [9 Oct 10] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten" from war
Review:
talk about a fighting withdraw.

good story looking forward to your next chapter.
Review By [war] • Date [23 Sep 10] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten" from summerdancer
Review:
thanks for the fic. can't wait for more.
Review By [summerdancer] • Date [23 Sep 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Nine" from war
Review:
interesting way of tracking people.

good story looking forward to your next chapter.
Review By [war] • Date [17 May 10] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Eight" from war
Review:
always good to take a moment and think things out and try to make a plan.

good story looking forward to your next chapter.
Review By [war] • Date [6 May 10] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Seven" from war
Review:
that's some interesting enemies they have.

good story looking forward to your next chapter.
Comments from author:
You know how hard it is coming up with enemies that a shinigami can have trouble with, but are not too overpowered?
Review By [war] • Date [25 Feb 10] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Seven" from Sunstar
Review:
There are two chapter fives in the titles instead of a six for chapter 6.


I love the paragraph about their dancing in this chapter, it was amusing :)

The bad guys sound interesting and their referring to people as 'clay' and 'suits' really drives the point home they aren't human or empathetic of humans.
Comments from author:
They are hopefully cool enough bad guys. Thanks for the corrections.
Review By [Sunstar] • Date [25 Feb 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from Sunstar
Review:
I noticed a missing word in this chapter, after fold the 'me' is missing.
Awesome story.

Graham grinned, “I promise as a longtime friend of Slayers. No funny stuff. Besides, you could probably fold into a small package, and drop me into a small trash can without much effort.”
Review By [Sunstar] • Date [25 Feb 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Six" from war
Review:
good story looking forward to your next chapter.
Review By [war] • Date [17 Feb 10] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from darkblade
Review:
1. Shinigami divisions are not family after all... there are exceptions with some members, but in general...
2. Squad sounds STUPID. Thats the main problem. And it's like calling colonel sergeant...
Comments from author:
Okay, you just don't like the terms I'm using. No problem. I'm not going to change them however.
Review By [darkblade] • Date [26 Apr 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from darkblade
Review:
Ehm... If you use "Gotei is international" can you use "Division" instead of "Squad", please? For international organization "squad" sounds stupid. It's sound stupid even for pure Japanese G13. And they numbers are obviously not in squad range, only we shown mostly officers. And they were not squad in japanese also, so it's overall wrong translation.
Comments from author:
I have read the squad/division debate on various boards, and I happen to like the sound of 'squad' over 'division'. Squad sounds more personal, more familial. Division sounds more corporate and impersonal, and I'm trying to punch up the concept of family to show how it influenced Kendra.
Granted, squad doesn't make numerical sense for a section of an organization that alone can contain hundreds or thousands of shinigami, but it just sounded better in a literary flow.
Thanks for the comment.
Review By [darkblade] • Date [25 Apr 09] • Rating [7 out of 10]
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