Review of chapter "End of Term" from NeedlessNoodles
I've been looking at (not reading) this story for a very long time -- years in fact. It turned out pretty good.
Review By [NeedlessNoodles
] • Date [5 Jan 10] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Hogwarts Express" from HebiR
“Meet the Girl Who Died…Twice.”
Three times, actually, she flatlined after Warren shot her. So with Buffy, third time was not the charm.
Comments from author:
While something in that operating room was going "beeeeeeeeeeep" the heart monitor was visible in the background, showing a steady heartbeat.
Review By [HebiR
] • Date [25 Sep 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Hogwarts Express" from Kateydidnt
hm, while Buffy's speech about prophecies is right, I think Dumbledore's speech to the same effect was more effective.
Review By [Kateydidnt
] • Date [8 Mar 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "End of Term" from MarcusSLazarus
Y’know, I DEFINITELY wish there were more HP/Buffy crossovers out there like this one; the length is good, the characterisation is intriguing, the pairing is believable- Harry and Dawn really do make a VERY interesting couple; I’m just disappointed there aren’t more stories featuring them together like this-, and there are some VERY interesting moments between the two ‘teams’ over the course of the plot.
Dawn’s introduction to Hogwarts was very well-written, with her interaction with the various groups of students managing to be interesting and amusing; her treatment of Malfoy when he attempted to attack her was particularly funny, especially when she kept his wand on her afterwards, and as for her relationship with Harry…
It really worked out rather well, to be honest; both of them forced to deal with a power and responsibility that neither of them asked for or wanted, they find in each other someone who accepts them for who they are as PEOPLE, rather than judging them as ICONS.
And then, of course, the issues raised by Voldemort looking for the Key...
Trademark Voldemort, really; he learns about a potential source of power, and then he spends a great deal of time and effort trying to acquire it when he probably doesn’t even know what it could be used FOR.
On the topic of power, I wasn’t certain about the idea of Harry being able to wield Willow’s ‘type’ of magic as well as the type he’d been learning at Hogwarts already, but it certainly created a more interesting idea about the ‘power the Dark Lord knows not’ than just Harry being more emotionally capable to make decisions or take risks that will almost certainly result in his death (Nice moral message, but this one was a bit… cooler, really).
However, I do have one fundamental problem; the time flow in the story is very erratic.
I mean, you have at least a couple of dozen chapters dedicated to the month or so between Harry’s birthday and returning to school, followed by the first couple of weeks in Hogwarts, and then the entire year seems to go by in about the same number of chapters?
I get that you wanted to get to the main part of the plot as soon as possible, but everything just felt so… rushed towards the end (Particularly Harry learning to access Willow’s brand of magic; nice idea, but given that you only introduced it in the last few chapters it felt like you’d just realised all of a sudden you didn’t know what you were going to do about Voldemort and come up with this at the last minute).
Overall concept and character development? VERY good.
PLOT development? Could have been better.
Review By [MarcusSLazarus
] • Date [7 Feb 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Harry Potter and the Key of Dagon" from DawnJr
DRACO MALFOY IS HOT AND HE IS NOT A NASTY GIT.
Comments from author:
Draco Malfoy was a spoiled rotten racist, who was guilty of multiple counts of assault and attempted murder. It was largely a matter of luck, and quick thinking on Harry's part that kept Draco from being a multiple murderer.
Review By [DawnJr
] • Date [22 Jan 09] • Rating [1 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Harry Potter and the Key of Dagon" from TheHunter
This was absolutely amazing. Everyone within sight of my word read this story.
Review By [TheHunter
] • Date [28 Nov 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "End of Term" from mac
In a word - BRILLIANT! In others - well written, funny, excellent characters, nice twist on Harry being able to do Wiccan magic and loads of other things. Thanks for writing
Review By [mac
] • Date [9 Jul 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "End of Term" from Scrappychic
Wow! I mean... WOW!
You've done a stellar job with this fic. It's absolutely wonderful. You've made the characters seem so real, without the godmodding or insane whineyness that I find comes with a lot of the Buffy/HP xovers I've read.
I find a lot of time people take the most obvious character traits for each character and blow them out of proportion, because it's a recognizable trait for that character, but as a whole the character isn't very true to it's original form. But you have managed to avoid this with a your well balanced writing in regards to the personalities and powers depicted here. Good on ya!
