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Review of chapter "Anger" from Nyvanna
Review:
Me likey :) go her for grabbing the gun, i really like this so far. Poor nathanial, that was a good scene, even if it was a bit sad for him.
p.s just saw your response, they're doing a tv movie? since when? cool
Comments from author:
glad you enjoyed - and thanks so much for all your reviews - its really helped kick my ass to write more xxx

TV movie - yep saw it on scifi site - problem is they are targeting age 15-35 males ... are they mad!!!
Review By [Nyvanna] • Date [29 Jul 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Anger" from littleoldme
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I really love this fic so far! I love that they remember her, but she doesn't remember them, and I loved Shang enforcing his dominance, and you left us on such a cliffhanger! More soon, please.
Review By [littleoldme] • Date [29 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Anger" from WinterRayne
Review:
Absolutely LOVE this fic!!!!!!
Comments from author:
thanks thanks thanks xxx
Review By [WinterRayne] • Date [28 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Anger" from mellusene
Review:
I really like the premise of this story. A couple of notes. I have not read Anita Blake, but I have read allot of Anita Blake Fanfiction. I believe the names of the wolf pack enforcers are: Shang Da and Jamil. I'm not positive about the spelling of the second one, but I am sure that it is Shang DA and not Shang LA. You could also use a beta for a few missed mistakes.
I am looking forward to reading more.
Mellusene
Comments from author:
thanks xxx

yep you are right went on wiki ... and now edited the story
Review By [mellusene] • Date [28 Jul 09] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Anger" from pixxy
Review:
Wow, great chapter. This is a great story already. Wishing there was another chapter.:)
Comments from author:
thanks xxx
Review By [pixxy] • Date [28 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Anger" from Xeelia
Review:
You MUST keep going!!! I love this story!

One critique, though it could be explained by shock, Dawn says her sister and her friends will come for her but you already identified Buffy as dead.

Is Dawn still the Key or is she something else or just a normal girl?

Will other Buffy'verse characters show up???

Keep writing!!!! :)
Comments from author:
ah ha but dawn is keeping up the pretence that buffy is alive,... so to all the monsters Buffy is alive as that is who they are scared off. Hence - sister and her friends will rescue her. rather than some unknown witch, xander and a disgraced vampire.

what is dawn now....ha ... wait and see... all wil be revealed
Review By [Xeelia] • Date [28 Jul 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "she wakes" from namegoeshere
Review:
Okay so my guess is the monks changed things around so Anita's preggo scare a few books back wasn't a scare? And poof there's Dawn? I think it makes more sense than Anita adopting a kid because Anita talks about how she would never want to bring a kid into her world. (I think she tells that to Edward after meeting Peter.) It would be hard to see Anita doing a number of the things she has done if you try to interject Dawn into her life and keeping the current AB timeline, mostly do to the fact Anita is only 23. Unless you change her age, either Dawn's or Anita.

LKH said that Anita is so much more of an... beach... than Merry because Anita is only 22 and Merry is 29, so Merry is older and knows better. (Antia has had one b-day in the books since that interview.)

I really want to see what else happens but don't let it get too rushed. Maybe add a little more visual detail? Not that I am one to talk... hehehe
Good luck!!!
Comments from author:
well I dont want to give too much away, so dont try too hard to figure it out but it will all make sense i promise

I am disregarding the last few books of AB as I hate the way they are going
Review By [namegoeshere] • Date [19 Jul 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "she wakes" from Chaoskitten
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Shang-da is the wolf enforcer. The leopards would likely be *umms* Merle.
Comments from author:
thanks xx
Review By [Chaoskitten] • Date [14 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "she wakes" from Nyvanna
Review:
I really like it so far, as for enforcer names i know a few but to be honest if you don't know what their characters are like it would be best either making up new ones or maybe doing a small bit of research to make them as close to character as possible, but eh t'is up to you, i like how you've written it so far and well done for not making Dawn all pathetic, she fought yay!!!!! go Dawn! :D
Comments from author:
thanks... do you know in my research found out they are doing a TV movie of AB
Review By [Nyvanna] • Date [13 Jul 09] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "she wakes" from AriaDragoncrest
Review:
Excellent. Jamil is one enforcer.
Comments from author:
sweet - thanks

whats his character like?
Review By [AriaDragoncrest] • Date [12 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "she wakes" from Xeelia
Review:
AWESOME! I love Anita/Buffy crossovers and this is great so far!!
Comments from author:
thanks xxx
Review By [Xeelia] • Date [12 Jul 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "she wakes" from Nakita
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Interesting twist, making her Anita's daughter. Can't wait to find out where this is going.
Comments from author:
hee hee... im going darkish with this one...
Review By [Nakita] • Date [12 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "she wakes" from AllenPitt
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yikes. presumably adopted by Anita, not considered her 'bio' daughter? And 'the test' is to see if she's now a lycanthrope? Hm, presumably Willow et al don't remember her anymore. If they revive Buffy, will Buffy still remember her? That could get weird.
So the monk sent her elsewhere, with new protectors, but screwed up the spell so her own memories were not 're-set'? what an idiot.
Comments from author:
oh this ones going to be twisty and slightly dark... and agsty...
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [12 Jul 09] • Not Rated
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