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Review of chapter "No Time for Questions" from Mcspender
Ya know, I rather like to see this as some kind of evil gelstat, 'cause the all hell breaking loose scenario has been done before.
And the last part was cool man =).

See ya!!.
Comments from author:
It's not all, and it;s not hell, but "all hell breaking loose" does sort of cover it.
Review By [Mcspender] • Date [22 Jul 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "No Time for Questions" from GreydonCreed
Jenny Brandt lead a breakout from Hell and brought some of the Damned with her? This sounds like a takeoff of Brimstone (not a bad thing). A excellent series that lasted only half a season; you think John Glover is good as Lionel Luthor, you should see him as the Devil in Brimstone.

It was the last soul that clinched it for me, and it showed in how much trouble everyone is in. Looking forward to more soon.
Comments from author:
You're getting warm (no pun intended) with the Brimstone reference.

And I think I saw a Brimstone/Smallville crossover somewhere with the premise that they were the same individual.
Review By [GreydonCreed] • Date [22 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "No Time for Questions" from ReadsaLot
Oh son of a....


Ho boy.
Comments from author:
Yeah. Tim.
Review By [ReadsaLot] • Date [22 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "No Time for Questions" from batzulger
Feels like RedJack from Wolf in the Fold or maybe Rose Tattoo the Spirit of Murder. Awesome story no matter who it is...even with Kennedy. :)
Review By [batzulger] • Date [22 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "No Time for Questions" from Cattra
I'm gonna assume that Tim is Timothy McVeigh the Oklahoma City Bomber. It doesn't bother me at all and it seems to fit with the other ghosts or spirits, whatever they turn out to be. If particularly evil and dead American criminals came back, he'd be near the top of the list. Anyway, I really enjoy your work and I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
Review By [Cattra] • Date [22 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Kill Them Before They Grow" from physicsteach
Awesome story so far, and your NYC Slayer crew is a fun collection of random oddballs.
Review By [physicsteach] • Date [21 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Kill Them Before They Grow" from littleoldme
This is even creepier than the first one- well done!
Review By [littleoldme] • Date [21 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Kill Them Before They Grow" from AllenPitt
I wonder if it's possible to have a live video feed of the map.. maybe going out to iPhones? ie people in the field could thus have an up-to-date map to look at as they race around town. Just a thought.
Downside to the plan: there's a good chance the police are going to notice these girls 'investigating' on their own sooner or later. They really need a bat-phone to the commissioner or something.
But this is starting to look like a huge problem... and hey, "Winchester III" ? related? Are they going to need lots of salt?
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [21 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "What a Deed I Done" from valdimarian
Wow... I was almost kidding about Azazel last chapter... looks like I hit the nail pretty much square on the head with that one... Hmm, that might be a pretty good cross-point right there, with the nun who took the guy's kid and ran... what better place to run than one of the biggest cities in the world? Of course if you wanted to write a whole other story you could go to LA and have a whole separate movie cross where they run to LA and Azazel follows, leading to the AI team hunting Azazel down and finding a way to kill something with no body (again).

Just a few ideas.
Review By [valdimarian] • Date [20 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "What a Deed I Done" from AllenPitt
Kind of like the 'find demons' spell Willow finally managed in S7? it's almost as if this is a bigger problem than Jenny ever was. Ouch. Also kind of outside their normal area of expertise. Immaterial spirits, not much experience with. Well, a few times. They definitely need the Winchesters. or maybe the Charmed Ones. The COs would settle this quick. Now to make things really bad, someone should make one of those talisman sticks and corporealize these evil spirit...thingies....
Comments from author:
No, it isn't typically in their wheelhouse. Unfortunately, they're the ones who have to deal with it.
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [20 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "What a Deed I Done" from Marcel
Damn, I had to read the other reviews :) I'll second valdimarian's idea - I love Castle and it might be an interesting mix. However, I realize it might not fit into this story.

Good thing the "ghost" seems to abandon those possessed at some point, or Allison would have been worse off.
Review By [Marcel] • Date [20 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "There Are No Reasons" from KJA
Cassady working for internal affairs is interesting. I was wondering what she was going to do after leaving homicide. It does provide some interesting possibilities especially if their is a run in with her old colleagues in homicide. In thinking about Cassady's position I am a bit surprise that they did not develop contacts in the New York City Medical Examiners office. The ME position was extremely useful in another show I watched, Forever Knight.

