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Review of chapter "Daysed and Confused Part 1" from scottm
Review:
I am excited you are able to write and post more. I miss it when you aren't able to make weekly updates. Hopefully you have been having a lot of fun this summer and going on trips away from your computer. I think this is your best story so far!
Comments from author:
I've got a few chapters piling up as I wait for my Britpicker to get back to me on Sophie's dialogue. One she clears things, I'll have chapters every few days as I unload the backlog.
Review By [scottm] • Date [12 Sep 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Daysed and Confused Part 1" from TheatricalBarrister
Review:
I have a difficult time imagining a slayer as a sub. I kind of imagine them as predators.
Comments from author:
And if you put twenty of them together in a house? Not everyone can be an alpha female.
Review By [TheatricalBarrister] • Date [4 Sep 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Daysed and Confused Part 1" from Rebask
Review:
more good work, you never fail to entertain. id have to vote for the other, mostly because i want to see what you do with plant cordy.
Comments from author:
Yeah, I really do like her. And the he!Xander vs. she!Xander might be entertaining, especially since he!Xander's girlfriend is evidently a bisexual skank...
Review By [Rebask] • Date [4 Sep 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Daysed and Confused Part 1" from Pending
Review:
Great story so far, though its really depressing me by reminding me of my inability to get a mac for college. Anyway I vote for Purrfection.
Comments from author:
They offer monthly payment plans and you can get some really great refurb deals...
Review By [Pending] • Date [4 Sep 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Fabulous Dramatics" from Idmonscat
Review:
Oops forgot to vote. I'd go for Purrfection as Black Cat Cordy just beats Spider Girl Xander when my iner fanboy comes out to play ;-)
Comments from author:
True. Then again, we already have at least one Black Cat-esque girl in Astrid and Felicia will be featuring. And my Spider-Girl Xander's got a pretty big chest of her own...
Review By [Idmonscat] • Date [3 Sep 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Amazed" from TheatricalBarrister
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It seems like a fine line to skirt to avoid the appearance of Dawn trying to buy Cassie's affections, what with the whole job/expensive-gifts/place-to-live thing, and if you factor in Cassie being a minor, things could be taken in a very bad way if someone wanted to make trouble for them. (And wow, that sentence just rambles on).

Anyway, good job with the Dawn spelling things out at the end.
Comments from author:
Yeah, it's kinda like the early Smallville Lex/everyone dealings. I never really got that he was trying to buy people off, just that he had a big bank account and so his idea of an acceptable amount of money to spend was skewed. Honestly, Cassie's new gig comes into play in the upcoming chapters and this was one way I could think of to introduce that subplot since I was thinking Dawn would get lower middle class Cassie a laptop of her own (although I was originally thinking a 13" standard MacBook, which is roughly $1000).
Review By [TheatricalBarrister] • Date [2 Sep 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Amazed" from Raider
Review:
you have officially made me want to trade my hp laptop for an apple laptop.

-quote-
As Astrid wandered off, still bickering with Kate, nobody noticed the odd black substance that the redhead stepped in. Nor did anyone notice the entire puddle rearing up and curling a series of little tentacles around her ankle, surging up her leg and riding away to leave behind a now clear spot on the pavement. It continued to ripple and move for a few seconds longer before smoothing out to encase her calf in a flat black material that perfectly matched her costume.
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3 chapters later, and still no further mention of the consequences of astrid's encounter with what I know for a fact to be the venom symbiote......just a minor caveat....
Comments from author:
Well, Apple uses what's essentially SLI (the same tech that makes AlienWare laptops so 'great' game-wise) but in a 17" laptop that weighs half as much. Also, they don't do stupid shit like putting 1333 mhz RAM in a computer with a 1066 mhz front side bus; when you exceed the speed of the FSB, you're just wasting money because the memory can't work any faster than the computer can send/take information from it. Despite Dell/HP offering cheaper, Apple is just better. They boot Windows, too, which allows a direct OS X vs. Windows comparison on the same exact hardware, and OS X is consistently faster as are most applications.

And yes, Venom is there but we're watching from Dawn's perspective for the most part. Venom's just chilling with Astrid, neither of whom want to bring attention to her hitchhiker, especially since it amplifies her already phenomenal power by at least 400%, more if she wants to increase her mass like we see Venom do (Venom has held his own against the Juggernaut at points). We'll touch on them eventually.
Review By [Raider] • Date [2 Sep 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Amazed" from Obsidian
Review:
awesome chapters, thanks! *feeds the muse*
Comments from author:
Nomnomnom.
Review By [Obsidian] • Date [2 Sep 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Fabulous Dramatics" from Idmonscat
Review:
Loving the Directors Cut version of this story even more than the original, and the Princess Python cameo was just priceless.
Just one tiny thing, you've got the baby white Queens telling Dawn that they've clouded every ones memories of the "you smell green" comment, then have Dawn wondering whey no one mentioned it later in the story.
Comments from author:
Her son will be appearing with the Young Masters, so when I was looking for someone for the end of #18, she just jumped out at me.
Review By [Idmonscat] • Date [31 Aug 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Fabulous Dramatics" from TheatricalBarrister
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"Don't be gay, Sparky!"

Between the two, I'd vote for Purrfection. I empathize more with Cordelia as Black Cat than with Cordy as a plant girl. Also, I really didn't like what was happening with Willow in The Other. Not trying to critique that story here, just explaining why I prefer Purrfection.

