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Review of chapter "Surprises" from RevDorothyL
Review:
Nice to see Jack sufficiently influenced by Teal'c's opinion of Buffy to keep his inquiries on the down-low and of an unofficial kind.
Comments from author:
someone had suggested that Jack should have seen them... and had it influence him, and i thought it was a fabulous idea. Thanks Mmooch. Thanks for liking what i did with it. it was her idea, however.

peace.
Review By [RevDorothyL] • Date [21 May 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Surprises" from AllenPitt
Review:
hm.. so it's not Cassie? (new slayer). But yeah, 1st year cadet. Heh. ...Will be interesting to see how much Riley's group knows about the SGC... or what Hammond knows. The Initiative itself has been around in some form since 1943 ( see the Angel ep where they recruited him for that submarine ep) ---
Comments from author:
working on that chapter now... not the next to be posted, but it will be explosive. hehehe... in a good way... i'm having soooo much fun!!

Everyone seems to forget that the spell was cast on earth. It may have been a long time ago, but I'm not convinced there are slayers all over the universe... might be... but i'm not convinced. Besides, everyone makes it cassie. that's just too easy for sg 1 to pull a protect the dawn kind of thing, and I'm over so that... enough with the real dawn and the scoobies. smile

not saying no one left here with the slayer gene when the goauld stole them, but Willows spell was cast here. after the goauld distributed people... it could have affected cassie, i suppose, but i just find that too convenient.

so, hopefully something completely different
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [21 May 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Not of this world" from FireWolfe
Review:
I really enjoyed this chapter. Both buffy and Teal'c need peace in their lives.

Lisa
Comments from author:
thank you L.

Peace,

L
Review By [FireWolfe] • Date [21 May 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Not of this world" from Mcspender
Review:
Ya know, in case that Buffy & Teal'c tie the knot, the Scoobies are gonna get to meet Teal'c's family: Master Brata'c, Rya'c & Kar'yn.
That is gonna be a riot, specially Master Brata'c, I can imagine his first meeting with the Scoobies... oh boy I can imagine it ;).

See ya!!.
Comments from author:
so many ideas.... wow. Bratac and Buffy... what a feeling... Of course we'd have to have Giles there too... that would be an interesting meeting... big grin. i can imagine it too... and of course Rya'c and Kar'yn. smile.
Review By [Mcspender] • Date [21 May 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Not of this world" from Aeryn
Review:
Love the connection they have. Fun, indeed
Comments from author:
thank you. happy indeed...
Review By [Aeryn] • Date [21 May 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Not of this world" from RevDorothyL
Review:
Ahhh...! Buffy has SO been needing something like this, somebody with whom she can enjoy moments of peace and genuine joy, and it's past time for Teal'c to find somebody he can meditate with like this.

I agree that River Tam would enjoy the buzz and vicarious peace off of Teal'c and Buffy's thoughts during that meditation session and its immediate aftermath, if she'd been born 500 years earlier.
Comments from author:
glad you got that reference. otherwise, impossible to explain exactly what i'm going for... glad it was an ahhh moment. smiles

blue
Review By [RevDorothyL] • Date [21 May 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Not of this world" from (Recent Donor)MissingAuthor
Review:
Another great chapter, really enjoying the way you are building up the mutual attraction between Teal'c and Buffy.

Can't wait for more!

Wispr
Comments from author:
thank you. more soon. I have two chapters I'm working on. all sorts of fun and trouble. hehehe.
Review By [(Recent Donor)MissingAuthor] • Date [21 May 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Not of this world" from (Current Donor)mmooch
Review:
(Sighhhh) Some quality Buffy/Teal'c time! Pretty cool how you let them get flashes of each other's lives. Curious if this makes things better or worse for Jack. LOL! It would be super neat if he had seen the interaction between them with they came out of their meditation and smiled at each other or even overheard them leaving. Please more chapters like this!!!!
Comments from author:
i wish I'd thought of that... Jack seeing them, i mean... have to ponder that. lots more to come, I promise.

peace.

