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Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Elleria
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More please? This is so very good. Maybe a bit with Grissom and Brass in Sunnydale in Terran Jedi? Please?
Review By [Elleria] • Date [15 May 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Marcel
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I'm with eriktheviking, it does seem like I read it before. Interesting, though :)

Unlike the other reviewers, I'm a little wary of a sequel, because it might mean that you'll bring the CSI Las Vegas characters in the story. This might "dilute" it somewhat, because you need to take time to treat all chars... that's hard to do well. (Plus, if you start treating them as individuals, and show them interacting one-on-one with characters from SG-1 and Buffy, it's even worse - the number of relationships grows exponentially.)

Anyway... you're a great writer, so I'm looking forward to anything you write :)
Review By [Marcel] • Date [14 May 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from AlphaBeta
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Hope you tie this in to the main story. Hope to see a sequal.
Review By [AlphaBeta] • Date [14 May 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from LianneB
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Very nice. Stands alone, but also sets up for possible sequels. Best way to write a story. (and a crossover without including anyone outside of the CSI universe, nice trick)

But wagons? That kind of threw me off, wondering where you live, since I've never heard the segments of a train called anything but 'cars'. I kept picturing something like a covered wagon like the early pioneers used going west.
Review By [LianneB] • Date [14 May 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from missinglink
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Nice tack on to the larger story. Unsure the ultimate use/purpose of maybe including them in the larger Terran Jedi story as a whole, but then I am simply the one commenting. It is up to the author to make sense of how to incorporate it.

All the characters played well in respect to how they are portrayed on the show. Will be interesting to see the cause of the damage and dead demon. Maybe a splice of the description of the battle in between further investegation by Grissom and whomever he might take with him to Sunnydale. JMHO, but you might be best off writing another one off with CSI Vegas' sojourn to Sunnydale completely seperate from the main story. That way it doesn't disrupt the flow of the main story, but still tells their involvement in the fight with the night (or is that with the knight?). Ahh well, just wanted to says props for a nice addition. Later.
Review By [missinglink] • Date [14 May 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Recent Donor)MissingAuthor
Review:
What a wonderful crossover and I so look forward to this journey you are offering... ;)

Wispr
Review By [(Recent Donor)MissingAuthor] • Date [14 May 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Inquisitor
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looking forward to a sequel if there's one...eventually there would be a federal criminal beaurau that deals with all of this type of crime instead of just the NID taking over it all the time...hoping there would be an X-File crossover...the NID-Initiative is more of a research&tactical response to the demon threat but with the government being aware of the demons, they would need an investigative branch that deals with this type of crime that's being buried in normal criminal investigations....

anyway that amtrack tech would be feasable now that the government has access to pre-imperial SW tech...the biggest problem with energy generation had always been its storage...with Xander's capacitor, any extra energy can be stored for later use....

would like to see Scully&Mulder and the Lone Gunmen finding out about the demon world or about the Jedi in one of their investigations...i'm surprised that Mulder hasn't gone to Sunnydale yet if he exists in this storyverse...
Review By [Inquisitor] • Date [14 May 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Past Donor)MyTia
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“Sunnydale…” Grissom looked up. “Looks like I have a research project for any spare time I might have.”

“Be careful what you find,” muttered Brass as he stood up and walked for the door. “Be very careful"


Do I smell a sequel? ;)


I really liked the story - especially the conversation in the beginning where you just knew that something was going to happen.
Review By [(Past Donor)MyTia] • Date [14 May 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from eriktheviking
Review:
Great crossover with lots of potential for development. It also seems familiar, has it been posted elsewhere?

Well done & thanks.
Review By [eriktheviking] • Date [14 May 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
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