VERY NICE! :D

Well thanks.

Nice to see some of the b-team shine

Whole purpose of the story :)

great story.

that's some intense combat.

good story looking forward to your next chapter.

sounds like it's turning into one hell of a fight.

good story looking forward to your next chapter.

talk about a fighting withdraw.

good story looking forward to your next chapter.

thanks for the fic. can't wait for more.

interesting way of tracking people.

good story looking forward to your next chapter.

always good to take a moment and think things out and try to make a plan.

good story looking forward to your next chapter.

that's some interesting enemies they have.

good story looking forward to your next chapter.

You know how hard it is coming up with enemies that a shinigami can have trouble with, but are not too overpowered?

There are two chapter fives in the titles instead of a six for chapter 6.


I love the paragraph about their dancing in this chapter, it was amusing :)

The bad guys sound interesting and their referring to people as 'clay' and 'suits' really drives the point home they aren't human or empathetic of humans.

They are hopefully cool enough bad guys. Thanks for the corrections.

I noticed a missing word in this chapter, after fold the 'me' is missing.
Awesome story.

Graham grinned, “I promise as a longtime friend of Slayers. No funny stuff. Besides, you could probably fold into a small package, and drop me into a small trash can without much effort.”

good story looking forward to your next chapter.

1. Shinigami divisions are not family after all... there are exceptions with some members, but in general...
2. Squad sounds STUPID. Thats the main problem. And it's like calling colonel sergeant...

Okay, you just don't like the terms I'm using. No problem. I'm not going to change them however.

Ehm... If you use "Gotei is international" can you use "Division" instead of "Squad", please? For international organization "squad" sounds stupid. It's sound stupid even for pure Japanese G13. And they numbers are obviously not in squad range, only we shown mostly officers. And they were not squad in japanese also, so it's overall wrong translation.

I have read the squad/division debate on various boards, and I happen to like the sound of 'squad' over 'division'. Squad sounds more personal, more familial. Division sounds more corporate and impersonal, and I'm trying to punch up the concept of family to show how it influenced Kendra.
Granted, squad doesn't make numerical sense for a section of an organization that alone can contain hundreds or thousands of shinigami, but it just sounded better in a literary flow.
Thanks for the comment.