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Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Current Donor)dogbertcarroll
Review:
Excellent first chapter. It's a good setup and fits the situation.
Review By [(Current Donor)dogbertcarroll] • Date [18 Jun 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from BlueEyedJedi
Review:
Perhaps the slayer spirit cannot survive being split in to so many slayers, or the presence of so many slayers allows the first to bring an army of Terrikhans to earth (Or Upgrade all the current vamps to Terrikhan level of power), Or this Eris is a projection of the first to stop Willow from creating an army of slayers (Something that the first doesn't want.). All in all an interesting premise, I am looking forward to see where you take it.

Peace
Review By [BlueEyedJedi] • Date [17 Jun 09] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Mcspender
Review:
Hail Eris!!!!.
Nothing & everything happens 'cause she doesn't wanna to happen and, yet, it happens... kinda self contradictory, but that's Eris to you. As a Pope of my own church of Eris, I declare this fic full of win, and it shall be recced to my fellow Discordians.
Erhm, sorry, my discordianism kinda show it by itself... now to the real review;).

Now, the First is gonna know how nasty is an enraged Olympian... specially, the one who started the
little mess known as the Trojan war.

See ya!!!.

PS: Hail Eris!!!
Comments from author:
I should warn that I am not a Discordian, so please forgive any misrepresentation of Eris. I will however try my best to do justice to her character.
Review By [Mcspender] • Date [17 Jun 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from djhardim
Review:
Good beginning

“The power that makes the Slayer is finite.”

It sounds as if the plan to empower all of the Potentials is doomed to failure. Any powers that they might receive would be too diminished to be of any benefit.
Review By [djhardim] • Date [17 Jun 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from SamDragon
Review:
Interesting,How will they beat the first then?
Review By [SamDragon] • Date [17 Jun 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Susly
Review:
It's been a very long time since I read comics on a regular basis. I don't recognize this character(Eris). Has she been around for awhile or just in the past few years?

About the story, I like the plot. I've always thought that Willow was manipulated into raising Buffy somehow. The dialogue seems a bit to formal though. I also think Willow would be a bit more suspicious than she seems here.

Overall pretty good though. I look forward to see where this story goes.
Comments from author:
Actually, I haven't introduced any Marvel characters yet. You'll start seeing where they come in next chapter. Eris is the Goddess of Strife and Discord according to Greek Mythology.
And thank you for the comments, I'll try and work on the dialog.
I always thought it was strange that "Research Girl" wouldn't check her sources of info, arrogance maybe but that wouldn't explain why Tara didn't check either.
Review By [Susly] • Date [17 Jun 09] • Rating [8 out of 10]
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