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Review of chapter "Chapter Five" from Ansku
Review:
Nice :)
Comments from author:
Thanks, glad you liked.
Review By [Ansku] • Date [16 Sep 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from Ansku
Review:
Intriguing :)
Comments from author:
Thanks.
Review By [Ansku] • Date [5 Sep 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from winnie
Review:
interesting ? chapter looking forward to what follows
Comments from author:
While even the rough draft of the next chapter is far from completed it is starting to come together in my mind, so hopefully it won't take me forever to get it ready for posting.
Review By [winnie] • Date [23 Jun 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from spring
Review:
I am very glad that Xander found a job even if it is at The Over/Under Club.^_^ I am also glad that Harry found a job as it could a very dangerous thing for Harry to become board. I hope that this new relationship between Catharine and Xander works out. I also hope that he takes her advise and sees Lady Heather for some therapy, it was very smart to suggest that he see someone outside of the group dynamic to talk to about his issues. I look forward to the next installment of this wonderful story, look at it this way at least you have SOME of it hand written out and it's not just floating around in your head.^_^
Comments from author:
Xander at "The Over/Under" - early on I was toying with the thought of making Xander an actual hooker for more than the one night. However, I quickly realized doing that was a bit more extreme than necessary (plus unlikely, because I doubt his "new" friends would be clueless enough to miss him doing something like that), and it was while I was trying to decide what to do instead of that when I caught the rerun of the episode where "The Over/Under Club" is featured. Weirdly enough once I decided to have him working there I realized that I could use his job there as a smallish plot point later on.

Xander/Catherine, I can't say much without spoiling, but things won't be trouble free.

As for Lady Heather, Xander will see her, but aside from a few bits from their first sesson the therapy will take place mostly off screen, cause I'm not real good at writing good therapy scenes.
(I am thinking about having Penn and perhaps Harry also start seeing her as a therapist, as well.)

On the handwritten stuff, turns out what I originally thought would be the opening scene may end up actually being the last scene, because as I thought about it I realized there were at least one or two other scenes will need to happen first. But as you said at least it is started.
Review By [spring] • Date [23 Jun 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from iroshi
Review:
I gotta ask, why do you go to such lengths to insist that the Over/Under Club officially isn't selling sex? Prostitution is *legal* in Nevada. So, while I'm enjoying this series tremendously, I gotta admit to being a tad bit confoosed. :)

[EDITED in Response]

Well, I appreciate your thoroughness, then. Honestly, I was basing *my* information off of the television show you're basing your story in. There has been legal prostitution on CSI.
Comments from author:
The laws are confusing, like for example the fact that prostitution is legal in eight counties in Nevada, but Clark County (where Las Vegas is) isn't one of those counties. One person I know went to Vegas and was deeply disappointed to discover that they couldn't legally buy sex in Las Vegas.

Here's a link with some helpful info, since it's wikipedia I obviously can't say whether or not every thing in the article is correct. http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Prostitution_in_Nevada
But the information about Clark county/Las Vegas is correct as of 2008.

However, after reading your review I did a quick google search (Prostitution legal in Las Vegas) to make sure I hadn't got it wrong, and all the links that came back indicate that prostitution is illegal in Vegas itself.
~
*grin* Reply to reply.
Re: Legal in Vegas:

Oops, then. I admit that I've watched a lot of CSI episodes, but freely admit that I have not seen them all, especially many of the early ones (not counting season one itself cause I have finally caught most of season one in reruns, but I didn't really start watching until season seven and even then won't swear I've seen all those), and hadn't seen any of the ones that showed prostitution to be legal in Las Vegas, so I just assumed that CSI treated prostitution as it was in real life. And you know what they say about assuming. ;)
Review By [iroshi] • Date [19 Jun 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from Elleria
Review:
Looking forward to the next bit.
Comments from author:
*smiles* I'm hoping to have the next chapter ready soon.
Review By [Elleria] • Date [19 Jun 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from IzAzEL
Review:
Well this story just went from good to crap in one chapter. Nicely done.

The gay undertones were there for a while but they were always kept kinda subtle and mostly hidden. Xander is a flexible character who will adapt to alot of situations, so I can easily see him acting as he had been in those situations under the given cercumstances. But you just turned Xander into a vamp loving homoerotic fangirl fantasy. If you were planning this from the very begining you need to rewright this chapter because it hit hard and more than a little out of character and really spoiled it for me.

If this is a new twist to follow your flavour of the week.

Then Damn.

Just Damn.

Its an absolutely horrible plot device and i expected better from you.

On another note, Either completely cut out all mention of xander having gay sex for money or add a gay tag to the story. Under your current thread tag, that sceen isnt alowed. Even if it isnt grafficly described.


EDIT in responce to author reply.

On later review, I believe I over reacted and saw a situation that did not actualy exist. The sceens mentioned were just so close to the standardized cliche starter used by nearly all gay-vamp-xander-mary-sue's ever written that I must have jumped to conclusions. Ive been loyal to the story till this point, I won't reject it now.