why do you keep putting idea in my head? dammit woman!
Review By [(Current Donor)mmooch] • Date [21 May 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Not of this world" from VillageOrchid
Review:
Nice extension of the previous storytelling.
Comments from author:
glad you like. smile
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [21 May 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Not of this world" from AllenPitt
Review:
Nice to see the Teal'c/Buffy scene... next up would be Jack trying to use SGC resources to research Buffy's group. Might get a visit from Riley's group if he does...
And I'm sure the NID will get wind of this somehow...
Comments from author:
hope to avoid the NID as long as possible. who knows what's gonna happen... or who's gonna visit.
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [21 May 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Not of this world" from (Current Donor)Sithspit
Review:
I'm liking.
The only issue is Buffy's protectiveness; your portrayal is really no different than almost any other author's, at least in the way you portray the level of it...no, my issue is simply this: "Oh, geez, more Protective!Buffy and Petulant!Dawn fic."

It's nothing personal, and doesn't detract from the story, it's just a preference on my part.

But I do like the 13 chapter introduction (that's what it felt like); I'm hoping this will develop and grow into more and not simply end with a parting of ways after a few more wrap-up chapters.

In any case, I enjoyed it, and thanks for writing.
Comments from author:
a) things are changing... trust me.
b) don't plan on writing bratty, childish Dawn... so over that
c)not planning to have them wonder off into the sunset.
d) buffy's either gonna have to decide to let go, or some one will make her.
you know that line about inevitability...(matrix) the train is coming. and smith is right this time... some things *are* inevitable.

i can't write Dawn as a completely different person than she was or she wouldn't be Dawn... but she's very close to being an adult... I like to think of it as her asserting actual adult independence, and I think you'll see what i mean in the next couple of chapters.

Teal'c and Buffy are just getting started. And it's going to be a bumpy but hopefully satisfying ride.

please trust me. (begging face)

peace

Blue
Review By [(Current Donor)Sithspit] • Date [21 May 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Not of this world" from eliseth
Review:
I love the speedy way you update this story :) please continue ;)
And this was another great chapter.
Comments from author:
thank you.... it's in the hands of Mr Muse... I have nothing to do with the timing thing... I'm just the writer. He thanks you for liking his story... and so do I.

peace.
Review By [eliseth] • Date [21 May 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "I Wish You Peace" from Tempe
Review:
I liked this chapter especially because of the insight of what was going on in Teal'c's mind. It'll be interesting to see how much of a future problem Jack will be in any relationship Teal'c and Buffy could possibly have. I'm really curious to see if they'll give the SGC the other part to the Gate and if there will ever be any missions where Buffy will go through the Gate. It could be a problem though since Buffy's primary objective is to guard Earth. Please post again soon and I love how quick your updates are!
Comments from author:
i think Buffy belongs guarding earth. part of guarding earth may involve off world trips, but i think she'll always be a slayer, and she has a lot of slayers to train and lead...

We will see how things go with Jack and Buffy.... Jack is a lot like an amalgam of Xander and Buffy... A lot smarter than people give him credit for, but a lot more easy going, usually than Buffy... should be interesting.

The question is, where is will Teal'c and Buffy be able to come together? The US gov't is not going to be happy about him living off base. She won't be likely to live on base. Remember how it turned out when he was in the world (later season)... Jack may not be their only obstacle. thanks for reviewing. will post as soon as mr muse allows...
Review By [Tempe] • Date [20 May 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "I Wish You Peace" from RevDorothyL
Review:
Great view of Teal'c's thoughts and feelings, and I love the bit with Teal'c and Buffy just meditating together on a picnic table bench there at the end.
Comments from author:
Very glad you like. it was interesting to explore him. i like to think that if River were to hear the togetherness between them in the days to come, she would hear peaceful sounds of leaves and water... (firefly reference, don't worry if you don't get it) I think there is great potential.

peace
Review By [RevDorothyL] • Date [20 May 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "I Wish You Peace" from (Current Donor)mmooch
Review:
Okay, kinda long review coming here, but this chapter intrigues me.