Cassady employment does raise a question though. If she has a job then what was the point of the last chapter of Interim? It is not like they need to pay her a full salary now as her living expenses are being covered by her police work. And as we have seen the people who get involved in fighting mystical/demonic threats in the Buffyverse do so as volunteers have been forced by circumstance into it without a choice. Sure there is Angel Investigations but even that only earned money on a case by case basis and had no baring on why they were doing the job. Given what we see in this chapter I would think that Cassady might get a part-time consulting fee when providing firearms training but not something that would cause a serious drain on Contingent resources. It would be different is she had no other means of employment.

I noticed that the Slayers that Nina took to the range were Milla, Harriet and Kennedy. If I remember correctly they are the Slayers in the contingent that are over 18. However I noticed that Buffy was not included. Is this due so the fact that she is presently under legal sanction at the moment or is she already trained in firearm use and safety? The few times Buffy had a gun in her hands on the show she seemed to know what she was doing if I recall correctly.

I partly agree with one of other reviewers over Frankie not trying to find help for the voice in her head. However I also understand that it can be vary difficult for people to seek out help with a problem, especially one of a mental nature. On top of that Frankie might not have any good friends or family in the area who she can turn to. Given that she is likely untrained and using a baseball bat she seems like a likely candidate for being stopped by a patrolling Slayer and being the some one the contingent trys to help.

I don't now what to make of the scene with Tutuola and Munch other than you are introducing the primary police investigators and setting up the connection between them and the Contingent via Cassady.

The final scene gives us our first murder of the story and also answers whether or not multiple people are being influenced. Allison if she does not commit suicide might be the first link the police find to what is going on.

Given the nature of the threat we have seen so far it looks like this story might just be in a way the opposite of SlayerZ. That is, instead of the Slayers getting burned by legal complication for intruding into a police investigation and having to swallow their pride and take whatever offer they could get in the aftermath, the police are going to be getting tangled up in mystical rules and be the ones doing so when this is all over.

Looking forward the the next chapter.
Comments from author:
-- because Buffy was trying to hire her full-time, and the most Kennedy could swing was part-time, so Cassady had to stay in the PD.

IA is the wrong place for someone like Cassady; but it's the only place that'll take her at the moment.

Frankie's not trying to get help because she's being encouraged not to. She only has partial control over her actions -- it's why she can make sure her son and ex-husband are safe, but not everyone. Frankie is comparatively lucky, although it might not seem that way to her at the moment.

As for Buffy and firearms: She really just wasn't interested in learning, herself.
Review By [KJA] • Date [19 Jul 09] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "There Are No Reasons" from valdimarian
Man, is Azazel hanging around or something? (See the movie Fallen if you don't get the reference)

Oh, I thought of another TV show based in NYC, but it probably wouldn't make a good cross with your story: Castle. Though it would be interesting to have Buffy run into a famous author who looks JUST like Caleb...
Review By [valdimarian] • Date [18 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "There Are No Reasons" from JasonBarnett
I'm afraid, even with your attempt at an explanation in the previous chapter, that this makes absolutely no sense to me.

edit: I just don't get the hows of what's going on.
Comments from author:
Makes sense to me, but then, I'm the author, so I have the big picture. What's confusing you? Ask and I'll try to answer.

Edited: It's not all supposed to make sense right away. It should make sense in a few parts.
Review By [JasonBarnett] • Date [18 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "There Are No Reasons" from AllenPitt
this is almost more like something the Winchesters would deal with. Spirits / possession, maybe ancient curses... research party!! . Kinda reminds me of that ep with the school teacher / student murder suicide endlessly repeating.
Cassaday relaying info will help,'d be smart to rotate in slayers from out of state, so the cops don't see the same names as before turning up everywhere...
Comments from author:
Fortunately, they have a Winchester available to help.

But yes, I deliberately set this up to be atypical for a Buffyverse tale, but still fit within the wheelhouse -- a la "I Only Have Eyes for You," as you note.
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [17 Jul 09] • Not Rated
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