My appology for over reacting.
Comments from author:
Um, I haven't turned Xander into a vamp loving homoerotic fangirl fantasy, nor was that my intention. In this fanfic Xander will (as far as the plan goes) never again willingly exchange blood with a vampire, but I needed a way to break (or as I said in the story mute) the connection between Xander and Dracula, and since a vampire (Dracula) started things it seemed logical that it would take another vampire (Penn, though originally it was going to be Angel) to end it. I decided to go with Penn simply because there is potential for Penn (not Xander or Angel, because Angel isn't in the story) to have issues about it since he does all ready have a bit of a crush on Xander.

As for the tags you are probably correct, but the reason I didn't mark this for slash originally was because I have absolutely no plans for any of the characters to actually have on-screen gay sex (even Harry who is the actual gay character in this fanfic), which means people reading for gay sex because of the slash tag would end up disappointed. Admittedly I did not realize that one off-screen gay sex scene would bother anyone so much, and for that I apologize.

I'm also sorry you didn't enjoy the chapter, but to answer your question the blood exchange between Xander and a vampire not Dracula was planned awhile back, but never was the plan to turn Xander into a vamp loving homoerotic fangirl fantasy. That's what Dracula was trying to turn him into and the new exchange is meant to stop that from happening. That's why Xander was willing to let it happen not because he's turning into a vamp ho.
Review By [IzAzEL] • Date [18 Jun 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from Alucard
Review:
The copy of money isn't really any issue. Have Harry copy a 50 then he goes out and buys a 5 dollar pack of bottled water and gets 45 in real bills back. Then deposit the real bills into the bank. Xander and Harry get money and Wal-mart or some other super store gets screwed. They already screw millions out of the average American so Xander and Harry are just taking back some of it. Not to mention they could fix up the house faster and with better quality things if they do that. Hell to keep from being caught Xander could even toss some real bills into the cash given to the store so the amount missing amount doesn't match with what they buy. Then it can't be traced back to one person.
Comments from author:
*grins* The money thing will be expanded upon a bit in the next chapter, but Xander is a more honest man than I am (first cause I'm female, and second cause I'd be right there helping Harry figure out how to do the thing properly) so I wouldn't expect Xander to join Harry in spreading fake money around.

Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Review By [Alucard] • Date [28 May 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from Elleria
Review:
Looking forward to the next bit.
Comments from author:
I've been working on it, and the rough draft is almost finished, so hopefully it won't take me forever to update again.
Review By [Elleria] • Date [20 May 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from AngelBlack
Review:
i do like the insidght you've provided into the characters in this new installation!
And.. GODDAMN IT PENN!
Comments from author:
I'm glad you liked the insights. As for Penn, well, all I can really say is "poor Penn."
(Though I plan to have fun with it/him.)
Review By [AngelBlack] • Date [17 May 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from spring
Review:
Poor Xander. I hope that he is able to get a job agian soon.
Comments from author:
Don't worry, Xander will find something - *evil grin* Eventually.
Review By [spring] • Date [16 May 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from TheLaughingMan
Review:
Another great chapter. Loved Penn's hang ups as a former Puritan.
Comments from author:
*grins* When I decided Penn was going to be in this fanfic, I realized that sexual hang-ups after getting soul-ed would first be fun since my feeling is that would go against a vampires instinct, and has the added bonus of being something totally different from Angel and to a lessor extent Spike.
Review By [TheLaughingMan] • Date [15 May 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from winnie
Review:
like it, more please?
Comments from author:
*smiles* Working on it, though I have hit a bit of snag that I need to decide/work out. Hopefully it won't take me forever to get the next chapter ready.
Review By [winnie] • Date [15 May 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from Fyrloche
Review:
Nice chapter. There is a flaw in the bank thing. Only the amount of the deposit is deposited into an account, not the actual money unless you are putting it into a safety deposit box. At the end of the day, the teller's cash would be counted and deposited into the vault. Then would be the time to make the money disappear so that the teller wouldn't get into trouble and the bank would then go nuts thinking that they had an embezzler.
Comments from author:
*smiles* Good catch. I know Harry was raised by muggles and all, but my theory is that despite that and having lived a year among muggles with Xander he (Harry) still knows very little about the way things in the muggle world work.

Of course, Xander should know that, but at the moment he's not thinking clearly (loss of job, busy ignoring certain things that happened in Sunnydale), and if he was thinking clearly he probably wouldn't do it anyway for fear that banks would have some sort of security against that sort of things.
Review By [Fyrloche] • Date [15 May 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from spring
Review:
Interesting. I hope that you are able to update this agian soon.
Comments from author:
*grins* As usual I'm not making any promises, but I do think it won't be long before chapter two is ready.
Review By [spring] • Date [13 May 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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