The study of Teal'c's past interests in women was enlightening, even if it was incomplete. There was that priestess who I can't remember who thought she turned her larval Goa'uld to the Tok'ra cause only to have Tanith murder her when they met face-to-face later. But I got the feeling she was more of a study in lust for him.

And if anyone could compete with Buffy was a female warrior, it would be Ishta. But it worries me that he would be disappointed in some of the compromises Buffy has made over the years as well.

It makes sense that he might not have been *in* love with his wife. That culture doesn't seem to put a lot of stock in expressive emotions, just in things like loyalty and sense of duty or obedience. In that respect, it's understandable that he hasn't fully fallen in love yet and that he would find it outside the Jaffa culture. At least by human standards of love.

I love that not even Sam could withstand comparison to Buffy. Both because the idea that he even momentarily considered her in some way, but more because when looking at the two, you would assume Sam would win as an overall desirable mate since she's so much smarter than Buffy - at least academically.

LOL! The idea of Teal'c 'melting' is a riot!

Maybe I'm reading what I want into this, but it seems that the main reason he was upset with Buffy's fight with Jack was his concern that it would drive her off, not that she was acting childish like the others suggested. And even if he didn't like what he saw in her. I do hope that she gets the chance to explain - at least to him - *why* she is so overprotective of Dawn, her underage charge.

Not the big smoochie scene like Dawn/Jon...thank goodness! That would seem extremely OOC for both of them. The fact that Buffy isn't babbling an apology is unusual enough for her, but maybe she senses that Teal'c wouldn't appreciate that approach. Will she get to teach him her preferred way to meditate as well - Tai Chi?
Comments from author:
longish response... this was a complicated chapter to write... and i suspect there are more in the offing... Teal'c is complicated.

i'm kind of answering your email in reverse (from the bottom), so bear with me...
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There could definitely be Tai Chi.

I think Teal'c brings out something peaceful in Buffy... so the babblicious Buffy may not make too many appearances... not in their relationship anyway... I think, like the 'dumb blonde' that's often a front for throwing people off... the same way Jack acts kind of aw shucks, i'm a 'regular dumb guy' when people who become generals and save the world are neither regular nor dumb... She's no need of pretense, and I think she senses that would only turn Teal'c off.

Smoochies would be much too soon and that would be much too public a venue. healing needs to happen anyway... they're strangers. Unlike Jon and Dawn, they haven't spent time talking earlier in the evening.

I think he'd understand the overprotective parent part better than anyone... he's a parent. The squabbling with Jack does bug the hell out of him, but he's *already* seen her quality... so he wants to figure out what predominates - that or the tiny hoyden. her reaction to him seeing the bad side of her, was an important beginning.

As for compromises... he's killed hundreds of hundreds, saving thousands of thousands. he has blood on his hands. so he can't afford to judge her too harshly, now, can he? Ishta was killing others of her own kind, often on the same side, in order to 'prefer' her warriors... There's something about that that borders on playing god. That's a bit's different to saving some instead of all, when one is a slave... even though she probably killed fewer people than he did. Like Angelus, Ishta also had no problem with what she did. Buffy and Teal'c both have a great deal of trouble with the bad things they've had to do.

Arranged marriages, the best of them, are founded on respect, and affection. Some are full of love, but that's not an expectation. his was a suitable match. When he left to pursue the dream of freedom, like all men who pursue that dream, his family paid a high price. It's one of the things about him that bugs me the most. Why didn't the SGC allow him to bring his kin? It would have made sense, especially once they brought them to the SGC... Anyway, they prolly didn't want any of them to have 'couples' or families... something that means more actors to pay, and fans aren't as excited about the 'single' hotties...

I didn't address the woman that Tanith kills b/c she doesn't add anything to the analysis... not every woman in someones life is relevant... (as one of my detractors had said of Ishta. I think she was relevant, and recent, but it did complicate the chapter...)

I don't think Teal'c ever considered Sam as a mate, but as a friend, he sees the qualities she possesses, the same way he sees the ones Daniel posesses... both of which are important to him.

ok, that's almost a new chapter... peace... thanks for your thoughts... hope you make it through this. grin.
Review By [(Current Donor)mmooch] • Date [20 May 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
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