Review By [Scrappychic
] • Date [7 Jul 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "End of Term" from DavidFraser
Not especially a Harry Potter fan, but I took a chance with this and totally enjoyed it !!
Guess, no matter what, it's the story telling that matters.
Review By [DavidFraser
] • Date [3 Dec 07] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "End of Term" from jheaton
Terrific story. Definitely among my favorite BtVS/HP crossovers.
Review By [jheaton
] • Date [15 Nov 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "End of Term" from Ansku
Review By [Ansku
] • Date [17 Sep 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "End of Term" from James
Amazing! Marcus Rowland recommended your stories and so I thought I would give it a go. My only exposure to HP and Buffy has been through FanFic and I must admit that your story was, by far, better than most anything I have read.
If I didn't know that the two worlds were different, I would have thought one was a spinoff of the other!
Review By [James
] • Date [14 Sep 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Harry Potter and the Key of Dagon" from WriteTheGoodWrite
Okay, I know I haven't even actually started the story, but just reading those three little 'notices'.... I think I love it already. :)
1) The long-lost-relative stuff is pretty overdone. I've only found a few stories where I really like the touches they've given it.
2) Yeah, like Giles could really last that long without succumbing to the knowledge that goes with the wand. Besides, the whole point of his Eyghon days was that it was this secret, underground creepy thing. Not a major sect of wizarding society.
3) I do like Draco/Dawn as a pairing, but only when portrayed realistically... i.e. completely dysfunctional. Draco's not a nice guy, whether he's a killer or not. ...'sides, it's fun writing for a$$hole characters. :)
Okay. Now I shall actually READ the story.
-Tamora, the Cardboard Moon
Comments from author:
I hope it doesn't disappoint.
Review By [WriteTheGoodWrite
] • Date [10 Sep 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Inheritance" from Kateydidnt
I absolutely LOVE this quote: “I may be famous for giving second chances, but the person has to want the second chance.”
I LOVE IT!
Review By [Kateydidnt
] • Date [6 Sep 07] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "End of Term" from DreamSmith
Hey there, long-time reader, first-time review (okay, actually I've only been reading stories on TtH for about a week, but I've read more than a few--many of them yours)
I signed up so that I could start giving feedback on these excellent stories, and this one is beyond excellent.
I'm not a Harry Potter fan. I've seen the movies, reluctantly, but that's it.
I AM a huge Buffy fan, but I've never cared for Dawn.
I only started this story after reading some of your shorter pieces, and deciding that it was worth taking a chance, since you'd impressed me more than a little.
And that was the right call to make, because this story was outstanding. The set-up, getting Dawn and company involved in the world of Hogwarts--flawless. I've never read any Potterfic before, and very much doubted that you could integrate it with the Buffyverse, but you managed it (and without making anyone, from either mythos, seem lame in comparison to the others).
Characterization seemed bang-on all the way through, especially Dawn--I absolutely bought into everything she said and did.
There WERE a couple or three instances of Buffy sounding not quite Buffylike, mainly just word-choices that felt a little off, but that's completely subjective, and it was never enough to pull me out of the story (well, not much, anyway).
One word--Decompression. You are very much unafraid, when it comes to taking your time with exploring the world and the interactions of characters. This is not a bad thing, if it stays interesting, and this did. I write fic myself, and I do the same kind of thing, and usually beat myself up over it, wondering if anyone really wants to follow along through the endless detail and minor scenes. Reading this story, I got to see that from the other side, as the reader, and found that it wasn't so bad as I'd feared it would be, so... Thanks!
In parting, I have to say that between this story, and a couple of others I've read in the last couple of days, I'm finally convinced to give the HP novels a read. If Miss JKR's material is on a par with what I've seen here, it ought to be a good time.
I'm going to have to get a new ink cartridge for my printer, so that I can run off a copy of this novel and put it in my library next to my other favorite books.
Thank you, for an outstanding piece of work, and a very enjoyable reading experience.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the comments. I think you'll enjoy the HP books, especially if you like exploring the details of her world. The movies skip, or gloss over, an awful lot of stuff. (For example, in the Prisoner of Azkaban movie, how did Lupin and Sirius know about the map, and how it worked?)
Review By [DreamSmith
] • Date [30 Jul 07] • Rating [10 out of 10]