ETA: I agree with you about the Willow Sue/Xander Stu bit. Again, I don't want to start critiquing a different story in the thread for this one. Which reminds me of another issue with using The Other in conjunction with this. You've made mention in this story of Xander very definitely being male with one of the baby slayers. I suppose you could always retcon it, but that's such a hassle to edit stuff you've already posted ;-)
Comments from author:
Well, this story has an unflattering Buffy, a not-too-bright Xander, and a STD-infected formerly slutty Faith. That one has a manipulative, possessive Willow. They might be more extreme than the traits are in canon, but I just get bored with people filling up entire accounts with Willow Sue/Xander Stu/etc. stories where they're totally unwilling to acknowledge character flaws.
Review By [TheatricalBarrister] • Date [31 Aug 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Fabulous Dramatics" from Jackaniny
Review:
Yet another bril chapter. Love what you did with Cassie's total sh1t-for-brains parents. "I'm going to walk out with my head held high. a hundred feet high" is a great line :)

Really looking forward to Tank!Vi. Is she going to get something she can hit stuff with besides her fists? (Maybe a big ol' mace and call it 'The Stinger'? lol)

Also, my vote is for The Other. I've really (really!) wanted to read more of that. I've been looking forward to seeing the JL's reaction to Callista and Cordy. Maybe have a face-off between Cordelia as Demeter and Poison Ivy :)
Comments from author:
I might need to go through the WoWArmory site to see if there are any good maces. I know Deep Thunder is pretty cool from one of my toons...
http://www.wowhead.com/?item=28441#screenshots:id=26828

I'm not sure how much further The Other would go past where it is now; I have an easy way to bridge the two with another chapter or two of The Other, but I could always do The Other v2 and add to the existing events, so Ivy and Demeter meet before the end.
Review By [Jackaniny] • Date [31 Aug 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Fabulous Dramatics" from Raider
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review edited:

while I'm a fan of both stories, I vote for 'the other', I'm more curious about that story.

that said, far as family blow-ups are concerned, cassie's parents, well, the words I wanna use arent fit for polite company, so I'll just say cassie's better off without them.
Comments from author:
I don't think you quite grasped the nature of the question; I'm picking one or the other to be the second half of THIS story. Either Callista and Cordelia from The Other or Cordelia and someone from Purrfection will be coming to the New Day Dawning-verse. I'm not going to bring both sets of characters over, so it's either one or the other. I'm not sure which to do, so I'm putting it to a vote.
Review By [Raider] • Date [31 Aug 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Fabulous Dramatics" from Wolfkin
Review:
Can we stuff Blake *in* the car before Cassie steps on it? Please? And her mom too? Anyway, good chapter(and the one before it as well) although, is Violet Day Vi from the last half of 7th season Buffy? If so, :-p :-) on her last name!

As for crossing over with Purrfection of The other, I vote for The Other, if for no other reason that we have enough Black Cats in this story and besides, having One-Eyed Xander(tm) meeting Callista should be good for a few giggles. Although, you prolly should restrict it to Cordy and Callista like you did with Cordy!Black Cat and her friend in the last version of New Day Dawning. It's gotta be getting . . . *interesting* keeping up with all the characters that are in this story so far. Adding more than 2-3 more . . . *shrugs* Just my $0.02.
Comments from author:
I'm only going to be doing Callista and Cordy (or Cordy and her special friend if Purrfection wins). I know the cast is sorta large; I've taken to keeping a running Dramatis Personœ at the start of the story and as it stands, the superhumans in the upcoming sequel number 14 (eight Defenders and six members of the Wasp Corps' successors, the Bug Corps).

And yeah, Violet is Vi (Whedon establishes that Violet is her real first name in the S8 comics). I don't like the Madonna thing and so since I needed a last name, and she didn't have any real acting credit to her name back when I started my first story with her, I've taken to calling her Violet Day. She also has some traits the real actress does, such as being good on the violin.
Review By [Wolfkin] • Date [30 Aug 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Fabulous Dramatics" from Stardust
Review:
While I enjoy the idea of combining this with Purrfection like you had originally intended, how will the Original Black Cat react to Cordy!Black Cat and her special friend. And do you plan on her special friend doing the daredevil junior thing like the first time? (or was it Rogue junior)

I think it will flow better if combined with The Other, less complications and the spider powered thing, think about how many spiders there were being experimented on, also DNA extraction techniques that can be used to isolate the spider powers.

Of course either way will still be a thoroughly enjoyable read.

Also before it slips my mind, I'm glad you fixed that minor detail and added a whole lot of flare. Cassie just up and moving without prior notice to her parental units would indeed have caused lots of trouble since she is considered a minor. Plus honest characterizations in Blake the Brutish Brat and Peggy the Hateful (who conveniently lays blame at others feet)
Comments from author:
Yeah, either way there's a redundant character. We either end up with a junior Black Cat (and maybe a junior Rogue or Daredevil), or a junior Spider-Woman. Callista and Astrid represent a little redundancy in that they're both spiders, but then Astrid has her mother's figure and Felicia will be figuring into the story a lot by the end, so it's two spiders vs. three Black Cats.

And I think this works better too.
Review By [Stardust] • Date [30 Aug 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Snip Snip Snip" from TheatricalBarrister
Review:
The fight with Venom: not made of fail.

I liked the Elle cameo, too, especially her chasing after Ivette like that. It does get a little confusing though, to include a character from a show, then remark how she looks like the character from the show, etc., etc. :-)
Comments from author:
Both Marvel and DC comics exist inside the Marvel universe, so I don't see why Jeph Loeb (who probably works for that Marvel comics) couldn't create Heroes inside the Marvel universe. Especially since with the X-Men as real people, he'd need to do that watering down and name changing to avoid a whole different set of lawsuits than he did in the real world.
Review By [TheatricalBarrister] • Date [25 Aug 09] • Not Rated
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